User talk:Snowball
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Thanks! XD
I decided to flip through the recent changes page today, and I noticed that one of my pages had been edited. At first I was scared, but when I went to check, nothing much had changed, besides a spelling error being fixed. So I'd like to thank you for fixing a spelling error. That page took me the longest to complete, and I tried to read it over a few times to fix errors, guess I missed one.
So, thank you for enjoying my story, and thank you for taking the initiative by fixing the spelling error in the page I had made. Can I ask, is it okay by you if you can read through my newest story I've been working on? It's called Remember. I just need an honest opinion on it. --Heyoeveryone October 20 2011
You actually read through the story! Thank you so much! You also edited the some of the pages as well. Which I am forever thankful. I didn't think I'd have that many errors, but then again, at least it wasn't all of the 42 pages. Once again, thank you. Oh and what's your opinion of the story? --Heyoeveryone October 21 2011
It's perfectly fine if you edit every mistake. In fact, it makes the website become much more polished and better for people to understand. As for Remember. I was actually going to make it a extremely violent story with lots of death scenes and overall tragedy. But I think at around the second page, I decided to go a bit more of a 'learn about your past' kind of feel. Anyway, I hope you liked the story. Perhaps when I finish writing the story, you can perhaps check it for grammatical errors.
Thank you once again! --Heyoeveryone 22 October 2011
First of all. Thank so much again!! I know I've said this to you too many times but I just can't say it enough. The amount of pages I will be throwing out though will become less in the next two weeks. I have tests coming up, so I need to study. Your also going to start reviewing as well? Great! Just make sure you follow the format I use.
Let pages overlap? I kind of don't understand what you mean by that. If you mean that I should use links from other stories, then, I don't want to. That's why I put the 'R:' Before I do anything else. --Heyoeveryone 23 October 2011
Ah I understand. If that happens to you, then the best thing you should do is to call it (( Die(2) )). That's what i'd do. As for the public category thing. Maybe suggest that to the admin Platypus. --Heyoeveryone 23 October 2011
It should look like this:
This story has some pages that need work. Check the (( discussion )) tab to see them. -- Signature
You can edit it around and stuff, just stay along these lines. --Heyoeveryone 20:24, 15 November 2011 (UTC)
Hey! I read the review you recently posted up! Try to make your next review longer than this one, as this review was only two lines, say perhaps around one paragraph. You also followed by the format pretty well, except you forgot to bold the names of the different parts, and place italics on the preview. I hope that you will continue to make more reviews, and that with each one, you'll become increasingly better! --Heyoeveryone 09:56, 12 November 2011 (UTC)
I actually like that idea! Linking pages that need work in the discussion page of the first, that's some smart thinking. A good idea is to put some sort of little line at the bottom of the page so that other writers know that some pages need some expanding. I suggest you don't do that on the 'DO NOT EDIT' stories though, they wrote that for a reason. Also, make the line in italics, and put your name beside it, so that the reader knows it's a different section. --Heyoeveryone 23:37, 12 November 2011 (UTC)
It's been a while! I check back once every six months really just to see if people request anything such as yourself. Sorry about the late response. As for Remember the story is yours to continue writing! I may check in more to perhaps add a page or two, perhaps tweak the story. Few points I'd like to make sure happens story wise. (Also spoilers)
Firstly, the captor is obviously the brother. The reason he captured him if I recall correctly was due to your characters constant bullying as a child and few major events recently, these events you can make yourself, but they must be significant (but not unrealistic), you could spin it so the captor 'loved' the girlfriend. Secondly, they got captured when May, William, your captor, and yourself went on a trip to a national park. This was mainly to patch up relationships between yourself and your brother. Obviously this does not work. During the struggle you hit your head against a tree causing the amnesia. Thirdly, ensure that yourself (the main character) feels super bad about what he has done to not only his brother/captor, but to May and William.
Lastly, the endings. Have as many as you want, but I'd want an ending where you not only save everyone, but save the captor/brother from dying. Why? Because if you manage to escape (by yourself or with others) there'll be one last conversation between you and your brother. Here the reader can choose to spout constant hate at him, causing the brother to either kill himself or try to kill you (again probably), or tell him that you're deeply sorry and mention that you are a new man due to the amnesia and you want to start again. If the reader chooses the latter, your brother is saved. (And promptly sent to jail if you wish).
That's a lot to take in. If you wish to continue Remember please use these story points. Also, thank you. I've always been meaning to finish Remember, the time just never came around for me to continue it. --Heyoeveryone 12:10, 4 June 2015 (UTC)
Genesis
Hey, I've made the first few pages of that 'God' story we talked about in the idea pitches section. It strayed off the idea I originally had with the gods and such, so uhh I wouldn't know how this would end, but I certainly like this introduction better. I'd like your opinion on it. Links in the title. Also, do you want to do some writing? I put this under as a side project for me, so the updates here will be very slow. --Heyoeveryone 08:41, 21 November 2011 (UTC)
Read both pages you put up. Needs a lot of polish, what do I mean? It means that you need to re-read your work and check for errors. I know, it's a painful process, but it has to be done. What I've read so far is extremely, do not know how you were able to transition into the god meeting, but hey, you did it.
Oh! I just noticed and read the idea you had for Remember. This is actually an interesting idea, if you had told me this while I was writing Chapter 1, I would have implemented that choice, but now, I'm trying to get through Chapter 2, thus finishing the story (it's only going to be 2 Chapters). If the opportunity arises, I may try to add it in this section of the story. --Heyoeveryone 08:47, 22 November 2011 (UTC)
I'd say leave the Devil out until the reader reaches second highest state (which I think is Holy), then he can be just some sort of vandal, leaving a path of destruction in its wake. Once you notice this, you can do one of two things:
- Call upon your friends to destroy him
- Get rid of him yourself
On the evil side, there should also be a choice to have a 'Saviour' or an 'Angel' to come in and try to stop this madness by helping the people in distress. Again, you will have to choose between two choices when you see this occurring:
- Call upon the Devil
- Get rid of him yourself
Notice anything? It's basically an 'assist' or 'lone wolf' choice. XD. Also, the status indicators, we just need a basic one box and two column setup. That will just basically hold 'Godly state' then beside it will be the state your in. You can add more if you want. --Heyoeveryone 19:38, 22 November 2011 (UTC)
I made a template!!!! Have a look and share your thoughts. It's my first time with that so, if it's a bit odd to use, just tell me.
| Genesis | ||
| God State: | {{{God State}}} | |
Like it? --Heyoeveryone 08:11, 24 November 2011 (UTC)
Sounds like a plan. Anyway, we're making a pretty good team. You typing up the page, while I just read it over and expand it. Try to explain new characters or choices so the reader knows what he's doing. More importantly, try to make sure that Harris gets back to his God Building work.--Heyoeveryone 07:36, 27 November 2011 (UTC)
Special Pages
"Wanted" pages are unwritten pages that have links leading to them. In other words, it's a list of all the red links in every page on the site. --Platypus 03:20, 29 November 2011 (UTC)
There are no "Unwanted" pages; there are "Unwatched" pages. When you edit a page, there are two check boxes, one for minor edits and one for watching the page. For me, the 'watch' box is always pre-checked, for whatever good that does. Any page anyone creates with that box not checked goes on the Unwatched list. --Platypus 12:39, 29 November 2011 (UTC)
Thanks for the heads up about the collapsed Adult Section. All I had to do was reverse Jeb's edit to fix it. Somehow I doubt he's going to be around for long. --Platypus 16:42, 17 December 2011 (UTC)
Signature
Hi. Thanks for the offer though I haven't noticed myself doing it yet. Probably cause I pointed out it might happen. Isn't that always the way things work? I'm also not sure what you mean by customizing my signature, what signature? o.o -- Cpt. Devonin
Toolbar? I don't see that too often... only on certain pages, I think it has to do with my phone not having enough memory to display everything on a page all the time. Thank you for the information, but I think manually including the date would give me too much to type and I'm not sure I could really benefit from setting up a signature on my phone if I need to see the toolbar to add it. :) -- Cpt. Devonin
Wiki RPG
Yes, it's advertising, but it's advertising something that used to be part of this site, and it was put there by one this site's original sysops four years ago. I don't think it needs any attention. But good job actually finding it after all this time! --Platypus 16:47, 20 December 2011 (UTC)
Regarding Bloodsport.
Ooh, nice find. I hadn't exactly meant for it to be kept a secret for now, but I guess it technically is without any links anywhere else. xD If you don't mind me asking, exactly how did you find it? Orphaned pages? (Even though it technically is orphaned, it really isn't. >.>)
As for your style, if you like how you do intros, keep doing it that way. No reason to change unless it's something you really want. I kinda like the quick, "Hey, get ready, bro." kind of intros, but I feel like the stories I come up with are better suited for slightly longer intros. There is, by the way, some extra info on Bloodsport. lying around another "project" of mine. Shouldn't be too hard to find, really, but it's out there if you want to know more.
Right now, it's only in a slightly-planned stage. While logic would dictate that I wait until I know more about my own idea to start writing the intro, making that intro sort of solidified the whole "I'm actually going to write this, damnit" feeling that I need for motivation. Of course, the whole part about the page not being shitty after all certainly doesn't hinder that process any. (After all, I tend to be my own harshest critic for a number of reasons, and I figure that there's at LEAST one inaccuracy or anachronism somewhere on that page, but, oh well.) Hopefully I will have the first character's intro up by tomorrow, a character who'll experience the bloodsport through the traditional ladder rules.
Anyways, that's just my rambling response. --TheElderOnes 03:41, 21 December 2011 (UTC)
Yeah, that's the page. And as for the page view count or whatever, that sounds about right. --TheElderOnes 21:52, 21 December 2011 (UTC)
Replying here because you replied in your original Bloodsport. section. :I
First off, man, no need to apologize for anything. I love feedback, positive or negative, and you were right about having to clarify that bit. I've done that now, and thanks. But yes, I currently have all the stories I've written woven together in a sort of miniverse. Bloodsport. is in that miniverse, but it's a separate story from what I had planned for Bethany and those around her. If I ever get some more work done in Bloodsport. I might go back to The Diary, as there's plenty to go on in there... --TheElderOnes 06:24, 21 June 2012 (UTC)
Mockery
I'll give it a once over but I probably won't be adding to it for a little bit. I'd like to hit at least 250 'pages' on Sixty Minutes before I consider writing anything else lest I get too distracted. :)
By that time I'll probably have a better idea of what kind of style you're going for too. Thank you for considering me nonetheless. -- Cpt. Devonin
A Copy/Pasting Favour... >.>
Hi again,
I was wondering if you'd be willing to do me a favour. I've written myself into a bit of a corner (reader has to select a combination, I don't just want to link every wrong combination to a generic "WRONG!" to make it easy to spot the right answer but the time reducing nature prevents me from just making a loop too) and the only solution I see is to write essentially the same thing 8-10 times or just write it once and have someone copypasta it for me (where it'd be easy to adjust as necessary).
I was wondering, if I wrote what I'd like copied and linked you that page, plus the pages I'd like it copied too, would you be willing to take the 5-10 minutes (or less) it'd take to just copy/paste them?
If you have another solution though, I'm open to that too. No worries either way though since I'm sure I'll figure something out if you're too busy or would rather not. :)
I only ask because of your offer to fix my formatting issues, I've bugged Platypus enough (I think >.>) and I'm not sure where else to ask for a hand (nobody seems to check the General Discussion anymore.)
grumblegrumble stupidphone grumblegrumble -- Cpt. Devonin
Hiya,
If you could copy the contents of this page to the following: here, here, here, here, here, here, here, here, here, here, and here that'd be awesome. :)
At your liesure, of course, and anything that needs to be changed from there I can do myself with relative ease. Just call me lazy (or sane) for not wanting to rewrite a 1000 word page, 11 times over. :)
-- Cpt. Devonin
Thanks again. :) Also I figured out how to do tilde on my phone, so thanks for the tip for the signature there too. -- Cpt. Devonin )-( 17:40, 25 December 2011 (UTC)
Star Wars: A New Adventure
Hey um Snowball I am making a story and it's called Star Wars: A New Adventure I think you actually edited it before or at least corrected me on a problem I made. I think I fixed it and I still don't have all that many pages but since you said that you like to work on stories that were usually incomplete like the ones in the pit I was wondering if you could maybe help me work on it because I don't have all that much time to work on it or could you maybe edit it once and a while? ( Oh and could you please review what I have so far?) I would really appreciate it if you could help me with some of this. --UltimaEvill 14:46, 25 December 2011
Template Request
I'm not sure exactly the sort of look you were going for, so I tossed this together (I had to put in the Area thing, or the equipment part would have only been 1 row big... couldn't figure out a way around it).
If you'd like me to move things around, or anything (if you want to change colours just look for bgcolor="#xxxxxx" and change the xxxxxx), just let me know how you'd like me to do it. If you can find another template similar to what you were going for it shouldn't be too hard to copy the general idea.
| Conpiracy 45 - 51 Status | ||
| Health | {{{H}}} | Equipment |
| Percentage | {{{P}}} | {{{E}}} |
| Area | {{{A}}} | |
-- Cpt. Devonin )-( 20:15, 4 January 2012 (UTC)
Reply from Holygiant
I am very rarely on here anymore, but still come on occasionally to read stuff when I'm bored. I will edit it if I ever find time, but in the meanwhile there won't be much added to City Life: Manhattan. Also, feel free to keep it on the page. That's a relatively difficult place to get to anyway.
Wandering to another page
The best joke of the century Cheers!
Limerick
I love the idea of your Limerick story. I have added a few pages already; I don't want it to fall into the Pit of Abandoned Stories, because I think it could do well and be fun!--User:Impalalevi1
Response
I want to suggest that the discussion pages of the first pages of stories used for the all time/ of the year as the vote pages. To keep voting easy, maybe only previously nominated stories could be used. See what you think.--Snowball- The Anti-Adult-Content Resistance Leader 12:37, 18 June 2012 (UTC)
Well, um, that would be another fine way to potentially do it. But the "story of the year" idea never really started and seems pretty dead right now (In all honestly I even forgott it existed in the first place). So it´s unlikely neither of the systems will ever be used anyways.
Main Page Changes
The decision to revamp the Main Page was made by RobKohr, not me, but I certainly agree with him that something had to be done. The Main Page was way too full and was probably scaring newbies away from the site instead of drawing them in. He felt it would be best to simply display a few of the longer and/or well-written stories on the Main Page. In particular, he wanted room for some adult stories on the Main Page again, since the bulk of our traffic is adult.
But things are always open to change and any feedback on the changes will be considered. --Platypus 15:16, 18 August 2012 (UTC)
Mass Blanking
Unfortunately, there are no provisions for blanking groups of pages or blanking entire categories. Or maybe that's fortunate, since vandals would love to be able to blow away entire stories. --Platypus 20:04, 22 February 2015 (UTC)
The Pit of Abandoned Stories
I suppose that it's fitting that your story The Pit of Abandoned Stories would end up there. It's a clever meta idea, and it's too bad you didn't go anywhere with it. You would probably enjoy The Abandoned Story by the Completionist. He/she may have drawn inspiration from your story.
I have taken a liking to many of the abandoned stubs, like you probably did when you were active here. Nowadays CYOS is mostly dead, its lifeless limbs held together by a few living cells (and Platypus). Not that I've been around long enough to see it any other way. Maybe it's always been like this.
--Pickles 05:08, 17 May 2020 (UTC)
