User talk:Anedwcan

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If you are going to contribute to Smutty Sex Romp, make sure that the choices are ALWAYS your character's choices. It's Choose YOUR Own Adventure, never Choose His or Choose Hers. Also, page titles do not end with strange characters like IN. And learn how to punctuate with dialogue before adding any more pages. --Platypus 00:57, 16 December 2011 (UTC)

I'm sorry, but I will not restore pages that do not fit in my story. If you failed to notice the warning on the Main Page that unacceptable contributions will be immediately deleted from Smutty Sex Romp, then I suggest you read the warning again. I'm not going as far as some authors and stating that no one else may add to my writing, but I will remove anything that fails to meet my approval. If you are not comfortable with this, then choose a different story to add to or start one of your own. I promise not to delete anything you write in a story you start yourself. --Platypus 16:22, 16 December 2011 (UTC)

You're making some fine contributions now, but I think you should read Punctuation with dialogue, because you're consistently using periods instead of commas where your dialogue should be connected to the dialogue tag following it. --Platypus 22:46, 20 December 2011 (UTC)

Again, please, keep Smutty Sex Romp choices in second person. Choose YOUR Own Adventure. --Platypus 17:33, 21 February 2012 (UTC)

Contents 1 Remember 2 colloquialisms 3 Sleep Fantasy writing 4 The Grubby Construction Site 5 Female in the Sewers

Remember

Some writers like having 'if you did this previously, then you can click here' type structures in their stories, but I'm not one of them. I'd like to keep Smutty Sex Romp free of that sort of thing. But thanks for asking first, and keep up the good writing. I like what you've been doing. --Platypus 23:29, 12 January 2012 (UTC)

Please, in Rampage, just like Smutty Sex Romp, make sure that the choices are ALWAYS your character's choices. It's Choose YOUR Own Adventure, never Choose His or Choose Hers. --Platypus 17:43, 17 January 2012 (UTC)

Ah, no prob - I just noticed deviations from this in some places, and thought the policy was more relaxed in Rampage than Smutty. Thank you for improving my pages! Anedwcan 23:40, 17 January 2012 (UTC)

colloquialisms

I agree that characters don't always speak in a grammatically correct fashion, and so grammatical standards for dialogue are much looser. Without a specific example, I can't say if you've found a case that should have just been left alone or if it really did need correction. --Platypus 16:32, 5 February 2012 (UTC)

Sleep Fantasy writing

I read the summaries of what you're writing, as well as what you've added so far. Just wanted to say you're following my intent pretty well, notably on the non-consent areas. I'm shooting to make the portions where you go back and pack some clothes be more of a consensual, fun stay at where ever the reader chooses to go, whereas going as you are leads to non-consensual trips. Dire/deadly ending are acceptable during escape sections, due to exposure and poor decisions, though I'd like there to be a happier end to them as well. I'm probably going to add some public-exposure type scenarios into the nude portion, as well, for both the consensual and non-consensual routes. If you have questions, feel free to ask them, and add away as you see fit. jealco 11:20, 18 November 2012 (UTC)

Also, your writings are very well written. Feel free to flesh out my portions if there's spots you feel are lacking.

Sure thing - it's your original ideas! Anedwcan 11:24, 18 November 2012 (UTC)

The Grubby Construction Site

I'm kind of curious as to where you were planning to head with the portion where the reader ends up stuck in the barbed wire.

Dunno, really. Sometime you just act upon an image in your head, with no long-term planning. Sure, "erotic death" is the obvious bad (good?) ending, but I'm fully willing to see what other editors can do with her predicament... Anedwcan 16:05, 18 November 2012 (UTC)

I've got a pretty good idea of where the inside of the shed can lead. That portion has great potential as a homage to Arthur Saxon's A Funny Thing Happened... works. I'm looking forward to when you continue those lines. Send me a message if I can help in any way. jealco 11:55, 18 November 2012 (UTC)

Have you examined the poster outside the shed...? The hint is far from obvious, but it's there... ;-) Personally, I'm not as specifically into poo as Mr Saxon, but A Funny Thing Happened on the Way to the Job Interview is still a very fascinating text... Anedwcan 16:05, 18 November 2012 (UTC)

So far, I've set up a kind of gatekeeping choice: I would not proceed in a true saxonian style if the reader reacts to the scene with horror or disgust - a true Saxonian heroine would be indifferent if not intrigued... Anedwcan 16:05, 18 November 2012 (UTC)

Mainly, I encourage you to go for it! There is very little you can do that I would consider "sabotage". In the uncommon event I feel an editor changes direction too abruptly, I favor solving it by inserting an intermediate passage, ideally giving the reader the power to choose. (For instance, the way I edited Cabin in the Woods after perceiving your goals to be different from Teejays) Anedwcan 16:05, 18 November 2012 (UTC)

Female in the Sewers

I don't know if you're psychic or what, but you ninja'ed in and put some awesome stuff in there. It's funny, because I sat there thinking Anedwcan would have some fun with a female protagonist in the sewers. And props on including the rat again. Male this time, or still female?

Question, though: Is it just insects in the water, or something more? I'm working out different scenarios in my head, and I would like to keep the sewers somewhat similar. jealco 13:20, 10 February 2013 (PST)