User:Fletcher Peninsula

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Hey just a few things this time.
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Yeah Corinna will slowly transform from a noble princess that is "above" lesbianism, to become a cock-hungry slut that also enjoys some pussy on the side hehe. But this must of course be gradual and calculated so as to appear believable in theory. Obviously she cannot have any male sex slaves as this would lessen the fantasy of Faust being the only lover for all of these women ;)
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1. Ok, I see what you are doing with the merc arc. I like the gambling the slaves twist, quite interesting. So will Acrom have female slaves of his own that he will give Faust once he beats him hehe? I am having trouble imagining what he is doing with three slaves in the troll arc, but 4? Damn he will be busy! ;)
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As far as sequels go, we could name it like War & Sex II or something more creative than that. We could set it twenty years in the future and give it almost a Hercules type story. As in Hercules was half god(by Zeus) and half human. The new hero is obviously half royal(by Faust) and half slave. It could be the same idea as he goes on quests in order to prove his worth to his father who is now the wise king that eventually won the war against Hysta and is perhaps ruling from Almedia, with his queen, the sexy Almedian woman we keep hearing about haha. Obviously this is FAR OFF and is only in the works, but yeah its an idea.
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2. The thing is, I never saw the princess being even bi-curious. I mean, I could see her changing that after a few nights in Faust's bedroom. But yeah, its just unexpected because of how proper the princess appears. Btw, how about Corinna for the princess' name? I like it.  
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As far as Almedia, when I said El Dorado, I meant the mysterious aspect of it and nothing else. I also saw it as a Babylon type kingdom.
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3. I like the idea of a primitive drug for birth control. I think that it may be interesting if one or more of his slaves were to conceive and give him a bastard. Not being noble but still having royal blood, the bastard could grow up and join the army Obviously I am getting ahead of myself, but it would be interesting to do if this thing grows for several hundred pages or if there was a sequel haha.
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The elves will not sing :)
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4. Ditto on Alamedia, it will have to be introduced later. We can build up the anticipation by including little details about it, almost like an El Dorado type deal where it seems too good to be true.
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Don't worry about the name. I was just pointing it out before someone else did. Love what you are doing in that arc btw.
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5. As far as original ideas, I was thinking about introducing an elvish element to the story. Maybe they could be a noble race that comes from beyond the sea or something fighting the brutish Hystians? They would of course have plenty of gorgeous women and could have a divine quality about them. Let me know what you think.
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And yeah, I just saw the brutality and civility of the Seven Mountains as a parallel to the Germans who while being fierce warriors also gave the earth things like Mozart, Einstein and yes even Nietzsche. Call them intelligent brutes. The Hystians should be portrayed as brutish as well as unintelligent with the exception of fighting. No culture for them. And you started that by portraying them as lazy and dirty. Like the Faust idea as well.
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6. Two other things. I agree with you on the ice cream thing haha. Didn't give it much thought because it was the only way to describe that method of sucking cock, you know? haha. I have begun changing it though.  
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7. I noticed the name of the merc commander is the same as Faust's name. I was thinking that we could eliminate Faust's name, because royals do not have last names, as this is a symbol of the common man. They instead have obscure dynastic names. So instead of being Elizabeth Windsor, the Queen of the UK would be known as Elizabeth OF Windsor, or OF the House of Windsor. So we could give Faust a German sounding dynasty because I see a German quality in the Seven Mountains Kingdom, and of course Faust itself is a German name if I am not mistaken. So I was thinking the House of Brandenburg for the dynastic name. Tell me what you think.
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--[[User:Ollie Williams|Ollie Williams]]
--[[User:Ollie Williams|Ollie Williams]]

Revision as of 00:35, 28 January 2010

I am probably the last person who should write a story. I have dyslexia, I have a hard time projecting my thoughts into written material and English is not my first language. But hey! I need some way to cope with all those weird stories forming in my head every day.


I currently have two projects that I am working on. Both are in the adult category.


The Devils Daughter Is about a satanic cult member named Sharon Abrahamson who is tasked with finding tree sacrificial maidens in order to summon a demon and take over the world! Loots of mind breaking and dirty sex!


War and Sex Is an low fantasy adult story. The main character is a prince named Faust Kaladaris. Its mainly about dominance and submission in an more non consensual tone.


Bad spellers off the word, unti!

lol Nah, I just had a lot of pressure working on it. The RPG style template was really difficult to work with, especially when it spanned several unnecessary options that would just work as a single option. That really drug me down and I just want to get to the story already! I have a great story to tell, darn it! xD

Ah, well. Hope you would read it when I get to the exciting part of the story. ;)

--OminousFlare 11:40, 29 September 2009 (PDT)


Yeah Corinna will slowly transform from a noble princess that is "above" lesbianism, to become a cock-hungry slut that also enjoys some pussy on the side hehe. But this must of course be gradual and calculated so as to appear believable in theory. Obviously she cannot have any male sex slaves as this would lessen the fantasy of Faust being the only lover for all of these women ;)

As far as sequels go, we could name it like War & Sex II or something more creative than that. We could set it twenty years in the future and give it almost a Hercules type story. As in Hercules was half god(by Zeus) and half human. The new hero is obviously half royal(by Faust) and half slave. It could be the same idea as he goes on quests in order to prove his worth to his father who is now the wise king that eventually won the war against Hysta and is perhaps ruling from Almedia, with his queen, the sexy Almedian woman we keep hearing about haha. Obviously this is FAR OFF and is only in the works, but yeah its an idea.

As far as Almedia, when I said El Dorado, I meant the mysterious aspect of it and nothing else. I also saw it as a Babylon type kingdom.

The elves will not sing :)

Don't worry about the name. I was just pointing it out before someone else did. Love what you are doing in that arc btw.

And yeah, I just saw the brutality and civility of the Seven Mountains as a parallel to the Germans who while being fierce warriors also gave the earth things like Mozart, Einstein and yes even Nietzsche. Call them intelligent brutes. The Hystians should be portrayed as brutish as well as unintelligent with the exception of fighting. No culture for them. And you started that by portraying them as lazy and dirty. Like the Faust idea as well. --Ollie Williams

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