User talk:Snowball

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Revision as of 08:11, 24 November 2011

Thanks! XD

I decided to flip through the recent changes page today, and I noticed that one of my pages had been edited. At first I was scared, but when I went to check, nothing much had changed, besides a spelling error being fixed. So I'd like to thank you for fixing a spelling error. That page took me the longest to complete, and I tried to read it over a few times to fix errors, guess I missed one.

So, thank you for enjoying my story, and thank you for taking the initiative by fixing the spelling error in the page I had made. Can I ask, is it okay by you if you can read through my newest story I've been working on? It's called Remember. I just need an honest opinion on it. --Heyoeveryone October 20 2011

You actually read through the story! Thank you so much! You also edited the some of the pages as well. Which I am forever thankful. I didn't think I'd have that many errors, but then again, at least it wasn't all of the 42 pages. Once again, thank you. Oh and what's your opinion of the story? --Heyoeveryone October 21 2011

It's perfectly fine if you edit every mistake. In fact, it makes the website become much more polished and better for people to understand. As for Remember. I was actually going to make it a extremely violent story with lots of death scenes and overall tragedy. But I think at around the second page, I decided to go a bit more of a 'learn about your past' kind of feel. Anyway, I hope you liked the story. Perhaps when I finish writing the story, you can perhaps check it for grammatical errors.

Thank you once again! --Heyoeveryone 22 October 2011

First of all. Thank so much again!! I know I've said this to you too many times but I just can't say it enough. The amount of pages I will be throwing out though will become less in the next two weeks. I have tests coming up, so I need to study. Your also going to start reviewing as well? Great! Just make sure you follow the format I use.

Let pages overlap? I kind of don't understand what you mean by that. If you mean that I should use links from other stories, then, I don't want to. That's why I put the 'R:' Before I do anything else. --Heyoeveryone 23 October 2011

Ah I understand. If that happens to you, then the best thing you should do is to call it (( Die(2) )). That's what i'd do. As for the public category thing. Maybe suggest that to the admin Platypus. --Heyoeveryone 23 October 2011

It should look like this:

This story has some pages that need work. Check the (( discussion )) tab to see them. -- Signature

You can edit it around and stuff, just stay along these lines. --Heyoeveryone 20:24, 15 November 2011 (UTC)

Hey! I read the review you recently posted up! Try to make your next review longer than this one, as this review was only two lines, say perhaps around one paragraph. You also followed by the format pretty well, except you forgot to bold the names of the different parts, and place italics on the preview. I hope that you will continue to make more reviews, and that with each one, you'll become increasingly better! --Heyoeveryone 09:56, 12 November 2011 (UTC)

I actually like that idea! Linking pages that need work in the discussion page of the first, that's some smart thinking. A good idea is to put some sort of little line at the bottom of the page so that other writers know that some pages need some expanding. I suggest you don't do that on the 'DO NOT EDIT' stories though, they wrote that for a reason. Also, make the line in italics, and put your name beside it, so that the reader knows it's a different section. --Heyoeveryone 23:37, 12 November 2011 (UTC)

Genesis

Hey, I've made the first few pages of that 'God' story we talked about in the idea pitches section. It strayed off the idea I originally had with the gods and such, so uhh I wouldn't know how this would end, but I certainly like this introduction better. I'd like your opinion on it. Links in the title. Also, do you want to do some writing? I put this under as a side project for me, so the updates here will be very slow. --Heyoeveryone 08:41, 21 November 2011 (UTC)

Read both pages you put up. Needs a lot of polish, what do I mean? It means that you need to re-read your work and check for errors. I know, it's a painful process, but it has to be done. What I've read so far is extremely, do not know how you were able to transition into the god meeting, but hey, you did it.

Oh! I just noticed and read the idea you had for Remember. This is actually an interesting idea, if you had told me this while I was writing Chapter 1, I would have implemented that choice, but now, I'm trying to get through Chapter 2, thus finishing the story (it's only going to be 2 Chapters). If the opportunity arises, I may try to add it in this section of the story. --Heyoeveryone 08:47, 22 November 2011 (UTC)

I'd say leave the Devil out until the reader reaches second highest state (which I think is Holy), then he can be just some sort of vandal, leaving a path of destruction in its wake. Once you notice this, you can do one of two things:

• Call upon your friends to destroy him
• Get rid of him yourself

On the evil side, there should also be a choice to have a 'Saviour' or an 'Angel' to come in and try to stop this madness by helping the people in distress. Again, you will have to choose between two choices when you see this occurring:

• Call upon the Devil
• Get rid of him yourself

Notice anything? It's basically an 'assist' or 'lone wolf' choice. XD. Also, the status indicators, we just need a basic one box and two column setup. That will just basically hold 'Godly state' then beside it will be the state your in. You can add more if you want. --Heyoeveryone 19:38, 22 November 2011 (UTC)

I made a template!!!! Have a look and share your thoughts. It's my first time with that so, if it's a bit odd to use, just tell me.

Like it? --Heyoeveryone 08:11, 24 November 2011 (UTC)