User talk:Teejay
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Matt/Katelyn/Amanda to come, maybe very soon. Possible Matt's Dad/Katelyn or Matt's Dad/Amanda or Matt's Dad/Katelyn/Amanda to come. Any other ideas? - Super Tramp
The Dwayne being humilated path is a 'true love' path, well part of it anyway. What I have going on there is Dwayne's older brother Derrick is going to come into the picture very soon with hoping to get revenge for this brothers humilation depending on the choices you make.
Yeah i realize i haven't really given Katelyn a chance and i love her spunky/sassy attitude. She is definitely a bad girl and i should REALLY show that side of her.
As for Mrs. O'Rielly.. Yeah, some of those paths I left open early on should definitely flesh out a story involving her.
You kept saying Mark but i'm guessing your talking about Matt - the main character.
I've been finding myself ending open paths just so i don't have to deal with them later and this was never my intention. I always wanted the story to be able to intertwine if and whenever possible with slightly different dialogs and events. Such as when Amanda and Katelyn go to the club alone after Matt tells him he can't make it and meet up with Dwayne, there would be a different outcome during the girls locker room scene.
I want people to think.. hey, the story didn't end so I must not have choosen the wrong path only to have it come to an abrupt unsatisfactory end because of that choice you made fifteen pages ago.
I don't know, I'm working on it.
Anyway, I read some of your contributions and I like them. If you would like to help out you can but I do have a lot of ideas that are just to many to write all down. I'm a slow typer and I know that can probably be a little frustrating. - Super Tramp
Hey! Thanks a lot for the kind words. I thought for sure I was getting yet another warning from Platypus for doing something wrong. I'm very new to this site and don't know the ropes just yet. I'm glad you would like to contribute and thank you very much for asking first. I'm trying to something sorta unique with this story that i don't see often enough in other stories within the Adult Section. I'm trying to make this a story that isn't just about adult themes but rather a story that may occasionally have adult themes. hmm, does that make sense?
I would appreciate any suggestions and maybe I can incorporate them into the story. As of right now though I would like to keep story 'closed' to the community. I REALLY HOPE this doesn't change your appreciation for this story and I hope you will continue reading. Again thank you very much and Merry Christas & Happy New Years. - Super Tramp
well, that very bad if that's only a standard "warning" because it was extremely rude and uncalled for, besides after reading through what he has said and done with others stories it appears i am not the only person who would agree it was very rude. i will continue to work on my story for now but if things like that continue in such a rude way, i'll finish it somewhere else because i don't feel like spending hours of work only to receive rude comments. anyway i would love to hear your ideas and may be able to throw some, if not many of them in with my story as i really only have one or two ideas which can go more then a couple pages at the moment.
i still fully believe that those kind of warnings may be necessary but can easily be dealt with in a much better,less rude fashion. after reading through his other comments i am shocked there is no FAQ page that is easily accessible to provide that kind of information to new users, that would avoid new users of the site reviving comments which they feel are rude and will allow more users to come and actually stay in the long run.
hailey
Thanks for contributing. I had intended that to be an ending but drawing it out a little longer wouldn't hurt. :) Nice to know at least one person has read a little so far! -- Cpt. Devonin
Just so you know, there are a couple of ways to revert vandalism. You can click the History tab on the top of the page, select the version that existed before the vandal attack, Edit, and save. Or you can click on the vandal's user name on the Recent Changes page, then click on User Contributions. Every page he's made or editted will have a 'revert' option next to it. Click 'revert' and his editing will be undone. --Platypus 05:01, 19 February 2009 (PST)
High School?
Is that the one listed under "Poor Taste Stories"?
I'll give anything a go, but I want to be certain I'm working on the right story. --Robin
Okey dokey!
I'll have a look at it. I don't know the requirements, but I would think that if someone started the story and assigned it there, then that's why it's there. Quick question: are you male or female? --Robin
Gotcha!
Well . . . I'm female, and I like soccer. But I don't research any sports really. I much prefer to play them. High school was a long time ago for me, but writing for the University Daze story, has gotten me back in that mind-set. It will be fun to work on a high school setting too! --Robin
Thanks?
While the scene of me having sex with a fat chick wasn't absolutely needed, I do thank you for you contributions to Ty's Story. You are welcome to edit any time, but you don't have to make me have sex with everyone. :p
Re: Thanks? -- It's well written, and makes a lot more sense than the random crap I throw in. It's not my place to censor you and it's good enough for me not just to kill myself off at every option. Thank you for showing interest in further story development. Also, I agree with many of the people here, the sex scenes are very good (although the mental image of Monica is disgusting).
I'm sorry for your loss, and for me acting disgusted (in my defense, I'm pretty sure "bowling ball with limbs" was supposed to make that reaction). I noticed that, and I think I'll branch from some of the nonsexual options. I'll leave you to any erotica, you're way better at that.
Nice job
You are great at adult stories! I mean.. Just wanted to say that. Thanks in helping me out. --Orpheus 21:15, 20 June 2010 (UTC)
Supershifter
Hey... I was kind of planning some other stuff for Supershifter, and while I appreciate the assistance, I didn't put a link to it on the main page for a reason. Again, I appreciate the help, but could you let me flesh it out first? I'll put it onto the main page when I feel it's ready to go public.
So could you wait before you edit it anymore, please? I DO have plans for it, but it takes me a lot of time to write them out because I want to be descriptive and consistent. Once it's public, you can add anything you want. Or, if you really want to help out right now, I don't really know what "you" could do with "your" powers at, say, the beach. So that could be useful.
I'm planning on putting this in the Adult section, so "you" can use your power in whatever way you want, from being a genuinely kindhearted soul to being a despicable rapist who cannot be taken down, (or anything in-between.) Just something to keep in mind if you continue to help.
So you can work on another location, but please, I would like to do this branch myself.
Avast!
I appreciate your help for the Avast! story, but I hope you don't mind if I edit some of your pages in order to create hooks towards the various plots I have in mind. Also be aware that I'm a somewhat fussy person: I may edit other people's contributions for no adequately explained reason other than the fact that I wouldn't have written it this way. -- -Sentinel-, 2010-10-11
Oh, one more thing: I like my stories to be rather more detailed... If a quest can be completed too easily, there's not much fun in it.
PAGNM
Thank you for your addition to PAGNM. I cannot claim credit for starting the story, but I've worked on quite a large chunk of it, and I was wondering if anyone else was even reading. You took it in a direction I would not have thought of myself, so I just wanted to show my appreciation. --Cannon 02:02, 11 January 2011 (UTC)
Thank You
I just wanted to thank you for adding to my story... I was begining to think, I'd have to do it all myself. Seeing how I'm not a guy, those sections are harder for me to come up with.
Alien Adventure
Thank you for your additions to Alien Adventure. I'm a little bummed it was an ending, but at the same time, it just wouldn't be a Choose Your Own Adventure without endings. Thanks for making it a good one. And feel free to continue editing Alien Adventure to your heart's content. I love your style! --Cannon 21:40, 24 May 2011 (UTC)
Metropolis Power Plant
Thank you for adding the Smutty Sex Romp locations pages for the Metropolis Power Plant and Parasite's Hideout. It completely slipped my mind. Also, your addition, "Try to wear Livewire out," is awesome! Can you give me some writing tips? --Cannon 14:20, 26 May 2011 (UTC)
"Megan" addition
Hey, thanks for the page beginning for the final scene, I had been putting it off until the end because I didn't quite know how I wanted to present it. I appreciate the work, and I'll probably use it as a framework (since I do prefer the pages to be a little bit longer, especially the ending scene), but you've definitely given me a start to it. Thanks, bro.
While we're at it, any complaints with the story so far? Too violent? Not violent enough? Do you happen to have a favorite kill?
I'm planning on finishing it really soon, and a few of the upcoming weapons/methods include a gun, a baseball bat, and power tools. --TheElderOnes 20:51, 12 June 2011 (UTC)
War Pigs
I appreciate your contributions to my story. Regrettably, it was not intended to be publicly edited. Although your additions are very well written, they're inconsistent with the main story and the characters.
I apologize for this inconvenience, as I did not make it clear that my story was only supposed to be edited by myself. --AgentVincent 19:44, 10 July 2011 (UTC)
Re:
Thanks, I appreciate it. I haven't read Rescue myself, but I'll probably check it now.
I'll wait and see how my story progresses before I open it up for public editing. --AgentVincent
MOTDE
Hey man, you're always an quality writer. Haven´t seen a bad page from you yet! The text you wrote fits perfectly with the overall feel of the story. I always thought it was hard writing swordfights btw.
Kind of had other plans for the effects of the duel through. All four options are marked with B1 or B2 (you can only see it in the edit, not the actual article). I do this to keep track of decisions that affect the competition with Solaria. I figured that if you lose then Solaria´s soldiers would steal the princesses away (thus taking points away) but if you win then the huntresses would be able to successfully repel the enemies.
The B means that you took the path through the market road and then acquired the generals head as a trophy. The 1 or 2 that follows signifies if you won or lost against Solaria. But if you had taken the (yet unwritten) temple road, marked with a C, then you would have acquired a different trophy.
I´m very undecided on what to do with Minvir through. I kind of want to keep her fate similar no matter what happens in the duel with Solaria (killing her off in battle if Daine defeats Solaria). But I´m not sure I want to write her off or not. Making Trix the new and young second-in-commander opens up new elements in the story but closes others. I´m not sure if the new elements are better, or if they can be implemented in other ways.
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Oh thanks for writing the rest of the page! Great as always and I appreciate the effort. I might pad it somewhat through.
Dankeschön
Yeah, Megan is finally done. That's a giant weight off of my shoulders. It's funny, it was meant to be a quick 23-page story written out of boredom, but personal life, planning, re-planning, and revisions ended up making it take forever.
And by god, were there some revisions. The entire final page, "Return home", was only a fourth of the length of what it is now. I had originally been using the Quick, Good, Brutal system like you had outlined on it, but I ended up dropping it in favor of Megan recording a message for everyone (I couldn't help but reference WLB with Jack and Sarah. I'll probably be writing that next...) before she did herself in. The gun and power tool pages are still on my to-do list, but they'll be a future endeavor, a little update of sorts for another day.
And, uh... yeah, that's it. Guess I rambled there, but yeah. And now that I mention WLB, I'm sure you've found your way to it by now. But, overall, thanks for the congratulations. --TheElderOnes 20:35, 11 September 2011 (UTC)
Re: Mind Reading?
Thanks man. I'm trying to get over a massive writer's block thats preventing me from continuing War Pigs and your comments mean a lot. --AgentVincent 23:12, 19 September 2011 (UTC)
We'll have to see about that...
Also, I really need to get back to War Pigs soon. I may open it up for more people to edit, just so long as they understand the personalities of the characters.--AgentVincent
Thanks man! I've been tied down to college work, which has been getting in the way of submitting contributions to this site. When I have free time, I'm going to try to get more pages written. AgentVincent 04:42, 30 January 2013 (UTC)
Remember
Do not touch my story!.....
Only joking. Thank you so much for doing that. I haven't been able to write up much on my story because of my tests happening at the moment. So I really appreciate all the help. But I suggest not to make anymore pages from now on. Well, not for the next week at least, I'm about to make the story move forward a fair bit. (SPOILERS ->) By letting him choose. --Heyoeveryone 4 November 2011
Teejay! Can you do me a favor? Is it okay if you can write for me: R: Try to piss him off. I can't seem to think up off any smart comebacks. My requirements for the page:
- At least three lines of dialogue
- Limit the swearing to only low amounts
- Have the choices: R: Smash the Walkie Talkie and R: "Hey man, when can I decide who shall leave?"
- Have at least 500 characters
You don't have to do it if you really don't want to. --Heyoeveryone 07:45, 8 November 2011 (UTC)
That page you did. That was almost spot on to what they were as kids. Spoiler: Thing is, that they weren't good friends as a child, they were actually brothers. With the kidnapper being the younger one. Richard used to always bully the voice. End Spoilers. I;'m going to edit it so that it matches my story. Anyways, you managed to make the story move forward extremely fast. Which is good. --Heyoeveryone 09:14, 28 November 2011 (UTC)
More Avast!
Hi Teejay. I've been looking at a few of your additions to Avast! -- it's a good story, isn't it? I'm excited by the two new avenues you added here. I suppose I'm asking if you've got Big PlansTM for them, or if they're open to edit by anyone. I'm not exactly asking for them myself, since I've got a limited amount of time for writing and I'm still hoping -Sentinel- will get back to me, giving me permission to get stuck into the story with more than just my trusty Typo Cutlass. But I'd love to know what your intentions on them are. JackalRobot 17:55, 23 November 2011 (UTC)
2nd person
I'm really trying to keep Rampage and Smutty Sex Romp as 2nd person, choose your own adventure stories, not 3rd person, choose-what-the-other-character-are-doing stories. Picking what your character sees when she opens a door is kind of straying from 2nd person to 3rd person. So I'm going to combine a couple pages there to keep in everything you wrote, but snip out the choice that really isn't something your character could choose. --Platypus 15:54, 21 June 2012 (UTC)
I do enjoy colloborating with you and it's great watching a story weave back and forth as your ideas spark ideas for me and vice versa, but give me a little chance after I create a new page before taking the ball and running with it. Okay? --Platypus 17:51, 25 June 2012 (UTC)
Thanks. That's all I'm asking for. --Platypus 18:16, 25 June 2012 (UTC)
Sorry, but with restraint
I am sorry for the poor etiquette but the apology is with constraint. Although I did not specifically mark it as private, I believe that the description by the title was decently clear that editting was not welcome. If you didn't get that message, sorry for your misconceptions. Furthermore, in editting, it does note that material may be removed by others. I understand that it is bad etiquette and I will restrain from repeating such actions but I did excercise my rights as deemed by the site's usage. Once again, sorry for the inconvenience --Liger0sch
Smutty Sex Romp
I agree that the Tell Christine to go with you and find shoplifters to abuse story line is developing nicely. Shouldn't the goth girl have a name?
Did I do this right?
Thanks for the help on how to message people back but I'm just wondering, did I do this right?
About my story
I've read what you wrote and I completely agree with your comment. I do like it when people contribute to my stories because I know they read it. As for the contributions you've made to Extraordinary life of a not so common teenager I like the things you've wrote, and I'm glad that you wrote those there. I honestly have been having writers block lately and I'm kind of stuck with a lot of the choices right now and I'm not sure if I can come up with stuff for them all, so feel free to add any pages or edit any you want.
Not that I'm forcing you to
Lol, the comment title sounds dirty. No but what I mean by that is I really like how your making the story on Sarah Tredwall, honestly your doing a better job than what I would've done and I like the fact that not everything is about sex when you add pages and edit them. I know a lot of writers just write nasty things but the things you write are simply amazing. I don't want to do anything more on Sarah because I know I'll screw it up but if you have extra time or whatever can you do more of the story that's on Sarah? The things you write are amazing!
I need to know something else also
I don't know how to make it sound right when someone is talking, for example I would write "Hey there bob how was your day?" you can tell his day sucked but he says "It was alright I guess, got divorced today but whatever" you send out a frown to express your sorrow to him and say "It'll be alright Bob." For some reason that conversation doesn't look right when I read it, if you have any tips messages me sometime. Also the last comment about Sarah Tredwall was written by me also - *Wedre2
Thanks
Thank you for choosing to add more onto the Sarah story, your editions so far have been amazing!
Re: F.R. Theory
Thanks for your contribution Teejay. I think I will need to revise the section to be consistent with the ongoing story that you added to, but any spin off stories, additional options to a page, as well as full stories are welcome. The main theme is to show real life situations with inequality. If you want more info on the project and the purpose see the Explanations page I may monitor for time to time and add information that relates to what the statistics tell us as well but I appreciate your participation! ~Bekahllama 17:20 EST 28 November 2012
Okay, I revised it a little bit but tried to stick with the points you made in your note to me. Hopefully I didn't change the message of what you were trying to get across but I just needed to make sure that it fit with the structure of the story, the facts, etc. Thanks again! ~Bekahllama 17:35 EST 28 November 2012
