User talk:TheElderOnes
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Please make sure you include the category and status bar on the pages you post. --Platypus 21:29, 25 February 2010 (UTC)
Oops, yeah. Sorry, forgot that. Knew something was wrong. --TheElderOnes 06:45, 27 February 2010 (UTC)
Please don't make me keep reminding you about the category. --Platypus 20:47, 27 February 2010 (UTC)
Damnit! Sorry, still getting a hang of this wiki, keep forgetting that part. Are you the only mod? Cause I haven't seen any other ones, and if you have to do all of this on your own, then I'll definitely keep a better eye out. --TheElderOnes 02:20, 2 March 2010 (UTC)
I'm the only syop here on a regular basis. RobKohr is the admin, but he only pops in now and then.
As for adding a link to a pic, I'm not entirely sure how to do that. Given time, I'll see if I can research an answer. --Platypus 22:44, 1 March 2010 (UTC)
Sounds good to me, man. --TheElderOnes 02:20, 2 March 2010 (UTC)
Thanks for the warning. You can't always tell a person's age by the maturity of their writing, though. Besides, it doesn't look like he's coming back to write more. --Platypus 12:59, 7 May 2010 (UTC)
I would just like to congratulate you on finishing your story. This makes you a member of a very, VERY small and privileged club! i enjoyed reading it so good luck with the next one! --Fletcher Peninsula
I definitely agree with you about the tags. If I can find a way to remove them, a lot of tags are going away! --Platypus 11:23, 6 April 2011 (UTC)
I know you've been working on the story "Megan", and it's your story [and very good, if depressing], but I hope you don't mind that I added one page to it. I tried to keep to the spirit of the story. Your work is excellent. --Teejay
Since you asked, I do like the story "Megan". The theme is incredibly depressing, so it reminds me of my poetry. So far, my favorite kill is the quick one in the kitchen, where Megan snaps Vanessa's neck. I look forward to the rest of the story. --Teejay
Hey thanks. Do you recognize the faces I used for the status bars? --AgentVincent 04:15, 29 July 2011 (UTC)
Congrats on finishing "Megan". Great story! --Teejay
No problem go right ahead and use it. It's not copywritten and it does have a nice ring to it. --The Hand
Thank You!! I haven't technically 'finished' it yet (kind of not read through and checked for grammar errors yet), but thank you so much for reading through it. Oh and i've read through "Megan". My god, that story is simply put, magnificent. Especially the first time I read through it, yes I did read it through more than once. I hope that you continue making stories. Hey, maybe you can do a 'what if?' edition to this story. I'd like to see what would have happened if she didn't go through with, you know. --Heyoeveryone 17 September 2011
Yeah, the 'What If?' idea was for if Megan didn't do the kill, and there is a page where Vanessa kills Megan! The gun and power-tool kills? That sounds nasty, but, my violent side (which is very limited) still wants to read them.
And i've played through a bit of War Pigs, that is a pretty tough one to beat. Though, i'm sure you will.
Oh and one last question. I need you give your thoughts on these three ideas, as it will come into consideration of what I will do next. Should I?:
- Story about a man who has lost his memory, locked in a room with no walls, only item he has is a walkie talkie, where the kidnapper says he can leave, or he can save another person.
- High School Story. Didn't really have a good idea on this, it's either going to be about a war that starts happening around them, or they have a huch paintball match for a prize.
- Story Reviews. Going to look at three different sections, Grammar, Story, Ending/Completion.
--Heyoeveryone September 18 2011
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Reviewed!
Hey! I just finished typing up my review for your story, Megan. I know it's not finished and such, but i'm right now reviewing all the stories that have been nominated for becoming featured, and your one was on the top of the list. So here's the review, and enjoy! --Heyoeveryone 4 October 2011
If you really want to know, it was the first one with the plastic bag. Oh my god that was brutal. That page was really well done, and I can still imagine it in my head. Ow... Anyways thanks in advance if you do write a review. I hope that more people get into the reviewing so it feels less empty. --Heyoeveryone 8 October 2011
Hey! Recently, I've been working on this new story called Remember, and I was wondering, if you aren't to busy, maybe perhaps to read through it? If you would like a little premise, you find yourself locked inside a room with no windows, one door, and a walkie talkie, you also have forgotten who you are. The whole point is to escape the room and find out who you actually are. I'd just want to have an honest opinion about the story. --Heyoeveryone 17 October 2011
I recently read your review that you posted up today. What a way to start off, Inyasha's Fantasy Land. XD. To be honest, I haven't had a chance to actually take a read through this story, but with all this 'hype' about it being extremely bad, I was wondering if it was really that bad. Guess it turns out with your review it is! Great review I must say. You going to do more? --Heyoeveryone 10:08, 12 November 2011 (UTC)
e-cig spammers
Thanks for the heads-up. I'd noticed the e-cig spammers, but I figure that as long as they confine their spam to talk pages, there's no need to delete them. If they spread their spam to regular pages or post on anyone else's talk pages, then they'll be banned and their postings removed. --Platypus 14:05, 17 August 2011 (UTC)
Question on something that could be considered a "nonstory"
It seems to me that marking story supplement material as part of the Elderpedia would be the best way to go. --Platypus 12:17, 15 September 2011 (UTC)
Having an IRC chat is an interesting idea. It's something that should probably be run past RobKohr using the 'Request a Feature' link. --Platypus 15:37, 17 September 2011 (UTC)
Time Stopper proposal reply
Hey TheElderOnes, Thanks for your praise on my new story I am glad you've enjoyed it so far.
As for the proposal of letting you write a few pages I will accept with a few conditions and details of the characters
Firstly I would like you to only do the city visit where the protaginist will cause trouble as I have everything of the highschool visit planned already.
Secondly I would like you to keep with my linking method which is [Time Stopper/Action|AddedText] or [TimeStopper/PersonAction|AddedText]
And now to the character(s).
The protagonist is very intellectual being able to deduce a situation very quickly
before gaining powers he grew to hate the world that hated him but upon getting his powers he has grown to be a bit sadistic and full of hatred.
also I plan to make a rival in the story with a different 'God-given' power... but I plan on introducing said character after the city arc has ended.
which brings me to a big point... try to keep the protagonist a little diguised so he doesn't just get caught so that he can still go to bed at the end of the day without having SWAT teams bursting through his window lol.
also try to reference previous dialogue/actions it brings more emotion to it I reckon.
I'll note before finishing that the School arc is a dead end or just a fanservice arc whilst City leads into the next part of the story I have planned (Which again will split into 2 paths if you wish to continue writing after the city arc.)
as a closing statement be sure to add a few spots where the reader can get a sex scene as the story is an 18+ adult story after all...
well anyway I made a big wall of text on your page sorry bout' that ha ha... anyways glad to have you aboard. --Mezzo 14:29, 10 October 2011 (UTC)
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Firstly good that you understand the protgonist, so yes cleverly orchestrated incidents that could perhaps cause massive whirlwinds of chaos while the protagonist sits and watchs it unfold
as for specfic events in the city I would like only 2 things the introduction of Merissa Silvers, a childhood friend of the protagonist who he hasn't seen since he way 10, her personality is outwardly happy but she hides a few secrets behind her smiles, I would like her only covered quickly though since I want the readers to feel the mystery of the character as she WILL be important later in the story.
the other things I want covered is a visit to 'Green Horn Bar' the bar that the protagonists mom gets drunk at. I would like the protagonist to help an innocent chick that is being taken advantage of by the patrons of the bar this could be a good spot also to introduce Merissa I guess. the green horn bar reeks of alcohol and is usually full of shady people.
anything else is left to your imagination, be as gory in description as you wish go nuts :P --Mezzo 15:16, 10 October 2011 (UTC)
answer
Actually, every time I issue a warning about the category, I think about just creating a template instead of re-typing it. Maybe next time I'll do that. Next time is likely to be soon. --Platypus 11:39, 1 November 2011 (UTC)
Hey, uhh
Are you like a moderator of some sorts now? I've noticed you having a higher amount of activity than most other users, with many of your recent changes just categorizing page after page. Whether you are or not, I'd like to say good job! Someone needed to help Platypus with all the maintenance of the site. Heyoeveryone 07:24, 8 November 2011 (UTC)
Now I've been thinking, would it be a good idea if make this page and the pages after it into a new story (I'd call it a new Chapter). I'm thinking of naming this 'Chapter 2' or 'Remember: Escape'. I am doing this because I was originally going to make it three parts, 'Remember' , 'Remember: The Waiting', then 'Remember: Escape'. If the story was popular, I would do a 'Remember: Epilogue' section as well. Why am I telling you this? Well, I need another persons opinion on it, and with the amount of stories that you've read, your opinion is more influential than others. --Heyoeveryone 04:59, 16 November 2011 (UTC)
