Talk:Welldweller
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| + | *Okay...I swear I'm not trying to pick on you here, but I have more issues with your article. | ||
| + | **1. The "Welldweller" and "New Member" chapters can be combined. There's really no need for them to be separate. | ||
| + | **2. "Soon, he began to keep a record of everything that happened, a "Rings Record" as he affectionately called it. This would become a powerful source of information in the future." You say its "a powerful source of information", but...where is it? It don't see it IC. Or OOC. | ||
| + | **3. "Welldweller would soon become a prominent activist against the mooks" ...Where? When? Maybe this is true, but I haven't seen it. | ||
| + | **4. "He also took part in the c davis conflict," I disagree. The only person who "took part" in c_davis' thread was c_davis. Welldweller replied to the thread, yes, but that's not really "taking part" in the plot, imo. | ||
| + | Sorry. I'm not TRYING to get on your case, but this article just seems like there's a lot more in it than there needs to be. x_x You don't HAVE to change anything, but I think editing a bit making make it more readable and correct. [[User:Gigi|Gigi]] 20:21, 11 December 2007 (EST) | ||
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*Nice article. Lots of content. Howevaaa: "the legendary Ripple in which these members saved the world from the wraiths." I don't remember us saving the world. I just remember lots of users going "OMG MY LEG SUDDENLY HURTS FOR SOME REASON!" lol. I could be wrong, though, too lazy to look. [[User:Gigi|Gigi]] 13:39, 18 November 2007 (EST) | *Nice article. Lots of content. Howevaaa: "the legendary Ripple in which these members saved the world from the wraiths." I don't remember us saving the world. I just remember lots of users going "OMG MY LEG SUDDENLY HURTS FOR SOME REASON!" lol. I could be wrong, though, too lazy to look. [[User:Gigi|Gigi]] 13:39, 18 November 2007 (EST) | ||
Revision as of 01:21, 12 December 2007
- Okay...I swear I'm not trying to pick on you here, but I have more issues with your article.
- 1. The "Welldweller" and "New Member" chapters can be combined. There's really no need for them to be separate.
- 2. "Soon, he began to keep a record of everything that happened, a "Rings Record" as he affectionately called it. This would become a powerful source of information in the future." You say its "a powerful source of information", but...where is it? It don't see it IC. Or OOC.
- 3. "Welldweller would soon become a prominent activist against the mooks" ...Where? When? Maybe this is true, but I haven't seen it.
- 4. "He also took part in the c davis conflict," I disagree. The only person who "took part" in c_davis' thread was c_davis. Welldweller replied to the thread, yes, but that's not really "taking part" in the plot, imo.
Sorry. I'm not TRYING to get on your case, but this article just seems like there's a lot more in it than there needs to be. x_x You don't HAVE to change anything, but I think editing a bit making make it more readable and correct. Gigi 20:21, 11 December 2007 (EST)
- Nice article. Lots of content. Howevaaa: "the legendary Ripple in which these members saved the world from the wraiths." I don't remember us saving the world. I just remember lots of users going "OMG MY LEG SUDDENLY HURTS FOR SOME REASON!" lol. I could be wrong, though, too lazy to look. Gigi 13:39, 18 November 2007 (EST)
