User talk:JackalRobot
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Reviewed!
Ooft! 6/10. To be honest, I expected that. I intentionally chose to make the story linear so I wouldn't have had to make a large amount of pages. Chapter 1 was basically just character development, so you would get an understanding of what a grave situation you were in. Chapter 2 will soon see more choices, and probably turn into some action sequence at the end. I'm only going to make three or four endings. If you would like, I can happily tell you what happens in the end.
Liked your review, your review was much tougher than my ones, but, that's not necessarily a bad thing. --Heyoeveryone 20:44, 21 November 2011 (UTC)
Hahaha I understand your reasoning, well, I'll just tell you this. Chapter 2 will be the most interesting part of the two, since it will most likely include the endings, so I would then have to flesh out the other three characters.
On a separate note, I hope that the review will not turn off people who are thinking about reading the story, then again, this isn't the film industry, more likely than not they will play through the story, then read the review. Perhaps realise that the story was extremely linear, play it again just to be sure, then agreeing with your points and moving on. XD.
Also, did you only just join this site? I've been wondering since I was the first person to talk on your page. You going to write a story in the future? Or are you just here to edit grammar mistakes and comment? --Heyoeveryone 08:38, 22 November 2011 (UTC)
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Hey JR! Thanks for leaving me the message. I noticed the same link mistake, which is a mistake mind you (the slang for guys in Australia is Bloke). At first I was deterred to add the (m) or (f) whenever the choices were the same, and just change the story to any gender, but then I remembered the reason that I chose to give people the choice of their gender. So that different scenario's would occur, without the need to be sexist or anything.
Oh, and I borrowed your User background for my own, I hope that's okay. I can get rid of it if you take offence that I didn't ask for permission first. --Brunosius 09:32, 22 November 2011 (AUS EST)
