User talk:Marzipan92

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Please allow actions to happen. Don't begin to start to have things happen. Begin to is a useful phrase when referring to continuous action, or action that's interrupted, but otherwise, kick it out. Your prose will read much better without it. Instead of he begins to lead to you his car, make it he leads you to his car. He doesn't stop leading you, does he? Nothing happens while he's leading you. So just get led and get it over. --Platypus 20:01, 24 April 2015 (UTC)

If you're going to post in one of my stories, make sure the choices are choices your character can make. You can't choose to have a knock on your door interrupt you! --Platypus 17:47, 31 August 2015 (UTC)

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