Hallie's Cheating
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This takes place in [[Rackham]]. | This takes place in [[Rackham]]. | ||
| - | Okay. So here's how I envision it, feel free to totally tear it apart if you want; this is merely one idea for the plot. Right?<br> So Hallie and Nick are in a compromising position at the party and they've left. We have them in a car or perhaps walking on foot (I would like to have them in a car but neither of them can drive, so faking would basically suck) and they go to Rackham from one of those nice houses near Community, you know? and perhaps there can be a continuity with the swing-set scene, because maybe they have a friend who lives near there, so they're on the swings...anyway. <br>So they go to Rackham, taking care to avoid the carcass of the Frieze building because that would just be too fucking poignant...<br>and like maybe we can have a super long establishing shot from, like the fountain or something because it's just GORGEOUS over there. or whatever.<br> | + | Okay. So here's how I envision it, feel free to totally tear it apart if you want; this is merely one idea for the plot. Right?<br> So [[Hallie]] and [[Nick]] are in a compromising position at the party and they've left. We have them in a car or perhaps walking on foot (I would like to have them in a car but neither of them can drive, so faking would basically suck) and they go to Rackham from one of those nice houses near Community, you know? and perhaps there can be a continuity with the swing-set scene, because maybe they have a friend who lives near there, so they're on the swings...anyway. <br>So they go to Rackham, taking care to avoid the carcass of the Frieze building because that would just be too fucking poignant...<br>and like maybe we can have a super long establishing shot from, like the fountain or something because it's just GORGEOUS over there. or whatever.<br> |
| - | But anyway they're at Rackham, and honestly I think Dylan should have had some sort of dialogue (unsatisfying of course) with Hallie, or perhaps Nick...saying that he wasn't going to be there, because he had "things to do" you know? with Aimee probably, like fishing? I like fishing...and then she says, "What about afterwards? The party won't be over until two or three" and he'll respond that he has, like other things to do (obviously Kati at this point?) <br><br>See, Dylan cheating with Kati could be for two reasons: 1. He saw Hallie cheating on him with Nick, or 2. He gets seduced by Kati..., and I think we're leaning towards the latter, but it could be the former if we're willing to do some wrangling, but actually I think the latter would be...oh nevermind. | + | But anyway they're at Rackham, and honestly I think [[Dylan]] should have had some sort of dialogue (unsatisfying of course) with Hallie, or perhaps Nick...saying that he wasn't going to be there, because he had "things to do" you know? with [[Aimee]] probably, like fishing? I like fishing...and then she says, "What about afterwards? The party won't be over until two or three" and he'll respond that he has, like other things to do (obviously [[Kati]] at this point?) <br><br>See, Dylan cheating with Kati could be for two reasons: 1. He saw Hallie cheating on him with Nick, or 2. He gets seduced by Kati..., and I think we're leaning towards the latter, but it could be the former if we're willing to do some wrangling, but actually I think the latter would be...oh nevermind. |
<br><br>ANYWAY, MY POINT IS--Dylan and Hallie have an unsatisfying dialogue, in which he seems completely non-perturbed and in which she is obviously upset, but he doesn't really notice. Maybe Dylan even tells Nick to go to the party so that Hallie won't be lonely. He's got his own things to do. (Maybe he tells Nick to "look after" her. Haha!)<br>At the party, they're both bored and slightly nervous, I would say, so they leave, but Dylan finally does arrive, as he promised Hallie previously he would try to do. Maybe he's been getting guiltier and guiltier as the evening progresses, worrying that she won't have been having fun. He might call her once, and at this point she's found Nick and maybe they've gotten pretty close, and she goes to the bathroom and Dylan calls her and he's all worried and guilty, and she's dissuading him from coming, because she has her own agenda by this point (and is also slightly drunk). But then he goes, "I'm coming" but then she taps Nick and they decide to leave. | <br><br>ANYWAY, MY POINT IS--Dylan and Hallie have an unsatisfying dialogue, in which he seems completely non-perturbed and in which she is obviously upset, but he doesn't really notice. Maybe Dylan even tells Nick to go to the party so that Hallie won't be lonely. He's got his own things to do. (Maybe he tells Nick to "look after" her. Haha!)<br>At the party, they're both bored and slightly nervous, I would say, so they leave, but Dylan finally does arrive, as he promised Hallie previously he would try to do. Maybe he's been getting guiltier and guiltier as the evening progresses, worrying that she won't have been having fun. He might call her once, and at this point she's found Nick and maybe they've gotten pretty close, and she goes to the bathroom and Dylan calls her and he's all worried and guilty, and she's dissuading him from coming, because she has her own agenda by this point (and is also slightly drunk). But then he goes, "I'm coming" but then she taps Nick and they decide to leave. | ||
| - | <br><br> | + | <br><br>AND SO they go to Rackham and things progress and they end up making out in one of the reading rooms, up against the window, so that it's difficult to see Hallie but very easy to see Nick. Um, we could then have a thing where Dylan goes to the party but can't see Hallie, and so he's very isolated (this happens in teen movies a lot; I think it definitely happened in "Garden State". And so someone's like "I think she left" and he calls her but her phone is off, or it's on but it just keeps ringing, whichever is more poignant and appropriate... |
| + | <br><br>and so he starts walking, and we understand that Rackham isn't too far from the house, and he walks by and sees Nick's car (so we really need to have a driving scene, or at least a scene in which we UNDERSTAND that they drove even if they didn't actually, so he goes inside, because he needs a motive to go inside, and he's dialing Nick's number when he comes across Nick making out with this unknown girl whom he can only partially see through the window. And he calls him. And watches him answering the phone. Which is sort of creepy but also neat! | ||
| + | <br><br>And so then we cut to Nick and Hallie, with periodic cuts back to Dylan, and so they have a brief conversation in which Nick says he'll be right out and that he's 'preoccupied', because he doesn't know that Dylan knows what's going on...and Hallie might hide beneath a table or in a cabinet or not, depending...but anyway... | ||
| + | <br><br>They leave together and Hallie comes out of her hiding place...and I guess at this point Dylan and Kati have to have something but I'm not sure what... | ||
Revision as of 18:22, 24 May 2007
This takes place in Rackham.
Okay. So here's how I envision it, feel free to totally tear it apart if you want; this is merely one idea for the plot. Right?
So Hallie and Nick are in a compromising position at the party and they've left. We have them in a car or perhaps walking on foot (I would like to have them in a car but neither of them can drive, so faking would basically suck) and they go to Rackham from one of those nice houses near Community, you know? and perhaps there can be a continuity with the swing-set scene, because maybe they have a friend who lives near there, so they're on the swings...anyway.
So they go to Rackham, taking care to avoid the carcass of the Frieze building because that would just be too fucking poignant...
and like maybe we can have a super long establishing shot from, like the fountain or something because it's just GORGEOUS over there. or whatever.
But anyway they're at Rackham, and honestly I think Dylan should have had some sort of dialogue (unsatisfying of course) with Hallie, or perhaps Nick...saying that he wasn't going to be there, because he had "things to do" you know? with Aimee probably, like fishing? I like fishing...and then she says, "What about afterwards? The party won't be over until two or three" and he'll respond that he has, like other things to do (obviously Kati at this point?)
See, Dylan cheating with Kati could be for two reasons: 1. He saw Hallie cheating on him with Nick, or 2. He gets seduced by Kati..., and I think we're leaning towards the latter, but it could be the former if we're willing to do some wrangling, but actually I think the latter would be...oh nevermind.
ANYWAY, MY POINT IS--Dylan and Hallie have an unsatisfying dialogue, in which he seems completely non-perturbed and in which she is obviously upset, but he doesn't really notice. Maybe Dylan even tells Nick to go to the party so that Hallie won't be lonely. He's got his own things to do. (Maybe he tells Nick to "look after" her. Haha!)
At the party, they're both bored and slightly nervous, I would say, so they leave, but Dylan finally does arrive, as he promised Hallie previously he would try to do. Maybe he's been getting guiltier and guiltier as the evening progresses, worrying that she won't have been having fun. He might call her once, and at this point she's found Nick and maybe they've gotten pretty close, and she goes to the bathroom and Dylan calls her and he's all worried and guilty, and she's dissuading him from coming, because she has her own agenda by this point (and is also slightly drunk). But then he goes, "I'm coming" but then she taps Nick and they decide to leave.
AND SO they go to Rackham and things progress and they end up making out in one of the reading rooms, up against the window, so that it's difficult to see Hallie but very easy to see Nick. Um, we could then have a thing where Dylan goes to the party but can't see Hallie, and so he's very isolated (this happens in teen movies a lot; I think it definitely happened in "Garden State". And so someone's like "I think she left" and he calls her but her phone is off, or it's on but it just keeps ringing, whichever is more poignant and appropriate...
and so he starts walking, and we understand that Rackham isn't too far from the house, and he walks by and sees Nick's car (so we really need to have a driving scene, or at least a scene in which we UNDERSTAND that they drove even if they didn't actually, so he goes inside, because he needs a motive to go inside, and he's dialing Nick's number when he comes across Nick making out with this unknown girl whom he can only partially see through the window. And he calls him. And watches him answering the phone. Which is sort of creepy but also neat!
And so then we cut to Nick and Hallie, with periodic cuts back to Dylan, and so they have a brief conversation in which Nick says he'll be right out and that he's 'preoccupied', because he doesn't know that Dylan knows what's going on...and Hallie might hide beneath a table or in a cabinet or not, depending...but anyway...
They leave together and Hallie comes out of her hiding place...and I guess at this point Dylan and Kati have to have something but I'm not sure what...
