Idea Pitches
From Create Your Own Story
This is a page full of IDEAS for choose your own adventures that haven't been authored yet. Sometimes, you have a great idea, but you just can't finish its story, right? Post the idea or unfinished piece here and have it changed.
Kawi: I've been thinking about making a story where you are an international mercenary and you get to choose an organisation to work for. I went as far to make a setting for this story.
This is it so far...
This story is set in the dystopian future of 2050. You are a mercenary, Jack Templar. You work for whoever pays the highest price. In such an unstable world, you are never short of work.
Here is a brief summary of Jack Templar world
North America- The former superpower was plunged into a second civil war during the 2030’s. The North and the South are once again at each others throat. Neither side can gain superiority over the other.
Western Europe- Its people have the best standards of living. However, puppet democracies are really controlled by powerful aristocratic families and everyone is under 24 hour surveillance for their ‘protection’. Think George Orwell’s 1984
Eastern Europe- Individual warlords control the rural areas, and the conflict between them creates many atrocities. Meanwhile, its larger cities have become the red light district of the world as a result of the thriving sex slave trade.
Africa- Any hopes for harmony in Africa are all but destroyed. Old tribal tensions and civil unrest has plunged the continent into unimaginable bloodshed. As a result, most of the world’s military contactors use it as a base of operations.
China and Japan- An uneasy truce exists between the worlds leading military and technological super powers. Their mutually beneficial arrangement makes them a force to be reckoned with. They are suspicious of all foreigners.
South America- Most of the continent is controlled by a dictator. To the people, he is a benevolent revolutionary. Under the surface, he runs the biggest drug operation in the entire world. Resistance forces occupy most of the Amazon.
Russia- The old soviet power has long since shut its door on the rest of the world. Few know what goes on inside the country.
Middle East- Groups of all descriptions squabble over the last oil reserves. The longest wall ever built surrounds the state of Israel. Meanwhile, Palestinians have united and started an organised front against their old enemies.
Australia- An unknown epidemic swept the continent clean of any human habitation. There are many rumours that mutants occupy certain parts of the mainland.
Sorry. My imagination went a bit crazy.Any thoughts or feedback would be greatly appriciated.
---You've created a world. Not much else. There's no real plot to your idea, or supporting cast, or anything. These things could be forgivable, but your world isn't even that interesting. It's a world spawned by a few exaggerated cliches. North and south start fighting? Over what? Slaves? Japan and China enemies? Whoa how novel. Africa enveloped in civil war? But Europe is controlled by government? Incredible. It'd be more novel to make Africa the strongest united nation in the world, plunge Europe and America into poverty and civil war, then have China and Japan on the move to take over these disputed territories.
And Jack Templar? Might as well call him Buff McWarriorpants. Give him an ordinary name. In order to draw reader immersion and interest, in-fact, it would be best if you made this Jack some deadbeat nobody. One day he's enjoying his life somewhere in the word when it's suddenly usurped from him. He has to learn to survive in a hostile changing world. There, that's a basic idea for a story, one which is well suited for CHOYA. Thanks for enduring my critical comments.--Anubite 11:29, 28 November 2008 (PST)
Jeffthedork: I've been thinking about a story were: 3 teens are dared to spend the night in a haunted house and they get attacked by gousts and they find secret rooms and stuff like that.
---Good idea. What name and what rating?
---Jeffthdork: Rating = R. Name = Fright.
Jeffthedork: I've go another idea: A haunted prison kills it's convicts and it's guards. You would be a guard and have to try to live. The prison would be able to turn on machines by its self and make unreal stuff happen like the back wall of a cell push the inmate in the cell against the cell door, slicing him into many pieces.
NovelOfDoom: Is this page public?I hope so,cause I'm not sure xD.I had an idea for a story that I couldn't finish.Your a average guy who has a wife and 2 kids.Then all of a sudden this dude calls,saying he has a expert sniper who has a lock on your family,and you gotta go through a bunch of obstacles(involving fighting numerous enimies) assigned by the guy,or else he'll order the sniper to take out your kids and wife.Sorry that was so long :P
Yes, this page is public. And that's not too long for an idea pitch. --Platypus 16:17, 24 August 2008 (PDT)
Jack Frost: That is a really good story idea. (how come I never think of these great story ideas?) Would you mind if I write that story? It sounds excellent. Its just the thing I need.
TheEverLastingTale:Are you talking to me?LOL I'm NovelOfDoom,but sadly,I completely forgot my password,so I ended up making another account,LOL.Jack Frost,I likey that name :D.If you were talking about me,I would be honored if you write that story :D(I'm just guessing that you've been on this site for a long while,LMAO.)
monkey76: how about a story where the laws of physics (or reason) don't apply, so the most sensable choice might not work eg: if you ask boss for a raise he explodes and if you kick him he'll give you the ocarina of time. or is that a bad idea?
Jack Frost: If somebody ever writes that, I hope they put it in the "Nobody Should Read These" section. But, that does sound like it would be a good story. That also seems like a great idea for a story.
Trar: I need help writing my story, Would You, Could You, Fuck A Goat?!. Every page has to have an option at the bottom of it leading toDie, ALWAYS, no matter what. Also, the player will NEVER actually fuck a goat. That would be bad.
TheNeverEndingTale:This is getting annoying ><.I keep forgetting my password,so I ended up making yet ANOTHER account(I'm NovelOfDoom and TheEverLastingTale.) I have another idea.You live in (whatever country you want) where the President is reall corrupt,so you take it upon yourself to take him out.
