Talk:"We could share the twins." (Fantasy Creatures)

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The fight makes no sense, so I'm changing it (horses don't stop when spooked, they fucking run faster. Also, why on earth would getting the guards' attention be advantageous?). The first line Chief utters makes no sense, so I'm changing it. The whole thing's riddled with spelling mistakes, so I'm changing that. The bit about Knights breaks continuity (the guards were never Knights) and established lore (Knights have zero reason to be protecting a caravan), so I'm changing it.

If you want to write in this story, do so, but not like this was.

--Incubus 20:23, 21 August 2017 (UTC)

Changes finished.

--Incubus 23:21, 21 August 2017 (UTC)