The Review/Mature Stories/Escape from Syria

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DirtyMeStoryTime's review of Escape from Syria:
Overall, the story is not bad. The author uses proper grammar and tells an okay story. It is not overly complicated, just going from scene to scene without much story involved, but at the same time, the author does do a good job at points making you understand both the main character and some of the sub characters.

The status bar is used, but not effectively. An edit of the story might be better removing it, since it seems to have no purpose. There was very little change (None really that I noted).

Many paths are finishes, and wrapped up decently. There are still some redlinks, but not that many compared to the overall story.

Many paths end in death, and there is some sexual content. It is borderline between a mature story and an adult story, as there are many sex scenes, but not largely graphical. There is also some graphic violence, and many cases of non-graphic violence.

There are a couple of inconsistencies, where the main author switches suddenly from wearing pants (At the beginning) to wearing a miniskirt. The couple of miniskirt references do lead to some semi-sexual encounter, where the author was trying to get the character to show off her panties to a limited degree, but overall, most of the story flows with no noticeable inconsistencies, even staying true to some of the alternate options.

I think the story was a decent read, and might be worth a readers time if they enjoy the spy type of story.