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Also, you have a page, [[Kiss his perfect mouth]]. The page following has a problem. The story flow here breaks, with the reader being at home in her living room, then, suddenly in the park, and going behind a bush. I think you need to change the flow or break this part and put it on a different branch.
Also, you have a page, [[Kiss his perfect mouth]]. The page following has a problem. The story flow here breaks, with the reader being at home in her living room, then, suddenly in the park, and going behind a bush. I think you need to change the flow or break this part and put it on a different branch.
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P.S. To separate your sentences, hit enter twice, not once. If there is not a blank line between the two sentences, it will end up in the same paragraph as the previous sentence/s.
--[[User:DirtyMeStoryTime|Dirty Me]] 03:22, 7 July 2014 (UTC)
--[[User:DirtyMeStoryTime|Dirty Me]] 03:22, 7 July 2014 (UTC)

Current revision as of 03:35, 7 July 2014

Hello, been reading through your Teenage life story a bit. I have been making some corrections for you, but I notice you keep changing the category between teenage life and teenage story. You need to be careful of that.

Also, you have a page, Kiss his perfect mouth. The page following has a problem. The story flow here breaks, with the reader being at home in her living room, then, suddenly in the park, and going behind a bush. I think you need to change the flow or break this part and put it on a different branch.

P.S. To separate your sentences, hit enter twice, not once. If there is not a blank line between the two sentences, it will end up in the same paragraph as the previous sentence/s.

--Dirty Me 03:22, 7 July 2014 (UTC)

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