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Mr fredhot16. I aint got time so pls send me your age. Im making a poll for ages PLs send me ur age ASAP.Michaeltamayo96
I'm sorry. I'm a user as of yesterday and I was just trying to start a story of my own. Could the damage be reversed? --[ [User:Fredhot16]] 07:48, 3 May 2014
I have already undone it, but did you seriously think selecting every single bit of text on a page, then suddenly seeing nothing BUT your story was the proper way to go? I know people can get intimidated trying new things, but don't just forget all common sense at the same time...
No, I didn't think about that. I'm very sorry for the trouble. --[ [User:Fredhot16:Fredhot16]] 09:38, 3 May 2014
What exactly is My Little Pony: Choose Your Own Adventure supposed to be? If it's supposed to be a story, it needs choices and it needs a category. Please don't post incomplete pages. Incomplete pages will be edited or deleted. --Platypus 04:09, 25 January 2015 (UTC)
Why are those choices in Darkness? Because the story is open for anyone to edit and some people are desperate to read stories about copping a feel, no matter how story-inappropriate that choice is, and some people freak when they realize they've been reading a story from a female perspective and have to force the story into a male perspective, no matter how inappropriate it is given the story thus far. --Platypus 03:05, 9 March 2016 (UTC)
One thing you may want to consider is that choices don’t necessarily have to seem logical. Consider that following scenario: Your son hasn’t come home from school and you’re worried about him. Do you: A) call the police? B) hire a private detective? C) search the neighborhood? D) get a rowboat and sail out to sea? A, B, & C are obvious choices, but the ridiculously illogical choice D… is what Gepetto chose in the Adventures of Pinocchio. And somehow that worked out. --Platypus 15:30, 10 March 2016 (UTC)
You're typing more than you need to...
[[ Ventrue|Ventrue]] tells the wiki "Instead of displaying the link to the page titled 'Ventrue' as 'Ventrue', instead display it as 'Ventrue'." Kind of redundant, no? The | is useful when you want the link to display as something different. For example [[Ventrue|Aristocrats]] would send people to a page titled 'Ventrue', but the link would display as 'Aristocrats'. --Platypus 15:12, 11 March 2016 (UTC)
You could just place a note on the page such as "clan descriptions are copyright White Wolf Game Studio". --Platypus 16:04, 11 March 2016 (UTC)
Aren't you going to revise the story anymore? User : Darky
If you want to contribute to Darkness by adding more pages, fine. If you want to rip out pages because you don't like certain choices, NOT FINE. Leave those pages alone. I wrote them and they are staying. PERIOD. --Platypus 18:42, 5 April 2016 (UTC)
I know you know how to categorize your pages. Categorize them!--Platypus 13:35, 8 April 2016 (UTC)
Categorizing is not something to be saved for 'later'. Either the page is categorized when it's posted or the page gets deleted. It's that simple.
If you've read a significant amount of Darkness, and it seems that you have, then you should have some understanding of what kind of story it is. If you don't understand it, I don't think that I can explain it any further. --Platypus 18:27, 8 April 2016 (UTC)
A discussion page exists for discussing the associated story page, so if you want to discuss the tropes that you feel are associated with that story page, it's appropriate to do so. Been spending a bit of time over at tvtropes? --Platypus 14:13, 15 April 2016 (UTC)
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Do not delete an entire index and replace it with just your story again... --Dirty Me 09:27, 2 May 2014 (UTC)
And, you should normally respond on the person's user page, not on your user page, or else they probably won't see it. But make sure is it User talk:, not User:. --Dirty Me 05:38, 3 May 2014 (UTC)
Just to let you know, I alphabetized your stories in the mature section, so if you don't spot them, please note they are in a different location, not removed. --Dirty Me 18:37, 16 May 2014 (UTC)
Please make sure to include the title of the story as a category on each page you post. If you don't know how to add categories, please review the Tutorial, especially Basic page format. --Dirty Me 12:03, 17 May 2014 (UTC)
So, it has been a while since we last talked. I just wanted to stop in and say hi, and let you know I am looking for people to help me expand my story, The Exhibitionist. Just drop a couple options you would like me to write or something. A couple others have already been sweet and given me some options, but the more, the merrier! But, you don't need to, it is entirely optional (gogogogogogogogogo addadddadddaddadd) Thinks to herself, "are my subliminals working? Wait, did I say that outloud? So sorry :o Please forgive me. *beg beg beg beg*. Anyways, hope to see you there ^.^ --Dirty Me 10:38, 18 March 2016 (UTC)
lol, but it is an adult story. Yes, I know what you mean, I don't bother reading most of the stories. I do write stories other than adults, but I am not that good, to be honest. I draw on my experience to write my stories, and many of my past history consisted of 3 things: Drugs, sex, and physical/emotional pain. I have tried writing about my pain, but honestly, when I read it, it makes me feel like I come across as whiny. I have written sometimes about drugs, but honestly, it is hard to describe what it feels like to be high. So, that leaves me with sex...I would love to write fantasy, sci fi, mystery, crime, etc, but every time I try, at least when I read, it always sounds so cliche. I think maybe the only difference is, I write my erotica based on my real life, so I try to make it realistic. Sometimes I get carried away, but normally I try to make it believable. --Dirty Me 13:33, 18 March 2016 (UTC)
Adding a little more: Yes, I have also written a couple of non-adult stories. You can check my user page for the stories I have written, but you can probably guess after looking at them that I do not do as good... --Dirty Me 13:35, 18 March 2016 (UTC)
Yes, yes, I talk too much. Even in real life. I have started a story, Context, but unlike The Exhibitionist, it is not a community driven story. For The Exhibitionist. I will only work on options given to me, and those ideas that spring from them during story mode. I do not create new paths. However, for Context, I am trying something completely different, keyworks located in the story itself. I am still trying to figure out how to work it though. Mostly, I am aiming it at non-adult, but have categorized it as adult because I imagine at some point I will have some level of adult content, but thinking of making it more of a silly, strange, random, train of thought type of story. Anyways, I will STFU now...I know I talk too much, and type too much... I like interaction, not isolation... --Dirty Me 13:45, 18 March 2016 (UTC)
Hello, so, you want stories that are adult but not really sex stories like 99%? Want to try my Short Bursts story? Let me know what you think? Yes, I will have graphic sex in there, and graphic other things. lol, you will probably be able to tell once you read the first two I have completed. Anyways, just want to know what you think, since it seems like you are not one who is here only for the graphic sex stories, but for actual stories. Anyways, I would like it if you let me know what you think about them. Yes, I am a needy, insecure person, so like to hear if my stuff is good. --Dirty Me 08:37, 21 March 2016 (UTC)
Hmm, where to start. I notice some of the things you have posted on Darky's talk page. Not saying I don't understand, or sympathize, but, are you sure this is really the correct way to go about it? I guess, he started the story, and while it seems that he should be able to do more than make it one of another, lots, of adult stories, are you sure criticizing him is really the way to go? It seems your view and his view are clashing, and I am not sure it is really that helpful at this point. Possibly you could make your own story that follows a vision you have? Not trying to get in the middle of it, but it just seems like many posts on his page are "Man, why would you even go there". I have the feeling he has changed the path, like the feather tickling, mostly because of your feedback, but... I guess, like me, I try to make non-adult stories. I try to make something that is not in the realm of "naughty", but I find most of the time when I try, I run out of story too quickly. I guess I am just better at erotica than I am at conventional stories. So, I sympathize with Darky too. But honestly, when the thing I see on the first page is "stunning girl with a nice butt and b-cup breasts", well, I think that was always his direction. I mean, what does her butt and breasts have to do with being a barbarian? She has a butt, she has breasts, but when there is a need to highlight them, I guess there was already a set direction in the author's eyes. Is it really that constructive to keep bugging him about "Man, why go there"? The only way it could have screamed more adult is if there was also the guy's penis size. I guess I am saying it seems like you would have a better story by writing your own. Maybe "Sherry becomes a barbarian girl", and run with it. Sorry, I know you are free to keep messaging him, but it just seems like it is only nagging about another author not meeting your expectations at this point. Just my opinion though. --Dirty Me 01:34, 29 March 2016 (UTC)
Sigh, and yet another story with "DD cup breasts, and a round and firm ass"... I swear, as I said above, I sympathize with you...every time I see something like this it makes me want to scream... Why do all women need to be unrealistically proportioned in like 90% of all the stories here, and why do they all need to have DD breasts unless someone is trying to create some under age style story? Seriously...it is frustrating... --Dirty Me 02:51, 29 March 2016 (UTC)
lol, so cabin in the woods xD
Loved that movie --Dirty Me 14:31, 4 April 2016 (UTC)
No worries, I have not ignored your messages. Just, I suffer writers block frequently. Guess I get busy with other things and cannot really focus on writing. So, not ignoring, just not contributing anything right now because I am not sure what to contribute. That has always been one of my problems with writing, I start off okay, then end up losing my path completely for a while. --Dirty Me 01:26, 7 April 2016 (UTC)
Honestly, blank or pre made are fine, depending on how it is done. I normally try to fill in details like with dreams, memories, etc. Dirty Me originally started mostly from my blog material, with some side options to make it a CYoS. Sometimes, I did better, when I used my own experience to write, other times, I did worse, especially when I was just trying to make an option to have an option, and when I was not really in a writing mood. "Okay, lets just put in some sex stuff for the readers to make them happy, and go work on something else". Those are probably the worst paths. Too Graphic is a WIP, majorly. I need to actually put story in. Doing it more because on my blog people told me they liked pictures. So, figured, let me figure out my path, and put some pictures in, then tell a story based on those. But, it is very sexual. Again, the issue I have with being able to write based on my own experiences, without sounding like a whiny bitch. If you want to get what I mean by that, try reading this path on Dirty Me: Dirty Me/Go ahead and accept the party invitation -> Dirty Me/Sure, one beer can't hurt -> Dirty Me/Go home and try to forget this -> Dirty Me/Pretend like you have no idea what happened and that you would love to party with him. I wanted to put how I felt, but, not sure how most of the readers here will react. I assume though I am right: whiny bitch. Especially when you think about what you said some people post on here. Raping a girl and she magically likes it after. Like, I started reading this, The Sexual Adventures of You, the female path, and it was okay, until the rapist. I mean, I shook my head at the "good girl randomly has sex with the army dude", or has sex with her brother, or neighbor, or whatever. But, I read, until the rapist, and turning him into a sex slave. Yeah, just sort of threw up my hands and said okay, that is too much...get a female writer, or at least try, try, to imagine what a "good girl" would do. I mean, if you want to put that stuff, then make her the bad girl...
One thing I actually love about reading User:Teejay's stuff. He makes the characters human. Not that I read all his stuff, he tried to follow the story line, but some that have good options he can write about. --Dirty Me 14:47, 8 April 2016 (UTC)
Hmm, think you might be confused. I said on the good girl path, when the guy tries to rape the character, and he ends up in on the other end of his knife, the only option seems to be to turn him into a sex slave. I sort of liked the cut off his clothes and leave him there, but the author doesn't seem to be willing to let that happen, and keeps pushing towards keeping him as a sex slave. As for rape, did you read my path that I posted last time? That is exactly what it covers. I have been raped twice in real life, so I write from experience.
As for what Teejay writes, he tends to add on existing, not have a stand alone story. Special:Contributions/Teejay
One warning though, Platypus has warned you about categories, and I notice he is now deleting your pages. If you do not add them, he will ban you from this website. Don't be stubborn, just put category, even if you are still working on it...
Anyways, on a lighter note, here you go. Made this template just for you, so you can post and not need to worry about the 20 minute link thing:
lol, guess you liked my templates=P
btw, I changed your user page to the Index Link instead of Too Graphic Link. Mostly because I set up Index link for use on the main page, so it will not change much, but I cannot say the same thing for my too graphic link. After all, if I change it to pink, or red, are you sure you would want that? I just want to find a good color combination for it, and possibly see if I can use a background image in the future. --Dirty Me 01:43, 11 April 2016 (UTC)
Going to add to them, but last week my brain just didn't want to think...I actually thought of something funny to do with Context, with a misnamed news story. Now to put it into reality. Yeah, my projects tend to be hit or miss xD --Dirty Me 01:30, 25 April 2016 (UTC)
No worries, saw the first message, and the second=P I think part of my problem is, at the beginning you kept telling everyone "Hey, I put up a page, please go to this link, check these out, then write stuff for it". It seemed more like you wanted others to write a story with your idea in mind. I noted Teejay had pointed out he would be willing to add, but wanted you to first so he could build on that. It is somewhat the same with me. I am more of the responder type than the initiator type normally. So, I guess it is good that you added some of the thoughts about what each character should be like. But, that is my other problem. I don't really feel anything when I read it. It doesn't spark anything that I really want to add. lol, Platypus just mentioned the same thing to me on my page xD When an idea strikes, sure, no problem adding, but hard to generate an idea from nothing. And sadly, you can sort of see what my writing moods have been lately, since I have been working more on DirtyMeStoryTime Rants, making fun of some of the stereotyped stories on here. Can you find the originals? The innocent path idea, DirtyMeStoryTime Rants/Horny for innocent girls, was the recent family story someone worked on, like AAF - The talk, "Ok, Scott. I trust you.", and AAF - It works.. All of these I removed the underage stuff. I mean, the writer had his 4th grade sister having sex with him...Notice how my innocent girl is 18, yet looks 10? Yeah, because I am making fun of that stuff. For a short time I started asking people on their talk page why everyone seemed to write that the girl was "DD", which is why I created DirtyMeStoryTime Rants/Horny for DD. I am even making fun of Smutty Sex Romp with DirtyMeStoryTime Rants/Horny for sluts. Once I finish the loop, the reader can just have the girl having sex forever, although they will only really have 8 options. I even added a new option to make fun of the Pokesex/Pokemon, but I still need to put the story in. Not sure how I will write that. Even Context, once I work on it, will have some options that will point out how absurd some writers paint women as on here. I am not really pointing at you, or at anyone specific. It is just me making fun of some common things I see on here. Like, sex with absolutely no story, although I must admit that I wrote a few things in Dirty Me simply to try to "fit in" and keep people wanting to read. One reason I sort of lost interest in working on it, when I found myself writing, not about my experiences, fantasies, or what I want to write about, but instead writing things just so more people would read, and falling into the same rut that many writers do on here. Anyways, think I have went on too long, and probably sound like a whiny bitch now...so I will stop typing. --Dirty Me 01:41, 28 April 2016 (UTC)
Sorry if I intimidated you in my last message :o
Oh, and I added a bit of an "about me", well, about my real life experiences... if you are interested. User:DirtyMeStoryTime/IRL sex experiences --Dirty Me 02:37, 4 May 2016 (UTC)
btw, for your:
10. Are sex scenes or explicit sexual descriptions really necessary in a Adult CYOS? (O.K, not a important question for the story but it still stands.)
Honestly, I think they can be very good, and push the plot, letting you imagine yourself in the scene, if done right. However, I think many people tend to just throw out "Position, penetration, release, random gibberish".
Here, from my Dirty Me/Get the gun, just to scare him away, the rape scene, based on the first time I was raped irl.
You hear him yelling at you, but cannot grasp the meaning of the words. He jumps on you, yelling at you more, then you start feeling his hands. You feel him pulling your blouse, popping off buttons, ripping it off. His hand pulls at your pants, undoing them.
You lift your hands, trying to push him, to stop him, to fight him.
His fist connects with your stomach, knocking the air out of you, leaving you trying to catch your breath. When you finally do, it hurts, trying to suck in breath.
Your pants are around your knees.
You try to stop him again, and he punches you again, harder. You feel like throwing up, like your insides are hurt.
He takes your pants the rest of the way off, now that you are no longer trying to stop him, then rips your panties off.
You suddenly understand what he is about to do as he starts undoing his pants.
You yell at him, scream at him, but it doesn't matter. He forces your legs apart and punches you once more as you try to keep your legs closed, try to stop what he is doing.
He pushes in, and you scream, feeling him tearing your vagina, entering you dry. He ignores you, like a wild animal, and continues pushing himself in you, forcing himself deeper into you. You hurt so bad you cannot stop yourself from crying, sobbing, screaming. He pounds you for a short time before cumming inside you.
Laying on top of you, he rests for a few second before pushing himself up, getting off you.
He slaps your face a couple times, laughing, as pain blossoms on your cheeks.
Finally, he stands up, doing up his pants, and looking down at you in disgust, and maybe even a little guilt. You don't know because it is hard to see, as you sob in pain.
He leaves, with you curled up on the floor, crying.
Now, think about the way most people on here write about raping a girl. At first she is is all "eek, no Mr. don't do this to me" and then she is like "Oh god, I like your cock so much, I am glad you raped me". Seriously, read how many authors read about it. Now, read what I wrote again. Can you imagine the broken girl, battered and raped, the pain she is feeling, how it feels to be her?
Yeah, this is one of those cases where I honestly think, heavier description makes it more real. Of course, I guess the next question is: Do most people who write on this site really want to read about that, to think that the woman would feel like this?
Now, this one is a little long, so I will just leave you the link: dirtylittlemestories.blogspot.com/2013/09/slow-motion-love-final-polished-story.html
Read that one. Can you feel the love with it? That was what I wrote about me and my husband being intimate. Doesn't it paint a better picture of our love making, and the feelings inside of me, than just "We made love, he was tender, it was good"?
See, this is the problem. You read so many of these CYoS's that are just mindless "I want to imagine having sex with a woman like this" that I don't think you see the emotion. I think descriptions, while not always needed, nor always wanted, can pain the story.
Or, take for example, me loosing my virginity here: Dirty Me/Dream of your first time, doesn't that show the awkwardness of "the first time"? Yeah, I know, I fall into the same problems that others do on here, especially when I am just writing to make more story for people to read and not feeling it, but...
See, when I write a sex scene, I close my eyes. I picture it in my head. I go through the motions. I use toys if needed, fingers, hands. Then, I write, then close my eyes, imagine more, write more. At least when I am doing it right.
So, I do not completely agree that it does not help the story, if handled correctly. --Dirty Me 10:37, 4 May 2016 (UTC)
Lol you are telling a girl about the annoying ways people on here write about breasts? If you read my stories I normally do not describe a female's size. In part so the reader can imagine it. In another part because I honestly do not want some comparison to myself. I am a c cup. How do you think I feel reading all of these "she has a pair of DDs". You know how hard it has been for me to find every instance of that and either put my own size in to replace, or just remove?
As for the cup/bust size, at least they are trying to figure out how a woman works. I have mentioned that to people here before. But yeah... notice my dd rant story? That was to keep from going bitch mode on people...
And I understand too many ideas. Just look at how complete mine are...
Sadly, right now I just have a phone with bad internet to type on... --Dirty Me 04:21, 10 June 2016 (UTC)
Lol I noticed you removed "at least you have a life". Does that mean I don't? =p --Dirty Me 03:11, 12 June 2016 (UTC)
lol, I am home, so back to normal tomorrow. And, not much time for laying around. I have a 2 year old son, and he keeps me plenty busy xD I just reread your message, and now understand what you said. idk, are you a girl? --Dirty Me 12:58, 13 June 2016 (UTC)
lol, so much to address.
You do know I speak fluent Chinglish, so the grammar on my talk page doesn't matter too much. No need to correct mistakes. If I can understand Google Translate's mess of a Chinese to English translation, I can normally figure out what is meant xD
A. Random question: who do you like, Wolverine or Cyclops? - I am a game girl, but I can't really say I really know much about the comics thing. I know who they are, but...honestly, I would say wolverine, but more because I have seen him more. I really can't answer that.
B. Are the pictures you've put on your page pictures of you or just random pictures? In the Too Graphic (or my status on my user page?)? Random pics that I think match the story, but...I really have not done much with that. I am not as much of a visual person. I started that because on my blog, I took a poll, and more people wished I used more pictures. But...you can see how far I have gotten on that story...tells you how "graphically oriented" I am. Sorry, I don't share my pic because I have had bad experiences. Teejay knows, since he has read my blog and been talking to me for a long time, but...
So, one day I was talking to someone on a game I was playing. We had known each other for a while, and I was feeling...frisky...so, I sent him my picture. Soon after, I started getting strange messages on my facebook. We started getting strange calls at the house. It started out strange, and turned scary. Basically, the guy had released my pics and personal information to a revenge porn site. I got rape threats. Death threats. We ended up having to change our phone number. We ended up having to move. It was horrifying. And, taught me about what it means to be a girl on the internet.
Here is what I wrote on another website I used to post things in (This was a general post on that site because I was constantly getting asked about sharing pics or skyping or kiking, or whatever, but it should give you a good idea):
So, I constantly get asked to send pics, to cam, to whatever.
I guess before people add me, let me explain a little about my life.
I was the victim of a revenge porn site. I was talking to someone for over a year online, and one day I was feeling a little naughty. I sent him some nude pics.
So, we had a fun cyber, and that was the end.
Until one day I started getting some very disturbing text messages, facebook messages, etc.
Rape threats.
Death threats.
Sex solicitations.
I was not even 18. It seems the person I sent the pics to posted them on a revenge porn site, and put my real life information next to it.
I was scared, for my life, for my body. My father called the police, and was told they could not do anything about it. We changed addresses, we changed phone numbers. We became unregistered because of what this one guy did on the internet.
So, call me paranoid if you want, call me whatever you want, but this is my life. I will not give you my facebook information. I will not give you my skype information. I will not join kik and cam with you.
I have fun writing naughty stories. I love writing, and some are erotica. I don't mind if you want to try to rp with me. Or if you want some naughty messages back and forth. But don't bother asking, because I will not send you anything other than a message on EP.
Block me if you want, I don't care. You didn't go through hell because you were young, stupid, and send nude pictures to someone. I did. I will not repeat that experience.
And don't bother trying to tell me "I am not like that". How would I know what you are like? I met you through some random, anonymous website. I don't know you, so don't even play that game with me.
So, please remember, don't ask, because you already know the answer...
Of course, if you want to read more about what made me "me" (with all my thorns and mental brokeness), you can read my blog entry: dirtylittlemestories.blogspot.com/2013/08/damaged-goods-about-me.html
So, have I shared my pic after that point? Honestly, yes. But, it is something that for the most part I have a rule about, because I have been through the horrors of being "open"... Here, you can also read this: dirtylittlemestories.blogspot.com/2016/01/just-another-rant-on-society-and.html
It will give you a little understanding of why I do not really share like I would love to. I guess the bad experience sort of turned me camera shy. Even my parents complain they never get pics of me...
C.Hmmm. Could be. What if I am? Would it matter? Honestly, I am not judgemental. I actually have a friend who is m3f transgender, and my husband's sister is f2m transgender. My friend wants to fully transition, but my sister-in-law (who has also been my past lover...shhh, don't tell my husband about that though, he thinks we are just friends, which we are now, but weren't always) will never transition or even try to live as a male because if she did, her family would completely disown her. It is a sad situation where she can't really be her, the family's "known" secret. So, you can be whomever you want, and I will not judge. As long as you are happy and not harming others I don't really mind.
D. You know, I think you just might be one of-scratch that, the only writer on this website I have a inkling of respect for because you're the only writer who actually CARES about her work, who's trying to write. You seem to put more effort in your writing then I've seen in many adult CYOSs and for that, you have my regard. Thanks ^.^ Always nice to hear positive feedback. Yes, I try, but that is also my curse. One reason why I go through writing spurts, then nothing for a long time. Because, I have tried to force myself. If you want to see my writing when I try to force it, just to please my readers, read this path: Dirty Me/The adult video store
This was just that...forcing myself to create some alternative. This: Dirty Me/The park is based on a real life experience though, so it is a better story (well, if you think a girl actually doing something like that makes a good story, but that is another matter=P). --Dirty Me 02:22, 15 June 2016 (UTC)
I am in a somewhat whimsical mood right now, so working on the Wasteland Survival Guide. I guess my first question is: Have you ever played the fallout games? Especially 3, but for chapter 4+, it will be for others. For Chapter 1-3, I would like help seeing if I am doing very good in imitating Moria's style in my writing. But, I guess if you have not played the games, then nothing you can really help with. --Dirty Me 06:28, 15 June 2016 (UTC)
lol, guess you realized the error? Yeah, by that point, people are stealing babies and shooting husbands or wives, so I think the guards and everything are all gone xD
Sadly, it seems pretty realistic that rape would actually be more prevalent in that world. I finally got further in the story on the game, so yeah, the guy who took Shaun would not really do something like that, but I don't really want to change it now. I wrote like that to set the "Adult" mood for the average CYoS reader, so they could get the sex out of the way. And sadly, you look at the world, and rape would be not only prevalent, but also something that has happened to almost every female in the game. For example: Raiders. They have a might makes right mentality. Do you think if they wanted to have sex with a woman they would bother to ask, or even try to court her? No, they would take. In the real world, sex slavery is real, so if you think about the Fallout world, and the slavery, do you think the only thing people do with slaves is make them work? That never even happened in the old days in the US with slavery. Many female slaves had to endure her owners raping her. Is it an idea I like? No, I have been raped. So, yes, I will include it, but as you notice in that intro, I will include it more realistically, rather than the way many CYoS writers include it. Later, I will try to use that to explain certain behavioral traits. I am trying to give the adult content many readers on here expect, but in a way that shows how that would be for a woman, rather than a man's ideal of a woman. Would it have been better if she was having a "wet" dream? Maybe it would have been better to not even include, but again, the original author put it in the adult category so I assume the author wanted it to be adult oriented. I am just trying to make sure it isn't "She woke up from her freezing and saw a naked man with a 12" penis standing over her. After being frozen so long, she was immediately wet and jumped up, swallowing the entire length, gagging a bit at it." Yeah, how realistic is that? But, it is the type of thing I would expect of many of the authors on here. I am trying to express her range of emotions, the environment, the mood. Confused - rotting breath, stink of a person who hasn't bathed for a while - horror as your mind puts it together - helplessness at your situation - the sense of revulsion at what they did to you - the horror of watching your husband shot, your baby taken - waking up again, and mentally screaming about the stuff that happened. I mean, how would you feel, having one horror stacked on top of another? If you honestly think about the setting, although the game is not a horror, a reality of it would be. I think every author would write it a bit different, but I am trying to portray a somewhat realistic view. And yes, I will be writing lots of rape scenes for it, I have been thinking about writing more of these for this site lately. Why rape? Because, you know how many stories I have read on here that the woman is raped, that make me want to scream at the author, or make me honestly a bit scared of some of the people on this site, if they actually view women the way they write? Since it is a prevalent theme in many places here, and since the fallout world would actually be a world where almost every woman would be a victim of it, I want to at least make the readers think about what it is like to be a woman in that situation. Put my readers in my shoes, so they know women are not just some random hole that exists for a penis, but are real, thinking people. That it has dramatic, traumatic effects on someone, to have their body violated. So, I write what many people on here seem to want, but my way.
Anyways, I was more curious if I captured Moria Brown's tone well in my Chapter 1-3 of the Wasteland Survival Guide. I even did alot of reading of the quest on wikis to try to figure out how to write it in a way that seemed to match her. --Dirty Me 01:52, 16 June 2016 (UTC)
Oh, I played that too, but not as much. The stories from a raider is basically any fallout game. Doesn't matter, that is why it is in the fallout shorts, misc section. I am trying to paint a picture of why raiders are like they are. Guess I will let you wait until after you can read them before asking for your opinion. As for the scene in the intro, yes, I know it does not match the game. I wrote it for the average CYoS reader, and well, you should understand the average reader by now xD --Dirty Me 03:30, 18 June 2016 (UTC)
G. Public use? Yes, I arranged that as a fantasy fulfillment with one of my "lovers". lol, if you think about it, it was a dirty old man who liked young women, but I knew what I was getting into. Let me know when you want to read and I will direct you to the proper path. Since most of the path was taken from my blog, which is based on my true experience (Please note, I actually don't remember much of any of my experiences all that well, so many of them, while based on my real experiences, do have some level or artistic liberty. Especially since I tried to make my experiences writings naughty, not depressing. My slow motion love is about the only one that has all the details of what happened, since I actually wrote that shortly after it did happen, with a couple additional elements)
H. For swimsuits becoming translucent, yes, some do, but not the ones you find in the normal stores. Most of the "See through when wet" swimsuits you see are either specially made, a find from some company trying something new that went "oops" after, or lingerie that the model is wearing as a swim suit. As for the ones that do, normally they are aimed at sunbathing, not swimming. Most women would not wear them swimming. Sorry, you won't be able to go to the beach and see lots of naughty bits from swimsuits that have gotten wet.
I. Of course I realize almost nothing is original. Most of people's writings will draw on something from either other writing, the past, or something we imagine. But that can be said with almost everything. It is not original, it is a modification of something that was already around. Fires are common, cavemen did not create them, they just mimicked nature. Wheels are round, like rocks that are found rolling down hills. Nothing original, just mimicking nature. Birds fly. Nothing new. Just mimicking how they fly until we found a way to fly ourselves. There are example after example of how we just mimic and tweak to create something that seems original.
Sure, I will review and put the review under the review thing I started. I really need to get busy on it, just had too many other ideas that are running around in my head. Welcome to me, a bit flighty and disorganized. I have ADD, a touch of OCD, and more than a few other things that make me much less than perfect...
Ever wanted to fuck a statue in a museum, try to give a BJ to cliche serial killer who just murdered your boyfriend who you were having sex with at the time, or fuck a werecat? - Putting up your words here: Statue, hmm, that is one I would be willing to do. One thing about me, sometimes I just like to see how people react to things. If I thought I could get away with it, I probably would xD But, I doubt I would do it for more than to watch people "WTF" all over the place, because honestly, it seems like it would be extremely uncomfortable. I have also saw those pics of girls giving the statues bjs. They make me laugh. Horny, no, funny, yes. For the serial killer, no. Nothing I would ever really even have a fantasy about. Or want to either. I don't like people getting hurt. Werecat? You mean like on True Blood? No, nothing I have ever fantasized about. I have, honestly, fantasied about bestiality, but I would never do it. One of the main reasons is because, how can the animal give consent? I mean, isn't it really just trained animal abuse? While I might have thought about it, it just seems wrong to me. --Dirty Me 01:57, 20 June 2016 (UTC)
Oh, and your note to Platypus, if they are in the wrong section, feel free to move them. But, are they because some random person added something they should not have, that kicked them out? If so, well, then it is better to edit those few pages that cause them to be in the wrong area, so the original author's writing spirit is kept. But, if the original author, or many other contributors additions to many pages, caused them to be "Adult" instead of mature, there may be no choice. If you need to edit more than two or three pages, it should probably just be moved. --Dirty Me 02:03, 20 June 2016 (UTC)
Sorry, I don't know World of Darkness. And yeah, there are some strange ones. I giggled at the statue one, I think I know which you are talking about. However, the story is not that great. I mean, it seemed to have potential, at least by the name, but the author did not do well at placing themselves in the shoes of a woman. I mean, it was supposed to be for women, from what I read (Sorry, I don't remember the story, just remember that part where the statue wakes up and then turns you into a statue), and it did a horrible job of making me feel much. But yeah, honestly, it did make me wonder how others would react if they caught me doing something like that.
As for the stories you asked me to review, well, I had to make the mature sections. It is split because the website kept complaining at me, so no choice. Once I finished that, I read through the Escape from Syria story. It isn't too bad. Thinking about it though, I want to add something else in my review. Also, my idea is that anyone at all can make their own review. If you want to review it, just create your name link, then your review. That is why I have the DirtyMeStoryTime's review in there, so they know who the reviewer is. Other's opinions might be different, so others should also add their own if they care about the story. --Dirty Me 06:07, 20 June 2016 (UTC)
Eh, I know what you mean about that, but it does honestly make a good method for distraction. I actually guess when I read it, I thought the author was more trying to distract rather than seduce. Of course, if you think about it from a realistic point of view, would the guys be distracted, or incensed? I don't know that area of the world really, but from what I do know, wouldn't the guys be rather...pissed...at her for that? Given the covering of women and what is considered vulgar? I guess you would need to talk to someone more familiar with the culture there for that. I did note the author tried to use sex as a weapon a bit much, but honestly, not on a ton of paths, here and there only, when compared to 171 pages total. It was almost like the author wanted to use a random excuse for a sex scene. --Dirty Me 06:16, 20 June 2016 (UTC)
I guess that could be it. The directions I remember, the statue came to life, asked the girl if she would be his forever, and if she said yes, she turned into a statue. As for the main character being "random girl with big breasts", well, that is many of the adult stories, since most are written by males. Very little character development, outside of the kinds of sex they are interested in. I guess that is one thing about the story you asked me to review, The Devil's Daughter, that made more sense. I can easily believe that satanists would value style over substance, aka: shallow things. So, it does fit more, yet, that author actually gave more of a backstory than in ones like "Oops, your naked". As for how I see The Devil's Daughter. Well, I see an author that has watched too many Japanese porn cartoons. Honestly, the story seems like a written version of those. For ASOIAF Sexy Edition, yes, I have read some pages as they pop up in the recent changes tabs. No comment about it really, to be honest. It seems like someone who likes the series, and wanted to overly sexualize it, as if the series isn't sexual enough. For the "Distract him with your tits", well, honestly, it is a cliche. In real life, real professionals will not fall for it. I know, I have tried the "Show him your cleavage" with police and tickets. I still got a ticket, and the police officer barely looked. The average writer on here, I would have been fucking and sucking him to avoid the ticket. So, it would not really work well, might catch some people off guard, but not as well as the author likes to put. But, then again, if I want realism, I will write it myself. At least the author of that did not have her fucking and sucking her way out of syria at every turn. In fact, I found it amusing that in one page, because she was so willing to give the doctor a BJ that the doctor got suspicious, was a nice change. "She acts like a slut, so it works against her". So, he didn't over use it as bad as others might have. And remember, I read every page before I put my finished review. One reason The Devil's Daughter review is notes, not review, right now. Because, there are alot of pages in that -.- --Dirty Me 02:42, 21 June 2016 (UTC)
You mean strip poker? Played it several times. It is not as sexy as many people imagine though in their fantasies. It is fun though when you are, well, me, someone who has exhibitionist tendencies and are the only girl=P And normally it does not turn into some orgy like most people like to talk about. Naked twister is just uncomfortable, but you find yourself in many funny positions. Fortunately, my grandpa liked poker, so every family gathering, we played. So, I normally held my own against the other players, and sometimes did better. It is especially fun when you are the only girl, most of the guys are naked, and you still have your naughty parts hidden. Frustrates the guys to no end xD --Dirty Me 16:32, 22 June 2016 (UTC)
If you want to look it over, the review is done for The End of the World: The Review/Adult Stories/The End of the World --Dirty Me 02:13, 24 June 2016 (UTC)
Well, I finished the review for the Life of a 13 year old. It is not very nice, but I tried to make sure it is not inflaming or anything. Although, honestly, I am not sure how else to describe it other than a misogynistic, masochistic, psychopathic masturbation story... Sadly, I don't think a single thing in the story turned me on. Smutty Sex Romp turns me on more than this story did... --Dirty Me 05:30, 27 June 2016 (UTC)
lol, interesting. Lots of changes, but only changes xD So, how is everything? Hmm, I would direct you to some of my non-adult stories, but they are rather sparse. Do you happen to know Chinese? I have a new experiment I want to try, called Texting. But, right now it is a bunch of tests, and no real content. I have written down some of my thoughts on the talk page, but if you go there, I will warn you, do not read the stuff that has been blockquoted (the indented paragraph stuff), since that was dirty talk with someone that was messaging me one time. At least, not until you can read that stuff again. --Dirty Me 06:58, 29 June 2016 (UTC)
lol, I hate twister. It is a horrible game. But, we were high, and it was there. Strip poker, sure. Some truth or dare style games, some drinking games. Since I was pretty easy to "score" with, guys liked me. Strange that most were not guys my age. Honestly, I remember very little of that time. As I have mentioned to Teejay, at that time I was heavily into drugs. Someone calculated it once, and I used about $10,000 worth of drugs a month. Pot, coke, meth, crank, speed, xtc, LSD, alcohol. Mostly the powders though. I once wrote an interpretation of a song I found, Nickleback Figured You Out, that I explained how he could have been singing about me. I probably played other games, but I don't really remember. The sad part is, while I called other girls crack whores, I really was one... for us, a crack whore was a girl who slept with people for drugs, rather than money. It wasn't that hard to get me to take off my clothes...nah, never wrote about things like that, or the normal, 1 on 1 sex (Other than Slow Motion Love, which was based on me and my husband with a couple extras). Even exhibitionism is hard to write a real story with. One reason I set up the exhibitionist as an idea -> Consequence story. I took off my clothes. I walked around. People stared. The end. Meh, hard to figure out how to write it, and lets face it, I am not a romance novel writer. I know who is reading my stories. Males mostly. So, they do not want a love story. Well, I don't think they do. They want sex, and probably exciting sex. But me, I get turned on more by the situation. Where am I? Why are we here? What is special about this? Etc. So, I try to merge it together so I enjoy it and my readers enjoy it. --Dirty Me 07:21, 29 June 2016 (UTC)
Do you mean this?
Welcome to the ever-so-wonderful world of 3.5 Dungeons and Dragons (4.0 isn't nearly complete enough yet).
If not, then sorry, I don't know what you mean xD --Dirty Me 02:19, 1 July 2016 (UTC)
Teejay's talk
If you could do a page or two on your new stories, just so I can get a feel for them, I'd be happy to contribute. -- Teejay
I will look at Anime School then. Thanks for suggesting it. -- Teejay
Anime School says "Do Not Edit." -- Teejay
Formality is definitely not necessary. I'm the casual type. :) I suppose if it's been a while, even though it says Do Not Edit... -- Teejay
I love collaborations! I did a nice one with AgentVincent on a section of Rampage a couple years back. -- Teejay
So I'm not trying to write? I'm insulted!
J/k. I know I'm not as good a writer as Dirty Me. I do my best, but writing isn't my strong point. I do enjoy it though. -- Teejay
Happy Ramadan. -- Teejay
Yes. You are now included. -- Teejay
Platypus' talk
Awesome. All glory to the Hypnobutt! --Platypus 15:16, 1 July 2016 (UTC)
