User talk:Zyrokon

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If you are going to contribute to Rampage, you need to use proper grammar. Please review punctuation with dialogue, and make sure to keep the present tense in the present. --Platypus 02:16, 23 December 2012 (UTC)

Did you notice on the first page of Rampage that the family cat is sleeping on the hood of the mother's car? That would imply that the car is parked in front of the Jones' house. The mother hasn't driven Brandon somewhere to meet the bus. The bus has come to them. --Platypus 03:22, 23 December 2012 (UTC)

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