User talk:GirlOnGirlFan!

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What, no love for any other writer on this site? Like my most complete (Yes, not that complete, but still...) [[Dirty Me]]?
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Just saw your note. As for my writing, yes, same thing, I do okay because of how much I read. Here is my recommendation: Think about how your favorite authors write. Think about how they make the scene flow, prevent repetition, etc. I guess many of us, when we read, we do not really pay attention to how a good author actually makes the story good. We just sort of take it for granted. Please remember, I have been on this site since 2014, and have been writing my own blog since 2013. So, I have had lots of practice. I have looked at things I have posted before and cringed. But, one thing I have found that helps me with descriptions, and why I do okay, is I close my eyes. I imagine myself in the scene. "He pulls her against him roughly, forcing a grunt to escape from between her lips." So, I will close my eyes, and sit in the chair at my desk, since it rolls. I will position my hips the way I imagine the person in the story needs them. I will roll myself in my chair, trying to figure out what it feels like. If my hips buck in the story, I will buck my hips in real life, trying to figure out how I would move, how it would feel. Sometimes, if I am alone and into it, I will use a dildo to simulate how the guy would feel. If he "pounds" me, I will push the dildo in, hard. If he kisses my neck, I will close my eyes and lightly caress my neck, trying to replace the sensation of my fingers with the sensation of his lips in my mind, trying to figure out how it would feel.
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Anyways, I am off track, and being needy...[[Continue fucking Kate]]. You need to add the status and category, even if it is still a WIP. Those need to be added the first time you create the page. You can change or update if needed later, but they need to be there from the first step. --[[User:DirtyMeStoryTime|Dirty Me]] 04:10, 1 April 2016 (UTC)
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Regardless, I have also read alot of books about how to become a writer. The biggest recommendations: Just write. Some of it will suck, some will be okay. Keep it up. Some you will wish would burn in firey death, and some you will look at and go "Hey, this is okay," or "hey, I like this". That is the way it goes. So, you want to write, then write. Write shitty lines, write horrid poems, write cliche plots and regurgitated trash. Write masterpieces and wonderful sentences. Regardless of what happens, just write. You will get better. Read what you wrote. See what works. Change it, destroy it, modify it, reuse it, and write more. This is the key. --[[User:DirtyMeStoryTime|Dirty Me]] 18:33, 1 April 2016 (UTC)
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Hmm, you keep making new talk pages xD
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I posted a new page, tell me what you think and if there is any errors tell me and I will fix them or you guys can. This is the first copy of it so there is bound to be mistakes.
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--[[User:GirlOnGirlFan!]] 15:53, 1 April 2016 (UTC)
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A user talk page is located at their name. In this case, mine is at: [[User talk:DirtyMeStoryTime]], not "talk:name". No worries, you will get the hang of it. Also, there is a menu box at the top of the edit box. One of them is signature. You can click that to automatically add your signature. Your signature itself will link to your user page where they can read about you, and can click discussion tab to leave you a message.
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My apologies for seeming to ignore you.  My post advising you to go ahead and post a sample page went astray. As for the page you've posted, I'd say so far, so good. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 18:50, 1 April 2016 (UTC)
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Hmm, my parents have never caught me masturbating in real life, but my neighbors have. Not sure where in my story you are referencing. Are you talking about the dream sequence? The concept was to let people have a way to get a bit erotic without diving in to it. Sort of the "Wet dream that dad is intruding on". And the main character wasn't masturbating in the dream, she was having a generic "erotic" dream that turns into the cliche "you are naked in front of the class" option that has an outside element intruding. I don't honestly remember the character waking up and finding out that she was masturbating with her dad standing there xD You might need to let me know the page title, and I will check and let you know what that page was about.
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Regarding [[Suggest that you and Julianne try a different kind of exercise.]]... You seem to be having difficulty separating sentences. Sentences end with periods. Don't use commas to mash multiple sentences together. And please, watch your tenses. Smutty Sex Romp is written in present tense, not past tense. You might also want to review [[punctuation with dialogue]]. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 21:10, 1 April 2016 (UTC)
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I have many elements in my story that come from my real life experiences, and many elements that come from my fantasies. Some others, I just include to include something for the reader, especially since I know probably 80%+ of my readers are male. Sadly, many of those are probably where my writing gets worse. --[[User:DirtyMeStoryTime|Dirty Me]] 05:00, 1 April 2016 (UTC)
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Honestly, it is not really my style, but I did notice some problems with run on sentences, a few mistakes, etc. Not saying it is bad or good, just mentioning because...
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One problem I have is, I need to improve. I ask people for ways which my writing is not doing good, help show me what mistakes I am making, things like that. But, this is my problem: most people are not very good at actually correcting my writing. They might fix a misspelled word, maybe add a missed word. But mostly, the feedback I get is "Wow, that was hot!". Okay, I love hearing feedback, but...
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For example, I might find I am using one word too much, so it becomes repetitive. Or maybe I did a poor job describing something, or misused a word. Maybe I could find a better word to express myself, or I am not making the reader feel what I am trying to get them to feel. But, I do not get this kind of feedback (As I mentioned above). So, I am not trying to tell you that your writing is good or bad. lol, where was I going. Sorry, sometimes I get rather sidetracked xD
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Basically, don't take it personally if I say "I see this problem" or something. As they say, do unto others as you would have others do unto you.
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And yes, I talk this much in real life too xD --[[User:DirtyMeStoryTime|Dirty Me]] 14:58, 1 April 2016 (UTC)
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Current revision as of 21:10, 1 April 2016

Just saw your note. As for my writing, yes, same thing, I do okay because of how much I read. Here is my recommendation: Think about how your favorite authors write. Think about how they make the scene flow, prevent repetition, etc. I guess many of us, when we read, we do not really pay attention to how a good author actually makes the story good. We just sort of take it for granted. Please remember, I have been on this site since 2014, and have been writing my own blog since 2013. So, I have had lots of practice. I have looked at things I have posted before and cringed. But, one thing I have found that helps me with descriptions, and why I do okay, is I close my eyes. I imagine myself in the scene. "He pulls her against him roughly, forcing a grunt to escape from between her lips." So, I will close my eyes, and sit in the chair at my desk, since it rolls. I will position my hips the way I imagine the person in the story needs them. I will roll myself in my chair, trying to figure out what it feels like. If my hips buck in the story, I will buck my hips in real life, trying to figure out how I would move, how it would feel. Sometimes, if I am alone and into it, I will use a dildo to simulate how the guy would feel. If he "pounds" me, I will push the dildo in, hard. If he kisses my neck, I will close my eyes and lightly caress my neck, trying to replace the sensation of my fingers with the sensation of his lips in my mind, trying to figure out how it would feel.

Regardless, I have also read alot of books about how to become a writer. The biggest recommendations: Just write. Some of it will suck, some will be okay. Keep it up. Some you will wish would burn in firey death, and some you will look at and go "Hey, this is okay," or "hey, I like this". That is the way it goes. So, you want to write, then write. Write shitty lines, write horrid poems, write cliche plots and regurgitated trash. Write masterpieces and wonderful sentences. Regardless of what happens, just write. You will get better. Read what you wrote. See what works. Change it, destroy it, modify it, reuse it, and write more. This is the key. --Dirty Me 18:33, 1 April 2016 (UTC)

I posted a new page, tell me what you think and if there is any errors tell me and I will fix them or you guys can. This is the first copy of it so there is bound to be mistakes. --User:GirlOnGirlFan! 15:53, 1 April 2016 (UTC)

My apologies for seeming to ignore you. My post advising you to go ahead and post a sample page went astray. As for the page you've posted, I'd say so far, so good. --Platypus 18:50, 1 April 2016 (UTC)

Regarding Suggest that you and Julianne try a different kind of exercise.... You seem to be having difficulty separating sentences. Sentences end with periods. Don't use commas to mash multiple sentences together. And please, watch your tenses. Smutty Sex Romp is written in present tense, not past tense. You might also want to review punctuation with dialogue. --Platypus 21:10, 1 April 2016 (UTC)

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