The Review/Mature Stories/Escape from Syria

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DirtyMeStoryTime's review of Escape from Syria:
Overall, the story is not bad. The author uses proper grammar and tells an okay story. It is not overly complicated, just going from scene to scene without much story involved, but at the same time, the author does do a good job at points making you understand both the main character and some of the sub characters.

The status bar is used, but not effectively. An edit of the story might be better removing it, since it seems to have no purpose. There was very little change (None really that I noted).

Many paths are finishes, and wrapped up decently. There are still some redlinks, but not that many compared to the overall story.

Many paths end in death, and there is some sexual content. It is borderline between a mature story and an adult story, as there are many sex scenes, but not largely graphical. There is also some graphic violence, and many cases of non-graphic violence.

There are a couple of inconsistencies, where the main author switches suddenly from wearing pants (At the beginning) to wearing a miniskirt. The couple of miniskirt references do lead to some semi-sexual encounter, where the author was trying to get the character to show off her panties to a limited degree, but overall, most of the story flows with no noticeable inconsistencies, even staying true to some of the alternate options.

One issue the story had was no real buildup and climax. It just tried to keep a steady state of tension, which overall starts getting a little worn. The author does okay, but after tense scene followed by tense scene, it does lose something. Some breaks between the conflicts might be good. Then again, the average storyline was not long.

I think the story was a decent read, and might be worth a readers time if they enjoy the spy type of story with some titillation and lots of death thrown in.