The Review/Adult Stories/The Devils Daughter
From Create Your Own Story
DirtyMeStoryTime's review of The Devils Daughter:
First, please note this is a corruption/exploitation story, where the main character's goals are to corrupt and exploit women and convince them to willingly give themselves over for the character's purpose.
1. From a pure "as an editor" review.
The author does a good job giving descriptions in his story, but in his attempts to overdescribe, starts detracting, especially given the spelling and grammatical mistakes. From a pure story flow perspective, a good editor would help eliminate these mistakes so they would no longer detract from the story elements while reading. There are also a few inconsistencies, men suddenly becoming she, the main character suddenly wearing shoes while the page before she was completely naked, but for the most part the author keeps it fairly consistent. While there are many, many pages (Over 600 at the time of this review), there are many red links. Most of the endings are bad endings for the main character, and going through it, I have never seen a good ending. While reading, be prepared to use the back key frequently. While the core of the story is consistent, I would say the story itself follows very little consistency, outside of the main satanist area. It sometimes feels like a jumble of different stories all mixed together in one voice. Other character's personalities jump from one extreme to another, creating a break in any understanding towards the other characters. While you might be able to feel yourself in the shoes of something, the sudden change pulls you back out and lose the understanding. From a character development standpoint, most of the characters are shallow cliches. There is no real growth to any of the characters, or anything really different about the characters other than seeing how they may react differently in different situations. There also seems to be no real growth of the plot line itself either. The situations are very unrealistic for the most part, and while sometimes it is easy to imagine, other times it detracts and takes you out of the flow.
2. From a "female perspective" review.
This is where it gets much more of the negative criticism. While from an editorial standpoint, the story could be much better with nothing but some path completion and a good editor to fix all the little mistakes, from a female reader perspective the story is much worse. The story strikes me as multiple, female exploiting Japanese adult anime videos all rolled into one. This is what I mean above by the characters being cliches, even down to how attractive the author makes all the women seem, outside of a few random things where the main character feels contempt for them (For example, her mom). So many super models in one story, and yet all the supermodels have very large breasts. They seem to just be a written cliche found in most Japanese anime porn. One of the most common themes is female submission to males simply through the power of the males penis. Many scenes show the woman will become a willing "sex addict" once she experiences the males dick. The author paints women as one thing: a hole for others to use. Also, the author talks about "sexual deviation", but still focuses almost exclusively on either Male/Female or Female/Female. I had found one male/male, and this involved a male and a male tiger, so I still had not found a male on male.
Rating: Again, two ratings. If you are looking for an extreme sex story (Fully of taboo situations), then sure, give this a go. The grammar may be distracting, but it is still very readable. I do recommend fixing any mistakes you see as you read though, since fixing will make it flow much better.
However, I personally do not recommend it if you want something other than a pure, female humiliation/domination oriented story, as there is very little evidence of a plot. There is a plot, but it is quickly in the main characters instant gratification. I personally do not recommend unless you are looking for taboo, situational sexual gratification. And are a misogynist...
