User talk:DirtyMeStoryTime

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+memo+ Yo Imma say that im half of ur age. And also I just want to ask if u have an abandoned story so il continue it. Yes continuations.
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Copying Platypus and creating archives! But please, don't leave me messages on my archive pages. Leave them here...
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==GirlOnGirlFan!==
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I am glad you told me what I did wrong, I honestly was just typing and not looking over. I do not do that anymore.
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Leave me a message. Naughty, nice, happy, sad, I love talking to people so want to hear from you!
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Don't worry, you were not intimidating, it was technically a rough copy, but I think it's fixed now and I wrote something better just now.
 
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I am not nervous anymore, so I think I will do well now.
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I agree with Platypus, Breaking it up into little sections is better. I have no idea why I did not do that, maybe it's because I was a little nervous so I messed up alot. I guess I do not have to write my name you know who it is. Okay, one more page if it sucks he should just delete it, what's the big deal. Like I said I am not the best writer more of a reader, but I know good writing when I see it.
 
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I guess I will stop writing stuff, I mean I don't really think I am cut out for it. So goodbye!
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== [[User:Darth Malcolm|Darth Malcolm]] ==
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From [[GirlOnGirlFan!]]
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I did not check yet, but did you fix it?
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We don't know each other. But I appreciate you, and I thought you should know.
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From [[GirlOnGirlFan!]]
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Yes, I would like you to edit it too, I bet there is lots of mistakes its the first copy. Like the debug model in programming a game.
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--[[User:Darth Malcolm|Darth Malcolm]] 02:09, 3 December 2021 (UTC)
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From [[GirlOnGirlFan!]]
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I thought the female playing point was for males like me who like girl on girl action, so I wrote in my perspective as a male seeing girl on girl action. Anyways, he is not replying to me whether
 
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I should write more or not, probably not, but who knows. I think I edited out my mistakes, but who
 
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no's because I am a speed typer.
 
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From [[GirlOnGirlFan!]]
 
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Okay, I will change things before it gets deleted.
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== [[User:Teejay|Teejay]] ==
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From [[GirlOnGirlFan!]]
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Do you like my writing out of curiosity? when I contributed to Platypus's work? I wonder if he will like it, I heard he is picky. Sorry this is in a weird place I do not know how to move it appropriately. 
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Epitaph for a gunslinger:
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From [[GirlOnGirlFan!]]
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==H0rniWr1t3r's Talk==
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Here lies Lester Moore
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Sorry its just I get easily hurt cause my low self esteem and someone deleted my pages of bad writing made me want to kill myself. I know I do not look after what I write which is a bad habit probably why. I defiantly can relate to your cousin I done things like that for as long as I can remember, everyone always says I use to be a violent child. I remember my dad beating me up and me beating up the kids at school back then I got expelled . Things got better in high school because I got on medication its a miracle that I graduated.  [[User:H0rniWr1t3r]]
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I did not mean to say you said oh just try harder, everyone says that and when I explain to them its not that simple I struggled with borderline personality disorder ever since I was 14 and explain what I go through and they  still do not understand what I go through. Tomorrow is my first day of counseling I wonder what its like. [[User:H0rniWr1t3r]]
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Four shots from a .44
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I did not write these directed towards you I ment to direct them to platypus. So I posted on my page because I did not want to mess anything up. I feel like you don't really understand me do you have hallucinations that scare the shit out of you every single day, people talking in your head that are not there, having no control of your emotions cause of bpd and people saying you do just cause they do, being told I am worthless everyday by your parents as a child and other stuff, fearing abandonment, not understanding people cause I have asd, worrying about everything, always telling yourself your useless everyday, having no control of facial expressions some times, sudden ups and downs sometimes I feel so happy and other times I feel depressed and everything everyone says hurts me, and more. I really did not mean to guilt trip anyone I was just telling the reality of things I was going to say that but I assume you would know.
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No Les, no more.
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[[User:H0rniWr1t3r]] 
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sigh it was useless trying to get people to empathize with me when all they say its try harder when they are not in by shoes. [[User:H0rniWr1t3r]]  
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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I am not trying to guilt trip no one, He honestly made me want to kill myself I though at least writing was something I am good at but no I am not!. So if you think I am trying to guilt trip then fuck you! And I am no child I'm 21. You do not know what its like to have borderline personality disorder meaning you have strong emotions with literally no control over then, fear abandonment etc learn more by researching. I feel bad by what you said oh just try harder to control you emotions will research bpd and you will see why I am like this. I do not have just bpd but severe bpd. I am pissed of by what you said about guilt tripping when its not true ugh so paranoid. [[User:H0rniWr1t3r]]
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I've seen the all the problems begin with MEN on a T-shirt. I've been tempted to get it for my GF.  
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==Fredhot16 Talk==
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The Lester Moore epitaph is very famous. I'm surprised you've never seen it before.
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Yo. It's been a long time since we talked. About two years, right? And it was over some stupid mistake. Makes me realize how much the site's grown. Probably. At the very least, in the Adult story section. Eh, what you going do? So, about your "The Exhibitionist" story: I'm not really that interested in it. I have no problem with it but there seems to be a absolute deluge of sex centered stories in the Adult story section. I'm not saying that's ''bad'', I'm saying that more stories that are not based on sex need to be in the Adult story section. Seriously, I'd love to read a good story in the Adult story that has sexual content but is not entirely based around boning and screwing. I'm not saying that I'm assuming that the story will be entirely centered around the little death, I'm just saying that I don't think I would be right for the story. I ''am'' going to make a few suggestions but they won't be sexual. 99.99% of the time. So it looks like your subliminal tactic worked. Clever girl. --[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 07:53, 18 March 2016
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That poem sounds like it was written by a guilt free Catholic school girl. :)
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Hey. Want some help with writing other stories that aren't based around sex? I know a website. It's great. You probably haven't heard of it before. Here's the link:
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/SoYouWantTo/SeeTheIndex --[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 07:53, 18 March 2016
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Also, here's some food for thought from someone who thinks too much about these things: do the choices you get in CYOSs the in-character choices for the person you're playing as (in that continuity, anyway)? Are they the choices that the character has the certain personality to do? Or does the characters start off as a "tabula rasa", a blank slate, and the choices we choose fill in that character's personality, coloring him or her? Are the choices part of the character's personality or possible personality or are the choices merely the colors to make him or her more...well, rounded? It probably depends more on the writer's intent then anything else but, eh, it was a thought.--[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 12:19, 01 April 2016
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A judge was doing arraignments, and the prisoners were in the holding cell of the courthouse, being called forward one by one. Four men were left in the cell when the judge looked at his next case:
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You know, I just came up with an idea for your Short Bursts: a story about a man or woman who is continuously tormented by a mentally, emotionally, and physically sadistic "god" or, at best, a eldritch "thing". The protagonist is put through harrowing trials that seem to be without any chance of success but as he or she goes through the task, he/she finds a little hope that allows them to keep going and, if he/she plays her cards right, can actually triumph...just before the "god" destroys everything and shows it up as an illusion and begins to cruelly taunt him/her on the choices he/she said made before wiping her/his memory and putting her/him through another different trial. However, there IS a way to escape or defeat this "god" and every iteration of the trials show a glimmer of such a way. Like it?  --[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 07:35, 04 April 2016
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State of California vs. Steven Lewon Crook
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Also, it's not really like Cabin in the Woods. CITW is a deconstructive parody of the cliche horror movie formula. This idea is more an exercise in despair, a tale of little hope. It might make a passable horror story.--[[User:Fredhot16]] 12:25, 04 April 2016 (Louisiana Time)
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"Crook!" said the judge. "Step forward!"
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Ah. I understand. By the way, I don't mind you talking too much. I can be a bit talkative too. --[[User:Fredhot16]] 7:41, 08 April 2016 (Louisiana Time)
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All four men stepped out of the holding cell.
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Also, the whole "DD cup breasts, and a round and firm ass" thing is understandable. Most of those stories are made not as actual stories with plot, characters, and the like but with the sole intention of wanking off. They all have sexually desirable woman so as to get their rocks off. Problem is, they're just so...empty. The stories are exercises in hedonism, focused on sex. The characters, protagonist included, are barely one-dimensional and the protagonist often strikes me as the type of creep that I wouldn't so much cross the street to avoid but throw bodily into traffic. There are many morally questionable choices that don't feel as though we should consider them morally questionable in these type of stories and that's ignoring the frequency of the choices that have the protagonist actually RAPE someone or getting raped. I get the whole wank-material thing but the rape thing is not something that should found as often as I do in these type of stories.
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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P.S describing a woman's chest size by mentioning their cup size is not really "sexy". It's like describing a apple by say how big it is in inches. My opinion, anyway. --[[User:Fredhot16]] 7:41, 08 April 2016 (Louisiana Time)
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Here's a little question: which type of CYOS protagonist do you like or prefer: a protagonist who is a blank slate but you have plenty of choices to "fill in" him or her by giving him/her personality, hobbies, and clothing styles of your own choice or a already developed protagonist with his/her own personality and interests? --[[User:Fredhot16]] 7:41, 08 April 2016 (Louisiana Time)
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You did a good job with it. As far as I can tell from years of practice, good oral sex when a man goes down on a woman involves being gentle, tonguing her clit, rubbing it while you slip your tongue inside her, and basically following her body's cues until she gushes on your face (and then doing it again and again.)
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I really do recommend that you take a good, long look at the "So You Want To" section of TV Tropes. I bet it will be a big help for you . Also, read a lot. From good authors like Agatha Christie. Learning from those books might help with your writing. --[[User:Fredhot16]] 8:15, 08 April 2016 (Louisiana Time)
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Ever heard about a story called "Invisible"? By playing as the guy with no name or description, you see him possibly rape students, teachers, a woman at a church, or a attractive neighbor, or at the very least, masturbate into a girl's locker as petty revenge. And, yes, I meant what I said. Those are actual choices. Hell, Those seem to be the ONLY type of choices: rape, rape, or petty perverted pranks. Also, while I agree with you on the "good girl" thing and the fact that the writer done goofed up but... I don't think a "bad" girl would like the rape either. Rape is perhaps one of the most harrowing and devastating experiences a human being can have, a soul-rending perversion of one of the greatest physical experiences in life. It is something that should be written with as much gravity, seriousness, and maturity as you can muster and not used gratuitously or as something that protagonist does on a whim and even acknowledges it as rape! (Not unless the protagonist is supposed to be a reprehensible monster.) Now, my soapbox has just fallen through so now we can talk about where I can find this "Teejay"'s stuff. Want to recommend to me a story from him? His best, if you would kindly. There's also a story called "The Life of a Medieval Princess" that tries to make it clear that these are people with their own personalities. It's not the best job but at least it's a try which is more then I can say for the majority of Adult CYOSs. --[[User:Fredhot16]] 17:43, 09 April 2016 (Louisiana Time)
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I judge Teddy to be about 13. He'll lose interest eventually, probably sooner rather than later.
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The Adult Story section actually did some good for me: the "Dungeons and Dragons" story convinced me that Dungeons and Dragons seemed pretty cool and the "Anime School" story gave me an idea that I want to write about. Working title is "Legacy of the Progenitors". It was, initially, a CYOA (this was back when we were using the CYOA name) called "The Book of Darkness" in the "Mature Story" section but I gave up on both the title and on it being a CYOA. Someone else is using it now though I'm not impressed by the writing. Then again, I'm trying to about as good a writer as, well, Jim Butcher or George R.R. Martin so my standards might be a bit high. Pretty sure that ain't the case, though. --[[User:Fredhot16]] 17:43, 09 April 2016 (Louisiana Time)
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Headline spotted recently: MILF BRACES FOR FAP OFFENSIVE
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Oh, and one little thing: ALL GLORY TO THE HYPNOBUTT! imgur.com/gallery/sFT7p --[[User:Fredhot16]] 17:43, 09 April 2016 (Louisiana Time)
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My reaction: "Whiskey... Tango... Foxtrot?"
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AAAANNNNDDD you're right. I misread what you said and thought you were talking about somebody making the protagonist a sex slave and not the protagonist making her rapist the sex slave. Actually reminds me of a choice where a paladin in "Dungeons and Dragons" can make a 14 year-old boy her own sex slave. The boy was part of the bandit group that tired to take her money and the group would have raped her if she lost. A PALADIN. The default Lawful Good class. Not even a Greyguard, a paladin who's more morally ambiguous then a normal paladin. Just a 18 year old who just left the order and no, I don't think there is an explanation for leaving. AAAAANNNNDDD I've just realized that this is turning into a tirade against Adult Story CYOSs then an actual conversation. Sorry for that. I wouldn't have such a grudge against Adult Story CYOSs if there weren't so many of them or if they weren't so focused on sex or if they were better written! I think that's the biggest problem with them: they're just not good. O.K, rant over.--[[User:Fredhot16]] 07:53, 11 April 2016 (Louisiana Time)
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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And now to end on a mutually lighter note: thank you for making the template and putting it on my user page. The Hypnobutt will live on forever! ALL GLORY TO THE HYPNOBUTT! I can't tell if it's the butt or the smoothness of the gif that I like so much but it is, indeed, one of my favorite gifs next to Bollywood movie gifs. You should look that up. They're utterly hilarious in their disconnect from reality. --[[User:Fredhot16]] 09:14, 11 April 2016 (Louisiana Time)
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Maybe they are. When I'm alone in the apartment I'll walk around in my underwear, so maybe they just don't think about it.  
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Hey, are you busy? Me and Teejay are doing a collaboration on "Anime School" in the Adult Stories section. I was wondering if you would want to join the collaboration, too. If you do, I recommend starting on the sections that has no work on them whatsoever like some of the "female students" and "male students" sections or the field trip sections that some of them have and also look on Teejay's user talk section.--[[User:Fredhot16]] 13:06, 21 April 2016 (Louisiana Time)
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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So, is Context or Short Bursts going to get any more work on it? --[[User:Fredhot16]] 18:20, 22 April 2016 (Louisiana Time)
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After what happened, no terrorist will come near any of her other concerts. You know security will be ridiculously tight. Definitely go if you want to. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Testing, testing. One, two, three. Can you hear me? I'm going to repeat a earlier message so sorry for the repetition. Here it is: "Hey, are you busy? Me and Teejay are doing a collaboration on "Anime School" in the Adult Stories section. I was wondering if you would want to join the collaboration, too. If you do, I recommend starting on the sections that has no work on them whatsoever like some of the "female students" and "male students" sections or the field trip sections that some of them have and also look on Teejay's user talk section."--[[User:Fredhot16]] 09:15, 27 April 2016 (Louisiana Time)
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A psychiatrist and a proctologist share an office building. They put up a sign on the front: THE DEPARTMENT OF ODDS AND ENDS. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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==Completionist Talk V2==
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Your English isn't getting worse. What you're describing doesn't have a formal name.  
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I hope you don't mind my editing of [[The Abandoned Adult Story]]. Just trying to help in the brainstorm, since this was seemingly (ironically?) becoming Abandoned as well. --[[User:Completionist|Completionist]] 00:51, 5 January 2016 (UTC)
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==Thank you for reminding me.==
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More... h'mmm. Climb and boink, where she climbs a tree and the guys have to climb up to her and boink her. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Heh, I absolutely forgot Smutty Sex Romp required a certain template on each page. Thanks for the reminder.
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In a single day, Samson slew a thousand Philistines with the jawbone of an ass. Every day, thousands of sales are killed with the same weapon. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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[[User: Akibahara|Akibahara]] 01:50, 4 April 2014 (UTC)
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Even for me, a very fast reader, that took a good chunk of time to read. You're an excellent writer and it's very well written. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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==Trueroman's talk==
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I'm quite honored. :) -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Thanks for the advice. When I write I tend to jot everything down then go back and correct my spelling. Usually this isn't a problem when I right on Word then transfer it over to wherever I am posting it online. Since this website is linked based and I'm kind of just throwing ideas as I go along, I plan on going back to correct spelling and grammar when I get a decent amount written through a couple of path choices.  
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I am still learning the site, I tried the tutorial and while it explains it well when it comes to computer terms I find it easier to experiment. I was clicking the Ab button on the tool bar to put the brackets, but I will start adding the * beforehand. Please share any other tips if you like :)
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That's very understandable. I do the same thing with the stories I write for Literotica. It's a way of expressing myself and doing things I can't do IRL. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Yeah I was fiddling with how you did that. I figured it out though, thanks.  
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When the Angles (with the Saxons) invaded England, they settled in what became known as the Land Debatable, namely the north of England and the south of Scotland. The acute Angles went north and the obtuse ones south. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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So if I have a path that ends the story do I need to still put a link? I have seen others that didn't so wasn't sure. Also, I came to a point where I didn't need a page anymore, how to do I completely remove it?
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Very awesome band. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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[[User:Trueroman| Trueroman]] 9:53 AM 20th March 2014
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We all have hidden desires. That's one of yours. It doesn't surprise me. Hope you're doing well. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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==Wassersaeufer's talk==
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I'm glad you got to show off and didn't get in trouble. And you ''are'' quite attractive, especially to people who, unlike me, don't prefer women who are as wide as they are tall.  
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Thanks for notifying me on the fact that the original creator of "Hot and Horny" has not been active for so long, but I knew that already. I just wanted to give him a fair chance of answering anyway, even if I don't think anything will ever come of it. I'll just wait about a month or so (I'm in no hurry) and then I'll create the spin-off-anyway. Thanks for noticing and answering though. -- [[User:Wassersaeufer|Wassersaeufer]] 13:45, 23rd April 2014 (UTC)
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Finally I made time and took a look at Dirty Me, the story I mean. And damn, your writing is great, I really enjoy reading it. I'm normally into more perverse stuff, at least in stories, but I enjoy your style too much. Only thing which bothers me is, that your posts are so damn long. Not that it is a bad thing, it makes a great story, but I would just enjoy a few more options to choose how to proceed. Anyway, other than that, great writing, looking forward to more. - [[User:Wassersaeufer|Wassersaeufer]] 15:55 19th March 2014 (UTC)
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I kind of froze up on the scooter thing. Sorry. I should have handled it better.
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Wow, thanks for the compliment on me complimenting someone else, even though you weren't the one I complimented... well, now this sentence sounds really wrong *lol*. Anyway, thanks for noticing and keep up the good work. Though I have not yet read [[Dirty Me]], I will soon change that. - [[User:Wassersaeufer|Wassersaeufer]] 14:27 18th March 2014 (UTC)
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Glad to hear that you and your husband still lust each other, in addition to loving each other. Enjoy! -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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==MFCmaster123's talk==
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When you used the phrase "get off my chest," it brought to mind an old Dilbert.
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From MFCmaster123
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Thanks for your help with my Bold font problem.
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Writ this day 17 March, 2014
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==link log page==
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Making a link log page or a story notes page for your story is acceptable. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 15:48, 21 February 2014 (UTC)
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Dogbert: "This is the thief who took the decoy lunch...which we laced with synthetic female hormones!"
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Wally: "You can't prove anything!"
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==ArthurKung's talk==
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Dogbert: "Is there something you'd like to get off your chest?" -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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I think your story "Dirty Me" is very interesting as of yet. I don't think I've ever read a CYOA involving elements of tragedy written from a realistic ("Not the fun fantasy stuff" as you wrote yourself) point of view, but yours looks very promising. I hope to see more of it, and wish you the best of luck with your writing!    --[[User:ArthurKung|ArthurKung]] 21:53, 24 February 2014 (UTC)
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Not all of it will be tragedy. I write erotica, as well as other things, and have some of my short works for sale. It will have alot of sex and sexuality in it. Sadly, many elements come from my own life, and I was not...the most well adjusted or confident person growing up. It will just be more realistic than much of the stuff on here. You try to walk around town naked in stories on here, you just get to have lots of sex. You try to walk around town naked in real life, you will end up in a jail cell, and probably with a record for the rest of your life. I want to keep it plausible, believable. I will sketch out background stories, these will not really branch, just "Dream about x, remember y" type of thing, that will actually have elements from my real life, either in part, or whole. I will probably include me being raped, not once, but twice, but not sure if I want the character to go through it, or remember it. I will probably have how I was molested, and how that lead to the character/me that you see here. I have been beaten, and will probably include issues around that also. At the heart, my story will be a growing up story with many of my specialty writing, erotica. I already have included how I/the character, ended up on probation, and my/the characters, first time having sex. There will be more of that. Some pleasant, some horrifying. I just hope people can connect to my stories, written here, my blog, for sale on Amazon, etc. --[[User:DirtyMeStoryTime|Dirty Me]] 03:56, 25 February 2014 (UTC)
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That works. :) -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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==Teejay's talk==
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You're doing fine with the organizing, and you can move +Infinity to the I's if you want. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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To be honest, I haven't yet looked into your story. So I have no basis for an opinion. I will, however, look into it soon. I note that [[User:ArthurKung|ArthurKung]] likes it, and he's usually a pretty good judge. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Believe me, I understand the frustration. The (late) mother of my children and I had a spectacular love life until our first child was born. After that, it was impossible, nearly, to find time. When we did, she clearly released a lot of pent up energy. I hope you find some (safe) way of releasing yours. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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I haven't read any of the story yet, but read your informational page. First off, I'm very sorry about the bad things that have actually happened to you, and I hope your life turns out better in the future. Second, I'm happy you've had some fun and good experiences as well, and I hope you have more of them. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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A Republican politician is giving a speech at a large public auditorium and making all sorts of promises everyone knows are a bunch of hot air. A heckler stands up and bellows, "All that will happen when pigs fly!"
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OK, I've read what you have so far (I read very fast.) I'm quite impressed. You're an excellent writer. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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The Republican beckons the heckler onto the stage. Thrusting the microphone under the heckler's nose, he says, "Let me guess. You're a liberal."
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Thanks for the heads-up. Like I said, I'm just sorry that all those negative things happened to you. I know you don't want sympathy, but I will say that I hope from now on your life is filled with goodness, light, and a loving partner who cares about you. And that you have lots of loving, tender, consensual, enjoyable sexual experiences. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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The heckler replies with, "My grandfather was a Democrat, my father was a Democrat, and I am and always will be a Democrat."
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I have seen some of the elements from your blog appear. I haven't done much additional commenting on it, but what is there to say that I haven't said already? I wish I could erase some of the really horrible stuff that happened to you, and I hope your husband is always warm and loving and kind and ensures you enjoy sweet, tender sex. (Women/girls being abused always has been a trigger of powerful emotions in me: anger at the abuser, and deep sorrow and an urge to comfort the woman who has been abused.) -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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The Republican, unfazed, responds smoothly with, "Suppose your grandfather had been a jackass and your father had been a jackass. What would that make you?"
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Nothing you haven't already heard. You're a very skilled writer and I'm enjoying your developing story. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Without missing a beat, the heckler booms, "A Republican!"
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Been there... just try to relax. Maybe read a different story for a few minutes to take your conscious mind off it, then when you feel inspired, return to the story... -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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No, I actually was offline for a couple of days. It wasn't your imagination. I'll poke around your story and check out the new links. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Comment from an Internet comment thread:
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I like Prank War. It's a cute little story and reminds me of being back in middle school. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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When the deer have guns too, then and only then will hunting be considered an actual sport. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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I think you're doing a great job so far. I like the fact you take your time and post well-written stories. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Those were awesome. And a little too close to my reality to make me laugh. I actually had the conversation in #14 with both my (now passed) wives. And knowing that words don't work in that situation, I ended up going down on them and after they were cummed out, sticking my head up and saying, "Did that answer your question?" -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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You'd get warnings and stuff first if anyone was thinking of banning you... which they're not. Don't sweat it. You're a good writer and great about following the rules. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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A classic from the Golden Age. Back when those kind of movies had actual plot. Watched both it and the original Taboo in the same week... about 22 years ago. I recommend it. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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This website's been known to have the occasional issue. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Technically, you'd have to ask Platypus, he's the one who created the "base" characters for SSR, but I'm on the assumption that it's no coincidence the slut neighbor is named "Debbie".  
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Just spotted a comment you made. Congratulations on your baby boy. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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P.S. I turn 44 in October. From the information publicly available already, that I'm old enough to to have two kids one of whom is a teenager, you probably could have guessed pretty close to the correct answer. And if I watched those movies 22 years ago, well you have to be at least 18 to watch them so that would in and of itself imply at least 40. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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I have two young 'uns myself, they're now 10 and 5 years old. It's amazing how quickly they steal your heart. The instant they're born and the doc puts them in your arms and they smile, it's over... you're wrapped around their finger. Best of luck to you and your husband and I hope your son grows up to be happy and successful. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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They were younger children when I wrote that intro, back about 6 years ago when I first found this site :) -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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What exactly do you want me to say? You didn't ask a question. You made an observation. It's probably true. But it didn't seem like you were expecting a response. :) -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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It's well written. I don't want to think about it too much because that kind of thing, even though it's only fantasy, still turns my stomach a bit. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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No problem. :) I'm always ready to listen and offer emotional support. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Man in doctor's office: "My name is Daniel Nathan Reed. I don't initial ''anything''." :) -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Still thinking about your new story. It's different from what I usually write. I'll try to come up with something soon. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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From the late George Carlin:
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I'm the same way. I don't come up with original ideas, but I expand on ones others have. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Hospitals often name a new facility after the person who makes the major donation. I grew up with a neighborhood guy who is now extremely wealthy, and I'm hoping someday he'll make a big donation. I just want to drive past the hospital and see the No-Balls Malone Cancer Pavilion. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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That was my character being "mild", kind of dipping a toe into the exhibitionist waters, being certain that at least on the first time barring something crazy you won't get arrested or raped or killed. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Can you guess what book I'm reading just from the chapter titles? :)
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And once you had me tied to the bed, what would you do? :) -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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The ''Tomahawk'' * Good Samaritan * Earthport * The Astrogators' Guild * "...Your Money And My Know-How..." * "Spaceman" Jones * Eldreth * Three Ways To Get Ahead * Chartsman Jones * Garson's Planet * "Through The Cargo Hatch" * Halcyon * Transition * Anywhere * "This Isn't A Picnic" * "-- Over A Hundred Years --" * Charity * Civilization * A Friend In Need * "-- A Ship Is Not Just Steel --" * The Captain Of The ''Asgard'' * The ''Tomahawk''
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You ''do'' know me well. :) -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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(Yep, the first and last chapters have the same title.) -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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The new, fully grown female character I just introduced has B-cup breasts. See, ''some'' of us actually do listen when you talk. :) -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Finished ''Starman Jones'' and now I'm reading an even older book, one published over 100 years ago. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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I snuck another option into [[The Exhibitionist]] yesterday. :) -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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A census worker was going house to house collecting information, and knocks on the door of an apartment. The only resident is a 25-year-old woman. After explaining why he's there, he starts to record the information. They get to the line for Occupation, and she says, "Hooker."
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Reading your latest rant is making me want to reach through the screen, find the jackass who destroyed the female narrator and made her into nothing but a cum receptacle, and cast Avada Kedavra on them. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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"I can't put that."
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Not the ones I write. Those feature strong, dominant women who have sex where, when and how ''they'' want. :) -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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"Then put prostitute."
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Reading your real-life experiences made me (a) want to take a shower to wash off the horrible feeling of my skin crawling (even though ''I'' already knew most of it... it doesn't make it any easier to process), and (b) wrap my arms around you and comfort you.
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"That's not a legal occupation. I can't put that!"
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Hopefully, the bad stuff in your past does not resurface, and you have a long, happy marriage and a successful life. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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"Okay, put down chicken farmer."
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I agree that sex shouldn't be hidden, and that the human body is a wonderful thing.
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"Chicken farmer?"
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I have no problem with you putting up your real-life experiences. If you're OK with sharing, that's awesome. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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"Yeah. Last year I raised 1,000 cocks."
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Mini-rant: it does sometimes seem that Platypus and I are the only sane men on this website. (Thanks for letting me vent.) -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Come on over any time you need to be groped. I'll grope you anywhere you'd like. :) -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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I know nothing about the Fallout world. But I was able to piece together enough to make the story sensible. And as always, your talent for writing shines through. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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If I had you in the stocks, I can think of quite a few things I'd want to do to y...um, ''for'' you. ;) Let's just say I can do other things with my tongue than produce sounds. And that would just be the start of things.  -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Also, I noticed there are still some redlinks on The Exhibitionist. Did you plan to fill those? -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Well, in that case... there would definitely be lovemaking involved. And when I was done, I'd make you finish me with your mouth. (I'm sure there'd be other things, too...) -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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In England, there is a charitable group called the Women's Association that operates nationwide. The local branches are named for the localities (London Women's Association, Nottingham Women's Association, Sheffield Women's Association, &c.)  
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When the group opened a branch in the village of Ugley, the local branch -- with good reason -- did not want to be the Ugley Women's Association. So they changed their name to the Women's Association (Ugley Division.) -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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I'm always gentle. I'd gladly put you in stocks and use your pussy and mouth. -- [[User:Tee jay|Teejay]]
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When asked to use the word "horticulture" in a sentence, Dorothy Parker instantly replied, "You can lead a horticulture but you can't make her think." -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Braless, of course. How are you supposed to show off your cleavage properly if you're wearing a bra? :) -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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What movie did I just watch?
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Thanks for the flower :) You're sweet. -- [[User:Tee jay|Teejay]]
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"I'm here to deliver a message from Mr. Lacombe." "Just you?" "I don't see anyone else around. Mr. Lacombe said to tell you... camel jockeys... that if you fuck with him, he's gonna cut off your balls and stick 'em up your ass. [samples food on table] You guys eat this shit?" "You are a dead man." "I'm not afraid to die... are you?" "No... Allah protects us." "Well, then... [smashes other guy's face into table] this shouldn't hurt!" -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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==hidden text==
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The movie is the 1991 film "The Hitman", starring Michael Parks, Al Waxman, Alberta Watson and Ken Pogue. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Don't mind me, just noticed by the changelog that it looked like you were looking for a way to essentially hide text that is only viewable through the edit window, correct? --[[User:TheElderOnes|TheElderOnes]] 09:22, 7 March 2014 (UTC)
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I'm not sure what you want your hidden text template to do, but I can see where it's going wrong.  You're referencing hidden text within the code for the hidden text template, which is what's generating the loop error.
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A biology teacher in an all girls high school decides to see if the pupils have studied the day's lesson.
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If you want invisible text, the easy way is to change the font color to white. 
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"Kate, what part of the human body, when stimulated properly, expands to six times it's normal size?"
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<nowiki> <font color=white> invisible </font color=white> </nowiki>
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Kate blushes and stammers, "That's.... inappropriate to ask."
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produces:
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"Jill, what part of the human body, when stimulated properly, expands to six times its normal size?"
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<font color=white> invisible </font color=white>
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You can see the text by painting over it with your cursosr.
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"The pupil of the eye, in dim light."
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--[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 12:39, 7 March 2014 (UTC)
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Got it. You're trying to build a collapsible, nested table. I'm not sure how to build such a thing here. The wiki markup language available is somewhat limited.  I'll play around some and see if I can't come up with something. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 13:31, 7 March 2014 (UTC)
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"Correct. Kate, three things. One, you didn't study. Two, you have a dirty mind. Three, you're going to be very disappointed."
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Ah, I see what you're going for. Like Platypus guessed, it sounds like a nested table with collapsible elements. Almost kinda "flowchart-y" in nature. I found the syntax for a nested table at an external wiki (Aberwiki, at their MediaWiki User's Guide: Using Tables page), but as far as collapsibility goes, there's a javascript extension/gadget that exists (Manual:Collapsible elements on the actual main Mediawiki site), but isn't implemented in CYOA's Common.js section. Like Platypus said, the markup around here is really barebones around here. I ''think'' it can be done, but it might require some playing with before it works. Sorry for the vagueness as to where the two syntax pieces I found are, it's impossible to post two external links in the same post without doing one, waiting 20 minutes, then doing the other. Tedious, but it does prevent spambots from flooding us as badly as they did before... --[[User:TheElderOnes|TheElderOnes]] 14:10, 7 March 2014 (UTC)
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Javascript matters should probably be brought up with Platypus, since he'd be the only one able to add your code into CYOA's Common.js page. o: --[[User:TheElderOnes|TheElderOnes]] 16:53, 8 March 2014 (UTC)
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Sorry you're feeling ill. Hope you and your son recover quickly. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Actually, Javascript matters would have to go to RobKohr. He doesn't have the daily presence here that I have, but he's the site administrator/owner.  I'm the sysop, which is a rank I own at RobKohr's discretion. He makes the decisions about site functionality and features.--[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 19:58, 8 March 2014 (UTC)
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Those were good.
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==Blazetempest==
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A brilliant young student at Trinity / Computed the cube of infinity / But the number of digits / Gave him the fidgets / He chucked math and took up divinity.
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It was nice of you to try cleaning up Blazetempest's poor writing, but given the overwhelming number of poor postings that show up in my stories, I feel I have to be firm with these writers.  If they can't read the warning that specifies that poor writing will be deleted, then they really shouldn't be posting. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 19:58, 8 March 2014 (UTC)
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==warnings==
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Connors said "Bet that I'll beat ya"/ To the odd-shaped mechanical creature / But it won in straight sets / And then quipped at the net / "Bjorn Cyborg's the name. Glad to meet ya."
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If you spot someone leaving off the categories before I do, by all means, feel free to use the warning templates to remind them. It is a relief to not have to do everything that needs doing around here. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 09:20, 12 March 2014 (UTC)
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==egrizzly==
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A robot with lofty inflection / Read Stein in the poetry section / But read it "Arose / Is arose is arose" / And thought it concerned resurrection.  
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Thanks for the heads up. 'Funny' vandals usually only post once then disappear, but I'll give him a warning and if he makes another 'joke' edit, I'll block him. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 14:36, 13 March 2014 (UTC)
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== Nah, it's okay ==
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An epicure dining at Crewe / Found a rather large mouse in his stew / Cried the waiter, "Don't shout / And wave it about / Or the rest will be wanting one too."
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I respect your concern for the site, and i guess i was being slightly bitchy about it. People like you are the ones people respect in real life.
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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== Reply to your comment ==
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There once was a cook from New York / Who claimed you should always stew pork / He says he once tried / To eat some of it fried / And found he would rather chew cork.
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Just here to say, that I read a bit of your story and I like it. Also, if this isn't too much to ask, I thought maybe you could help me with my writing skills, since I have close to zero experience about writing about sex and stuff. But if you don't want to, I understand. I'll try and read as much as I can on the rest of your story next time, and try to give you a full review.
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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--[[User:Chaomaster|Chaomaster]] 22:00 15 March 2014
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==Number of views==
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That was a good one. :) -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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It's true that the site used to automatically display the number of views on every page you pulled up.  It's just one of those things that stopped functioning. It would be nice to have that back, since every user is always curious if their work is being read.  Site-functionality issues have to go to RobKohr, not me.  He's the only one who could restore that automatic function.
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I'll experiment with variations on <nowiki>{{NUMBEROFVIEWS}}</nowiki> and see if I can't come up something. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 11:35, 18 March 2014 (UTC)
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A wonderful passage from the book I'm reading (and I'm wondering if you know the book...)
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I've been kicking around the idea of adding to the warn1 template to include those links, so I think we'll keep it with your amendment. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 02:26, 19 March 2014 (UTC)
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"When we looked to the south from this depot we saw no clouds; there was nothing but hard clear sky. The sky gave no indication of the blizzard winds that were to assail us when we reached the plateau, and after we had gone as far south as we could and retraced our footsteps to the depot, we looked back and saw the same clear sky, with a few wisps of fleecy cloud in it. We had no doubt that below those clouds the pitiless gale was still raging across the great frozen plain..."
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I'm sure there are ways that the look of the site could be improved.  The site ''is'' improved from some of the older formats that it had.  I promise to be openminded about any suggestions you might have.  Anything that would involve changing the underlying wiki code or wiki functionality would have to go through RobKohr, of course. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 11:40, 19 March 2014 (UTC)
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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==Platypus' other talk==
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Very sorry about your cousin.
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Are you doing fine?  No, you're doing better than that.  It's okay for some of your pages to be works in progress.  You've contributed a lot, not just to your own story (which is very well written, btw), but to the site as whole by assisting with some of the overdue cleanup.  Don't worry so much and keep on keeping on as you've been doing. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 12:48, 3 March 2014 (UTC)
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I'd noticed that Gunior has taken over Smutty Sex Romp 2, and despite his blurb about using proper grammar and spelling, his writing leaves much to be desired.  You know something?  I'm going to let him run with it.  There's something about SSR that attracts an awful lot of truly awful writers. Maybe it's the fact that I only allow the well-written pages to remain undeleted.  But maybe if I allow a poorly written knockoff to remain as is, unpoliced by me, the poor writers will flock there and leave the original SSR to be written by those of us who have an actual concept of grammar.  As long as SSR2's page are categorized, let them use poor grammar, worse spelling, and dead-end pages with missing options. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 15:40, 22 March 2014 (UTC)
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I'm glad you've found some books you like. Reading is one of life's great pleasures.  
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I really do appreciate all you've done to help clean up the site.  The backlog builds up so quickly around here!  It seems like only yesterday when we had all the stories on the site on the Main Page... and it was all good because we only had five stories! --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 17:30, 24 March 2014 (UTC)
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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You're too new to know this, but this site was originally Choose Your Own Adventure, not Create Your Own Adventure.  The name had to be changed for legal purposes.  The thing is, when the site moved to the new name, the files were also moved to the new name. The links in the pages ''weren't''. It wouldn't have hurt the story any to cut the file link out, but all that needed doing was updating the word 'choose' in the link to 'create' and the link was fixed.
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You will not be punished, as you did not intentionally do anything wrong and you were honest. These things do sometimes happen. You are not in trouble.
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Look at those dates in the history.  I last wrote in that story back in 2007! --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 16:34, 27 March 2014 (UTC)
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(Hugs you tightly and gently runs my hand through your hair comfortingly)
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Just so you know...  If someone's posted an uncategorized page, you can click on 'what links here' over to the left and find out what the previous page in story is.  Hopefully, it will be a page with a category on it.  It usually will be, unless the user is a newbie who's just posted page after page without reading the site rules first.
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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And sometimes you'll see that several pages, from different stories, link to the new page.  That can get messy to sort out.--[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 14:22, 28 March 2014 (UTC)
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Maybe try going out with the blouse *almost* all the way unbuttoned?
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I have very low hopes for poor [[Family guy]]. Ugh! --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 02:12, 8 April 2014 (UTC)
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I wish you lived closer. I would love for your family and mine to be real-life friends.
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Congratulations on getting through the Adult section.  That was quite a task you took on.  At least the other sections aren't nearly as overwhelmed with clutter as the Adult section. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 12:42, 8 April 2014 (UTC)
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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I don't mind doing a bit (or a lot) of deleting. The site really does need to have these unstarted stories swept out every few years. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 15:49, 12 April 2014 (UTC)
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Still not in trouble. You need comfort, not anger, right now.
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The Hitchhiker's template works because it's the same image on every page.  If the image was a variable, then the page addressing the template would have to have the image link on it, invoking the edit limitations that you're trying to avoid.  Great pic though.--[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 12:52, 14 April 2014 (UTC)
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(gently cradles you against my chest like a parent cradles a baby, to relax you and make you feel less stressed)
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Single-use templates would allow you to edit the page where you're displaying the image without having to fight the edit limitations.  I wouldn't consider that spammy, since you have valid, story-oriented reasons for doing it.  I wouldn't worry about displaying anything too adult, either.  There's ''nothing'' that you can't find on display on the net these days, and if someone ignores the Adult warning and goes blind because of a pic you displayed, they have only themselves to blame.
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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I've occasionally caught someone trying to edit pages describing sex with preteens to add years to the underage characters' ages, but these self-declared censors don't stick around long. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 13:06, 14 April 2014 (UTC)
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I know all about real ones. Did I ever mention that my (late) father used to be a construction worker? And I'm glad you got out and managed to get some of your pent-up desire released.  
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I do wish there was some way to remove restictions from established users.  Unfortunately, before the site had these restrictions, we were being bombarded with spam pages full of dangerous links and real pages were being vandalized to add spam links.  And as irritating as it is to keep reloading because of the 'load limit reached' thing, before the site was restricted, the bot traffic was so heavy that pages took as many as five minutes to load.  Yes, every page would load that slowly, because there were simply so many bots crawling the site.  It was an awful time. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 12:17, 16 April 2014 (UTC)
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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I was thinking of retaining the one and only page that BigTR categorized correctly (as opposed to the pages where he put the word Category in bold type instead of putting it inside the double brackets), but it's probably not worth it.  Even if he did manage to get the category right on other pages, he was very transparently trying to rip off Smutty Sex Romp, and doing it poorly. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 11:37, 17 April 2014 (UTC)
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Freezing in place (normally in shock) ''is'' a fairly normal reaction when something like that happens... also, if it's crowded, there may not be a lot of room to move.  
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I agree that that is a very nice pic.  And unfortunately, you're right to avoid posting pics of yourself on the web. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 11:57, 18 April 2014 (UTC)
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If "he" had instead been "she" doing the touching, how would you have reacted?
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Glad to know I was missed.  I've just been getting over a really nasty cold.  Nasty enough that I've hardy been out of bed for days.--[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 16:03, 22 April 2014 (UTC)
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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On the one hand, I like looking at pictures as much as the next guy.  On the other hand, as a writer, I see no reason why words alone can't carry a story.  Describing clothing in detail can be difficult though and can really bog down a story, so if you feel those details are important, a picture might simply be the best shortcut.
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If you lived close by, I'm sure I could talk my girlfriend into gently giving your rear the occasional grope. :)
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Yeah, not exactly a definitive answer. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 13:25, 24 April 2014 (UTC)
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Glad to be back.  I was laid up in the hospital with pneumonia for over a week. Not fun. But I'm much better now. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 18:43, 13 May 2014 (UTC)
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I'm 100% certain it's the look the cop gives everyone. It's designed to make anyone thinking about executing a crime reconsider their life choices. All cops have it and they all walk around using it. He wasn't singling you out.
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Congratulations!  Glad to hear that you're still around.  And having a baby boy...  That's ''really'' creating your own adventure!  --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 11:23, 5 June 2014 (UTC)
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Source: I used to work with cops, and my sister-in-law is married to a cop.  
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Thanks for the heads up. The site's attracting way too many bad posters lately. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 11:39, 25 July 2014 (UTC)
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Your outfits are fine.
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Welcome back! --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 10:15, 9 March 2016 (UTC)
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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There has been some change to the site rules since you were last here. Underage sex is no longer permissible.  You can read about the whole thing over here: https:  //encyclopediadramatica.se/Create_Your_Own_Story
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I'm glad you went out and had some fun. And if the neighbors get freaked out because of what you're doing inside your own house, that's their issue.
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--[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 23:33, 9 March 2016 (UTC)
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Thanks to the new rules prohibiting underage sex, any existing page with the P-word in the title is blocked.  It cannot be displayed.  It cannot be deleted.  Any index page that would include a page with a forbidden title is blocked.  I've tried asking RobKohr to at least give sysops access to forbidden pages so I can edit or delete them.  I've gotten no response. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 02:19, 10 March 2016 (UTC)
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Yes, I'd considered the destructive potential too, as well as the damage it's already done.  I've altered many underage characters in Smutty Sex Romp and Rampage to barely legal status, but it's difficult when many index pages are perma-blocked. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 02:29, 10 March 2016 (UTC)
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Found a great passage in a book I'm reading, and want to share.
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Thanks for the heads up.  Scarlett moved the All Adult Stories page to the first page for her story, then wrote over the moved page.  The only way to restore it was to roll back the page, then move it back where it belonged. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 13:42, 11 March 2016 (UTC)
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To man has been given the grief, often, of seeing his gods overthrown and his altars crumbling; but to the wolf and the wild dog that have come in to crouch at man’s feet, this grief has never come. Unlike man, whose gods are of the unseen and the overguessed, vapors and mists of fancy eluding the garmenture of reality, wandering wraiths of desired goodness and power, intangible outcroppings of self into the realm of spirit - unlike man, the wolf and the wild dog that have come in to the fire find their gods in the living flesh, solid to the touch, occupying the earthspace and requiring time for the accomplishment of their ends and their existence. No effort of faith is necessary to believe in such a god; no effort of will can possibly induce disbelief in such a god. There is no getting away from it. There it stands, on its two hind legs, club in hand, immensely potential, passionate and wrathful and loving, god and mystery and power of all wrapped up and around by flesh that bleeds when it is torn and that is good to eat like any flesh.
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Thanks for the head up.  Thanks for maintaining some order while I've been hospitalized.--[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 15:25, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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I developed a hole in my colon. It's just one of these things that can happen to someone. But fixing the issue required major surgery and I've still got a lot of healing ahead of me. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 18:11, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
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Ooof. Very sorry about your shower door. That sounds awful.  
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Maybe you did overwhelm him. I don't know.  Maybe he was looking to make me the incarnation of his demons and I wasn't cooperating.  The poor guy clearly was not well, and as I advised him, there's really only so much you or I could do for him. I only hope he's getting the help he needs. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 18:55, 1 April 2016 (UTC)
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It's your kitchen, you can dress however you like. I often go into mine not fully dressed, either, to do things.  
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Oh, ''that'' one. No, I don't think you were too intimidating.  Smutty Sex Romp might not be the place for that one's writing either... --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 18:44, 2 April 2016 (UTC)
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Glad you got a chance to spend some time with friends. A bikini in a swimming pool, that's not a big deal.  
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Your 'buttons' for the Main Page look fine to me. Maybe they'll be more eye catching this way. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 18:43, 7 April 2016 (UTC)
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Toying yourself while the workers are there might be pushing it. Now if you were to happen to be asleep when they arrived, it's not your fault you sleep naked and you kicked off the covers because summer is approaching and it's getting hot.  
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Actually, what Hellspawn's doing with Pokesex is taking a poorly planned story written by multiple poor writers and he's trying to hammer it into a decent shape.  The deleting is mostly because of pages that never had any point in existing at all. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 11:28, 15 April 2016 (UTC)
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Care to hazard a guess what book I'm reading?
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Don't worry; I take the grammar in SSR seriously, but the plot, such as it is, is utterly unrealistic and is very much worthy of mockery. In SSR, men and women are always ready for sex, and rape at worst provokes annoyance and never induces trauma. It's pure fantasy, which may be part of why it's so popular. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 13:11, 27 April 2016 (UTC)
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The loss of Iceland was a disaster whose dimensions were only now becoming apparent. The Soviet bombers had a clear lane to reach into the trade route. Their submarines were racing through the Denmark Strait even as the NATO navies were trying to position their submarines to re-form the barrier they had lost -- the barrier upon which the convoys depended. The Air Force and Navy would soon try to rearrange fighter coverage to harass the Backfires, but those measures were all stopgaps. Until Iceland was fully neutralized, or better yet re-taken, the Third Battle of the North Atlantic hung in an uneven balance.
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The rants are somewhat amusing.  I think it’s good that you’re writing them.  There should be something around here that’s a bit more reality based, to serve as a counterpoint to the frequently laughable strictly fantasy depictions of sex. I should point out that there really are some guys who are over-endowed, and they usually have to wear a device that looks like a rubber doughnut over their cocks to prevent them from penetrating their partners to the point of hurting them.  It’s rather like how, when you need to insert a screw that’s too long for the hole you’re inserting it into, you need a rubber washer.
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If you do come to the US, I hope you end up out here. I live in an area that's safe enough that I can let my 13-year-old son go biking on his own for 2-3 hours. My apartment complex has many families with kids, so you would have other parents around and your son would have potential friends right there.  
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And yes, that quote was from Red Storm Rising.  
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SSR does acknowledge that there are limits (at least it does on the pages I’ve written).  There’s a magical condom section with [[Ask for the elephant size]] where the female on the receiving end wants nothing to do with the thing.  And an unfortunate set of choices where one painful writer had to write the giant dick exploding the woman’s lower body.  Read it and cringe.
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Your IRL (mis)adventures may be more bio than story, but you IRL experiences are the foundation for your stories, and as such, I think it is appropriate for you to post it here, for those who want to ‘peek beneath the hood’, as it were, and get a sense of where your stories are coming from. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 15:54, 6 May 2016 (UTC)
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Sorry the guy turned out to be such a jerk. Well, there will be other opportunities.
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I feel your pain.  Blame GalaxyMage for leading girls to horses in the worst ways possible in every story he touches.  At least you didn't get to the part with the leeches. (Inside as well as outside). --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 12:10, 17 May 2016 (UTC)
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Thanks you for the flower.  I am suitably impressed. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 11:13, 24 May 2016 (UTC)
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What am I about to start re-reading? Chapters in order: The Idea -- Preparation -- The Start -- Chumbi -- Tibet -- The Approach to Everest -- The Way Discovered -- The North Col -- Preparing Again -- The Second Start --The Attack -- The Oxygen Attempt -- An Avalanche -- High-Altitude Life -- The Chief Result -- The Use of Oxygen -- Other Conclusions -- The Third Expedition -- Darjeeling to Rongbuk -- Up the Glacier -- Disaster Retrieved -- The Rescue -- The Assault -- The Climax -- Mallory and Irvine -- Odell -- The Great Enigma -- Honor -- The Doomed Mountain
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== Regarding your comments ==
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Difference Between Heaven and Hell
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In Hell, there's just a few small changes... cops are German, chefs British, lovers Swiss, and things are done with French courtesy and Italian efficiency.  
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== Sympathy from the Devil (i.e Men). ==
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I'm glad you're all right. I've missed you, but I figure you've got a life to live and can't be on a website all the time.  
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I find men to be a complicated bunch. Take mine for example when we're alone He is the sweetest, kindest man I've ever known, but when he's with his friends he's as crude and crass as the rest of them. Admittedly he is twenty years older than I am and from a different generation and culture, so I don't try to change, well not too much anyway, but when my oldest son makes similar remarks I come down on him like a ton of bricks.
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== Thanks! ==
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== [[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] ==
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I'm not really sure how to post messages to others and I hope I'm doing it right. So thanks a lot for telling me how to get a line gap. I was searching for it myself. - countingStars
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What I was pissed off about? Eh, just the same old smutty crap on this website. I still find it contemptible but...I really can't muster any energy to gripe in the discussions. I just...there's just so much. So much crap and all my edits...I can't change a damn thing because I don't want to change it, I want to burn it to the ground and start again. That's my problem, the premises of these things.
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== Defnota's Messages ==
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So. How have you been?
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I appreciate you letting me know how to delete pages, but also for letting me know this wiki is still alive. I was writing for myself, as I have no idea how to tell how much traffic a wiki gets, but it's nice to know there are other people here.
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P.S Did you write "Nudisma Terena"?---[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 18:31 (Louisiana Time), 19 May 2017
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-[[User:Defnota|Defnota]] 24th of March, 2014
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That's really nice of you, it's not too fun thinking you're in an empty community. Kind of isolating, even if just while you're on here.
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Mind if I make a few suggestions for this whole "boinking" thing? (Also, why "boink"? Why'd you choose that as a word?)
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-[[User:Defnota|Defnota]] 24th of March, 2014
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1. Truth and Boink?
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-[[User:Defnota|Defnota]] 25th of March, 2014
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-[[User:Defnota|Defnota]] 25th of March, 2014
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-[[User:Defnota|Defnota]] 25th of March, 2014
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&nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; Thank you, I thought I'd give the main page a go, but as you probably already know: HTML is lots of trial and error.
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Just spitballing.
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P.S Is this story a real story for you or just part of your rants? And, yes, I get the joke.--[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 17:48 (Louisiana Time), 9 June 2017
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-[[User:Defnota|Defnota]] 25th of March, 2014
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How do you think a "sexual horror" story would go?--[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 12:41 (Louisiana Time), 12 June 2017
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<br> to <nowiki>"[[Your Story]] || {{PAGESINCAT:Your Story}} Pages || Public or Private"</nowiki>? It's a little harder to write, but it is way more organized and means you don't have to update your page count.
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That was one of my first thoughts: rape. But I was wondering if there are more ways to show "sexual horror" then that, more dimensions. Something more...subtle.
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The Review- Adult Stories| Dungeons and Dragons| Female Elf Paladin Review. --[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 12:31 (Louisiana Time), 13 June 2017
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You know what? Go ahead, rewrite the scene with the spirit you described, just have her SHOW it! Have her SHOW a fucking emotion! Have some actual dialogue! I'm not asking for a total change, I'm asking for this page to actually look like a fucking book! "Present the page better" is all I'm asking. And "make it less skeevy", if that's possible.
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And, for the love of god, DESCRIBE THINGS! PLEASE, I BEG OF YOU, DESCRIBE EVERYTHING! I DON'T CARE WHAT IT IS, JUST DESCRIBE IT SO PEOPLE CAN HAVE A CLEAR IDEA OF WHAT THEY'RE SUPPOSED TO BE READING! Hell, I give you permission to describe the protagonist's breasts, just give the reader SOMETHING!
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Oh, and you can just ignore the whole "half-elf" thing. I don't expect you to know about them and for this instance, you don't need to. --[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 9:42 (Louisiana Time), 15 June 2017
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The groping and pawing happened at the clothing shop, erm, tent.
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Thanks for dealing with the sub category. I didn't find out yet how to do it myself. - MMH
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Also, yes, I know the rest of the story makes no sense. You know my pain. --[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 17:52 (Louisiana Time), 19 June 2017
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==Thank You For Your Message==
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...You have automatically lost all respect from me with those lyrics.--[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 11:13 (Louisiana Time), 19 July 2017
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Hey! Thanks for welcoming me to this site. I've begun a fantasy adventure called Faire Isle Adventure. Hopefully I will be able to make it a good long story length despite my busy life. Good luck with your writing and have a good day! --[[User:Stargirlsnr5|Stargirlsnr5]] 11:54, 29 March 2014
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Erm, sorry. I've been sorta busy and I kinda forgot about it. I'll try to give you my proper opinion soon but I can't do it right now because I slept pretty late last night, about 3 A.M. Going to say one thing: your page was a major fucking improvement over the last one. There was actual ''dialogue'' for fuck's sake!
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Thanks for your thoughts regarding "Adventure at the TG Thriftshop." The "Name" area has changed on paths already, with Craig becoming Kortney (Blonde Bikini Model) and Triss (Redheaded Clerk).
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You know, there's something weird about the stories on that CYOS. I don't think a lot of it was made by people who were thinking "Forgotten Realms" when they made it. It feels like generic D&D stuff with some vanilla D&D info thrown in. The mentions of Pelor, for one thing. While Pelor, the god of the Sun, is a D&D god, he's not a Forgotten Realms god. The closest there may be to Pelor is Lathander, the Morninglord, the God of spring, dawn, etc.  
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Edit: Huh. There's actually a table in ''Forgotten Realms Campaign Setting'' handbook that tells you which D&D deities to convert to Forgotten Realms deities. Pelor, for example, can be switched with Lathander, Ilmater, the Broken God, or Torm, the Loyal Fury.
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== Completionist Talk ==
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-[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 21:27 (Louisiana Time), 13 August 2017
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As you probably already noticed, I'm new to the site so I haven't read much of the stories yet, but I'm looking forward to reading some of your stories, too.
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Male perspective? Sounds pretty challenging. Let me try to come up with a brainstorm first and see where I get to. If it's passable for me to build upon, then it will be done. But if not, then I'll continue my brainstorming for that. For the meantime, thanks for the invite. --[[User:Completionist|Completionist]] 22:24, 14 April 2014 (UTC)
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If you aren't busy, perhaps you could do the red links for this page: D&D: FHR: The cloaked merchant : "Let's see how far you are willing to go...."
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Thank you for organizing some of the links and making the subcategories. I've been meaning to do that but had trouble figuring out what and where to input it since the tutorial's directions were a little vague to me. Now it all makes sense and I'll try to remember doing that for the later stories as well.--[[User:Completionist|Completionist]] 15:41, 15 April 2014 (UTC)
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Try it like you did for the bard page.--[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 14:12 (Louisiana Time), 14 August 2017
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Hi, thanks for adding those categories in for me. I was originally planning on adding them later once I get around the branching of each story, but I guess doing those categories while editing helps too.--[[User:Completionist|Completionist]] 02:22, 17 April 2014 (UTC)
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Going to stay away from this site for some time. Planning on sitting down and reading the handbooks for Forgotten Realms. There's a lot of interesting lore and story ideas in this stuff. And it's all on the internet, free to download! Oh, and to answer your question:
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I hope I'm doing well, then! lol. Feel free to add stuff and fix all those red-links, too! I trust your English (haha). It's never a one-person story!
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A. For D&D: Well, she can't really do it because she only has a part of the whole map right now. She needs all of them. And there's the guards behind him. Also, that creep doesn't own the shop. I think the shop owner went home for the night or something.
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Well, personal or not, there is a line people simply cannot cross. That's why they added another category for those types that want to cross the line. I see how you did create that elaboration to detail on that page; to be honest I would not even have the will to think of the scenario and make a story on it. In the story's sense, I haven't read much on it, but I would assume a fantasy story would not lead to that kind of choice or outcome at all. I also hope that page would at least be re-edited for consistency...and better taste--[[User:Completionist|Completionist]] 05:10, 20 April 2014 (UTC)
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To be honest, I was thinking of something like that. You know, the protag somehow getting it away from the creep without putting out any more "goods". The best bet would be to get him alone and then...you know.
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Oh, don't misunderstand. The last comment was more of a compliment than criticism. I see the elaboration there and the detail's strong and visual enough to catch someone's attention to fix it. I see the satirical aspect, I'm just shocked that you can find the courage to actually recreate the scenario in your head. If it was me, I'd just get nightmares from it lol--[[User:Completionist|Completionist]] 18:21, 20 April 2014 (UTC)
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B. "Don't have sex!" Are you sure you weren't inspired by the manga "My Balls" where a man has to not ejaculate for a whole month to save the world? Yes, this is real. I am NOT kidding. Also, go ahead. That will be a breath of fresh air.
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A bit coincidental, but I was suggesting a similar change to the Main Page to Platypus, too. I just didn't know we could revamp it ourselves haha.--[[User:Completionist|Completionist]] 04:58, 21 April 2014 (UTC)
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C. Go wild.--[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 00:18 (Louisiana Time), 15 August 2017
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One more note, if possible. A quick suggestion about the stuff on the main page: Introduction first, followed by Tutorial as a separate section (to avoid people from overlooking it), then the To-Do list. Also, just an honest thought: I don't think we should add that P.S. about the adult section since it might tempt/encourage the little kids to scroll down to find them. Again, just an opinion. :)--[[User:Completionist|Completionist]] 05:30, 21 April 2014 (UTC)
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No. I'm not really back.  
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I'll be blunt: I came here a couple of years ago in 2012 because I was enamored with Choose Your Own Adventures and I thought I could practice my writing here.
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(Maybe add one of those chats on my page if I figure out how to embed it).--[[User:Completionist|Completionist]] 05:47, 21 April 2014 (UTC)
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Right. It is too random and inconsistent. That said, those pages came from the original author / whoever last edited it (my edit was only to categorize the page; I'm still writing out the story for that branch fix). If you go to the main story's discussion page, I have those specific links under the "Clean-Up" section. I'm glad you're proofreading the story, though. Thanks for that. It's nice to see someone's reading the story. :)--[[User:Completionist|Completionist]] 16:39, 22 April 2014 (UTC)
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However, I stopped going back here a year ago because of one question: what is the point of practicing writing here if nobody will read it or give their opinions?
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As I previously said, I've been trying to find a way to rewrite that particular branching in the story that you've been talking about. And guess what? It's almost done! Feel free to critique and compare to the previous page done by the original author. [[TRTC/Cafe]]--[[User:Completionist|Completionist]] 05:23, 23 April 2014 (UTC)
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Not only are there few regulars here but considering the absolute ''plethora'' of smut here, what chance is there for anybody to read anything I've crafted or even give their opinion? Practice is worthless if nobody will point to the problems in your writing.
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Also, I see that Abandoned Adult Story page haha. To be honest, I was going to move from family-friendly and head my way down once I finish this one completely. I even had an idea of linking all of them together in a big timeline! Mind if I try helping out? That section is a monster to do by yourself.--[[User:Completionist|Completionist]] 05:35, 23 April 2014 (UTC)
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I might contribute to random Choose Your Own Adventures if I'm bored or tempted to go back to old habits of editing on here but I don't think I'll be writing anything of my own here.
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That sounds like a start of a big project. You might even need to recruit more people with dirty minds! I haven't read them, either, but I would suggest either separating them by scenarios, mostly. As far as gender goes, I would assume some kind of shape-shifting device for a quick change (i.e. potions, remote, machine, or trouble-making fairy right beside you). But like you said, we'll never know until we actually read what these stories are about.--[[User:Completionist|Completionist]] 06:11, 23 April 2014 (UTC)
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So I made a chat just to somehow make things more community-ish. I can't post outside links without angering the bots so if you want to try it out, feel free to visit my page. Well, that's it for now. Gotta tell the other users about it. Hopefully it works out ^_^ --[[User:Completionist|Completionist]] 20:13, 26 April 2014 (UTC)
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Thanks for the fix. And thanks for telling me about how they read it. Anyway, just another quick reply. Hope we can get people into the chat, too... if ever needed.--[[User:Completionist|Completionist]] 05:35, 27 April 2014 (UTC)
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So. This is awkward and not just because it's been (checks last communication) holy shit, half a decade? Anyway, yeah, it's been a long time since we've talked.
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Just saying a quick hi to show that I'm still alive (kinda)! Well, anyway, to another topic: how goes the Adult Abandoned Story? Feel free to reply either by usual post or that chat I setup (I would probably reply faster with this option). Just saying hi again!--[[User:Completionist|Completionist]] 04:46, 7 May 2014 (UTC)
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Am I actually back this time? For the foreseeable future, yes. I do have a collaboration I want to contribute to here and that old ''Dungeons and Dragons'' CYOA to fill in with my own idea for an adventure, not just bitterly edit it. Yeah, I really was contemptuous, wasn't I?
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I actually came back today to talk about a way I don't know if you're familiar with Yahtzee, a certain vulgar but hilarious reviewer on The Escapist, but he actually has longer, more drawn-out reviews called "Extra Punctuation". In one of his articles, Yahtzee talks about how he'd prefer "Heavy Rain", he would have preferred for the plot twist of the killer's identity to change depending on the decisions you made, much like Silent Hill 2 and Silent Hill: Silent Memories, whose endings changed on subtle actions that implied a different mindset like running around with frequently low health making it more likely to get the suicide ending and such.]] He's very fond of getting the gameplay to interact with and work with the story, changing and painting in the context.
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I think I may have complained before about seeing this sort of thing because a CYOA is about the choices you, the main character, makes, not the choices you make the other characters make like "The man gropes you" or "The man just stares at you". Here, I think it's different because it's not so much based on making other character's choices so much as the choice you make influencing the tone and direction the story takes before it's "fully-baked", so to speak.
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Yes I do realize what a cervix is capable/incapable of doing, but it is a fantasy story. I hope most people who have read my story know this, or else their SO might be in for a painful surprise! Thanks for the response. Happy writing!
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Like, if you choose "glare at the person at the door", the person will glare back or shoot some snide remark and the story will inform you that it's an old rival that usually tries to undermine you. If you choose "say hello in a friendly tone", they'd say hello back and shoot the shit with you, informing you that they're a casual acquittance. Another choice for signifying if they're a friend and another if they're a lover.
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Or, as he put it, "the idea was, you had to make 6 choices, and each choice branched the story. The player was given as little detail as possible at the start, and each choice of action they made added detail that altered the context of the events. For example, you started off in a hospital reception area, and the first choice was whether to sit down and wait or walk down the hall to explore further. Choosing to sit implied that the player character understood the hospital to be functional, and would lead to the stories involving visiting sick friends, seeing a doctor or identifying a corpse. Choosing to explore implied that the player character was more confused about their situation, which led to stories in which the hospital was abandoned or closed, and you were there for various illicit reasons."
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It's an interesting idea for how to experiment with CYOAs while still making the reader's choices the center of the piece and I'm pretty sure I saw something like that here, one choice going for a romantic tone, one for a dangerous "you were just kidnapped" tone.
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...By the way, your shower is fixed, right? I remember you talking about how unsexy and rude the fixers were, not like the fixers in porn.
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haha, Literally just noticed that and fixed the link before reading the message -JerryCraft
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--[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 01:21 (Central Time), 03 December 2021
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== Sorry about that... ==
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I'll admit...some of these things also turn my stomach. I once stumbled onto a page in "The Devil's Daughter" and found a scene where "garden slaves" have to lick a woman's ass clean and it described how there was wet shit still in her ass and...
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First off I'm sorry for my actions. Let me just clarify... I didn't delete any of your content (I don't hate any of it, in contrast to your assumption), I simply broke off that particular page into two pages... since that particular idea I had required a choice in the middle of the actions detailed on that particular page. It was intrusion on my part and I am sorry, but since you flagged it as ''Public'' I thought you wouldn't mind. My sincerest apologies... --[[User:Renegade1412|R`1412]] 1852 hrs, Tue 29 Apr 2014 (UTC)
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I tapped out. I could not even try. I can stomach tons and tons of poorly-written smut but going into gross-out territory like this isn't worth the effort.
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It's fine... its fine really... I was ignorant. This was my first time trying to contribute to a story. I thought it was fine as long as I kept all the materials in there via branching. I shall find alternative methods to include the idea I had but until then I started creating new branches. :) I have learnt my lesson and won't repeat. --[[User:Renegade1412|R`1412]] 1234 hrs, Wed 30 Apr 2014 (UTC)
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Sorry to hear that you don't come by anymore but go ahead, you do you. Would it be too much to ask which Discord your writings are put on?
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== --[[User:Zoroastra|Zoroastra]] ==
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I actually do find that way of writing Yahtzee described interesting enough to try one day. But, yanno, if ain't today...
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Been a while since i've been on this site so I used the wrong \, thx for the tips :-)
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That said, if I wanted to get your opinions on something I wrote here, would you still be willing to take a look?
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--[[User:Zoroastra|Zoroastra]]
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== [[User:WCold|WCold]] ==
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--[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 01:21 (Central Time), 08 December 2021
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About trees.
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== Enier ==
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That's a table with border="0" (you can't see all the cells) and cellspacing="0" (lines between cells solid).<br/>
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TQ for the tips.
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The "connecting lines" is a cell's borders which I made visible.
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--[[User:WCold|WCold]] 07 May 2014
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== Narutostory reply ==
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Also, you do not need to have a template. That was put there so you know how to make one if you want. It is not required, and is not useful if your story isn't going to use it. If it is, well, you can replace the template, but they are hard to figure out. Let me know if you need help on it.Reply:
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Thanks for the heads up! I'll be completely revamping the entire "Invading the Cult" story over the next month or two so I plan on having a bit fall out of index for a bit but I'll fix it all at the end if I can. Checking for spelling, consistency, making it all sound better, adding stats/quests/abilities at the bottom. Anyways, thanks for the heads up, I'll have to remember to go back and fix that when I'm done.
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Remind me what a template is?
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== Help - Defnota ==
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Can you do combination linking?
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&nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; Hey, you know that one time we emailed each other? Do you still have my email address? I locked myself out of my email and need to confirm that I'm spelling it correctly,
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<br> and you're the only person I've ever emailed.
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<br>- [[User:Defnota|Defnota]] 21:21, 2 July 2014 (UTC)
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&nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; Thank you, you beautiful person! I thought someone had hijacked my email, but it turns out that my email address has a spelling error in it and I was spelling "definitely" properly these last few times.
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Help with the status bar! I need an explanation clearer than the tutorial!
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<br> I am ever so grateful, thank you again for your help.
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<br>-[[User:Defnota|Defnota]] 09:43, 4 July 2014 (UTC)
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==Elerneron talk==
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I want something like the table in the tutorial, but blue. can u send me the code?
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Thanks for you encouragement on [[Primal Influence]].  It is very appreciated.  I was wondering if there is a way to change my way I do categories from the current - system to the / system without causing to much trouble, or is it going to create redundant pages no matter what I do?
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--[[User:Elerneron|Elerneron]]
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== Thanks for reminder  ==
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TQ. How do I make A Wiki?
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Thanks for helping me get started and for all the reminders. As you can see from all the previously missing links that I'm  still learning my way around the site. I may have inadvertently committed some infraction that I am working on avoiding in the future. Please bear with me, I think I'm starting to get the hang of things around this site.
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==Platypus==
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--[[User: Ubunto]]
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Thank you for your efforts thus far.  I appreciate your help, and you have my sympathy for your loss of brain cells.  At some point, when I'm feeling brave, I'll tackle what remains.  Hot and Horny was most written by writers that I pushed away from Smutty Sex Romp and Rampage, and much of it is pretty cringe worthy.
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==Hey DirtyMe! Got a Quick Request==
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"I'm about to pop an egg."  There should be a collection of truly, awfully bad lines somewhere.  That turkey deserves special recognition for sheer awfulness. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 12:42, 14 June 2017 (UTC)
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Hey so I've had a ghost story [[The Ghost of the Mansion]] sitting around for a while, luckily recently chapters have been added, but with so few people writing it isn't expanding fast. I was wondering if you could help by perhaps adding a few chapters yourself if you are interested. I believe the story is relatively unique and has good potential. If you don't want to, I won't mind.
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Thanks for the heads up.  And good job messing with the spammer's spammy spam! --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 11:54, 9 August 2017 (UTC)
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--[[User: Uman]]
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== Wolfskin75==
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== Thanks dirtyme ==
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did this work? --[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]]
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Lol thank for telling me how to do this. Im a writer well try on fanfiction.net and i always wanted to make my own story on here and finally started lol but hope if i got questions i dont annoy you lol
 
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I am thinking of a several character story... And like your too graphic. I wanted to incorporate pictures. Non that have copyright but to give the reader a idea of what i am visualizing. I am trying to find a way to pitch my ideas without it being public... But i dont use anom email so...yeah. I think however, i should work on figuring out the mechanics before i start writing. And i invite you to add to were you see fit. I like your stories. (i read some.)  --
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]]
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--[[user: Darky]]
 
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Thank you for your feedback on my story so far. I'm aware of the last sentence. I'm also thinking of another way to put in line. Hope you will give me more feedback for the rest of the story. Maybe also for the parts that have been? *blush* ;)
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Well, my idea goes like this.   I want to write a two prong story: about a neighborhood of deviants that a Mom and her daughter move into. They are fresh from a divorce from a wealthy guy so he buys them a House in this neighborhood.  I want to Mom to become some Wife's pet (romance themed but lots of kink Dom/sub exploring fetishes... mostly my own) the choices will be who you sub too. Whether it be a loving woman or a cruel pain master.  and at the same time her daughter (totally cute emo girl) will become a Dom to one of the daughters of the town. Of course they will be men in it.. but only as a side story.. (men have no place in my fantasy world) Of course.... this is basically how the neighborhood works... they were moved there on purpose. I love reading stories where two girls find a comfortable love full of their kinks .  yes... no? any tips or whatever would be nice.     
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I understand what you mean. But I'm thankful for your grammatical changes. English is not my native language so sometimes I miss some expressions and words. Hope you will take a look sometimes and improve the grammar I'm happy ☺
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]]
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For your story I'd like to see you exposed in a live tv program. You have to do assignments, a failure makes you loose an article of clothing. So you are getting bare naked for millions of viewers. Do you think you can something with this. 😈 Love Darky
 
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Okay, I have corrected some things. I apologize for some misunderstandings. I guess I am looking for more of a mentor? someone to bounce ideas off of. None of the ideas I have are set in stone and I am still trying to even figure out how to get started. I am just more looking for some sort of communication and would like someone to collaborate with eventually. I am new here and I am just testing the waters. To see what is up. 
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Edit the page for you. As in the lines before, failure in assignmetns wil make you your clother, 1 item at the time, BUT..... you also have to put the article of clothing in a shredder. So naked is really naked with no possible way of return. Enjoy ;)
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]]
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The start of this is great. Better then I had imagined. But.... I'd Kill my master for that???? That needs a serious punishment :D ;)
 
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Looking forward to the rest of your story. Maybe I will give you some more storylines if you'd like.
 
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You did a great job. Except for the killing. I thought you'd liked to be exposed. So why don't you tell me how I can punish you.
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Thank you. I am currently working on adding things to "Mom can be bad".  I am going to try and class up the story a bit and learn the formatting. I have a lot to think about. You're right, some of the stories are down right stupid.  you're also right and that I am more about the innocence rather than the age.. Let me digest what you wrote, it was all good .. and I very glad for your time. thank you again.  
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I do understand your point of view. And I hope you (your character) has been really embarresed. As said before I really loved your storyline. Really good how your wrote my 'fantasy' in your words. I going to think of more story lines for you!
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]]
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You said a couple things that I can relate.  The reason I want to write this story is that, I just to chat with a bunch of real life little's. It was SOOOO great and they where all so full of life and happiness.  Of course things got drama filled at times but It was something I could "feel".  I wanted to be a protector. Not someone who would punish and then After care.. but ALL After care. and since I am married so I fantasize ... ALOT. but Like I said, it's not normal, (like most things I am involved in) for instance... I read rampage. and EVERY Ending I got to was a happily ever after ending. I think that say a lot of about my mind where I want to go with this story of mind.  The strong protecting the weak. Someone protecting those who would be prey and letting them live in happiness. Of course there is sex and kinkiness but it's the best of all environments. safety and trust.  this is more where I want my stories to go. Like I said. I am going to press on with adding to "Mom can be bad" not only warming up my writing skills and figuring out the format (like if you make one choice it effects the rest of the story sort of thing) and See what I can do.  I am dealing with Lisa, 40 married and Tera 50 divorced.  ( is there some sort of forum for these type of formatting questions?)
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I'am oke with you, if you add some additions. So I'am curious about your pov at the storyline. But if I do not like it, I hope you can accept that will turn things back ;)
 
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]]
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Hi, I read your additions, thought them over and I like them. So you can rewrite whatever you think is needed.
 
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I think your a little confusing sometimes. Do revise, do not want to revise. Wants add some things, doesn't want to add. You are so confusing that I like you a lot :D (compliment for you and not a negative thought)
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I am trying to add a page a day and see what happens. I have already ended my first thread. :)
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So see whatever you want to do or not, I'm ok with it.
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Thanks for helping me out with the page deletion thing --[[User:Hellspawn|I'm really beginning to regret my Username]]
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]]
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Thanks for notifying, I realise that I probably shouldn't blank so many pages but I was blanking other peoples stuff rather than my own (actually that sounds worse). What I mean to say is that I'm trying to reorganise and fix up that story but it meant removing a bunch of poorly written and poorly planned pages (Some didn't have options, some didn't makes sense etc.). I've only started doing that after I got to grips with the format and the editing options and I'm now going to start adding more to the story than I've taken away from it. But seriously thanks for the heads up. 15 April 2016--[[User:Hellspawn|I still regret my Username]]
 
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You know what, Platypus laid out what I was trying to do better than I did. Thanks for the input; I'm happy you're trying to help out novice users because that's not something everyone does on the internet. --[[User:Hellspawn|Hellspawn]] 18:52 15 April 2016 (GMT)
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nice, can I use that?
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]]
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I'd prefer discussions to be on one location rather than spread on multiple pages, but if you insist, okay then. Sorry about that, I didn't know that. --[[User:Stranger195|stranger195]] [[wikia:c:wikimarkup|<span title="This user is a Wiki Markup Wiki user!" style="color:blue; background-color:white; padding:2px; border-top:thin solid blue; border-left:thin solid blue; border-bottom:thin solid blue; border-right:thin solid blue; font-size:8pt;">@WikiMarkupWiki</span>]] ([[User talk:Stranger195|talk]] • [[Special:Contributions/Stranger195|contribs]] • [[wikia:c:guestbook:User:AStranger195/Guestbook|guest]][[wikibooks:w:User:Stranger195/Guestbook|book]]) 12:59, 15 March 2016 (UTC)
 
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Very nice. I am loving making these little snippets. Even though i fantasize about it, I am not sure if i got the feeling right. Since i am not female all i have to go on is other writings and since i don't have a book length to write and develop these feelings. I don't know what its like for a straight "married" woman to get picked up at a bar by another and go with it. I will use your snippets. But i invite you to add the story. :) I am also having fun making most of the men villians.
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]]
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== Short Bursts ==
 
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Hi, I just had a look at your story (not sure what else to call it) [[Short Bursts]], it seems like an interesting concept to me. I didn't see it in the adult index though, is it public or private? [[User:Wannabe rockstar|Wannabe rockstar]] 03:14, 25 March 2016 (UTC)
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Again. Thank you. I have a lot of editing to do amd make it all says in line. Thank you thank you. To know you are reading what i am writing...yay. I need to become a stronger writer. I am actually having some issues. 1. How do you slog through the middle stuff? I am having troubles feeling overwhelmed with stuff that has to hhappen to make the story ...er semi good rather than just the dirty parts. Do i make sense?  
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:That basically answered it, and yeah, I noticed that the stories right now are "you are terrified and then you're dead" :') but they're still interesting to read! It just seems like a cool idea to choose what elements or whatever you want the story to have, and then read the story itself. So is the idea to have stories that have further options, after the "story bursts?" I kind of feel you on that helping you to become a better writer, I haven't actually mapped out a plot for my story yet, I just write pages as I think of interesting/funny ideas. I have a veeeeery vague idea of where a few of the threads are going, but that's all. Anyway, it's a cool idea, kind of outside the box! [[User:Wannabe rockstar|Wannabe rockstar]] 03:42, 25 March 2016 (UTC)
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]]
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::Context seems like a neat idea too, are you basically cutting off the narrator at a certain point and choosing to respond to a certain word in the sentence? If you come up with more for it at some point I'd definitely be interested to have a look. And I actually have the opposite problem, my story is in the adult section but I'm pretty hopeless at writing anything erotic -.- depending on how my story goes I might just write out all the adult elements and move it to the mature section (for violence), but we'll see. My original idea was to keep my threads relatively clean and let other people add whatever they want, but I think I made my world a bit too complicated for other editors to jump in. [[User:Wannabe rockstar|Wannabe rockstar]] 03:52, 25 March 2016 (UTC)
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For instance, I was thinking about making it back to the house. I have several story points where things need to happen before the Preg story gets to the house.  I add some sex parts, things in fact I would love to do. What I am having trouble with is trying to get the notion that She might not be totally okay with this and that when she gets to house she is like "what the fuck am I doing." or maybe have that moment in the car.
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No worries. I'm grateful you spotted it, actually. I'd forgotten it had a link since there was quite a few red links in that part of the story. That's what I get for editing in the early hours. --[[User:Neminis|Neminis]] 10:20, 25 March 2016 (UTC)
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Not every woman has DD or 38g breast, not every woman shaves ( and thank god for that.) all the woman in my stories don't have huge boobs. I fantasize about smaller breast and I am not afraid to write about pubic hair.  
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]]
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OK so like are you guys real people...? Or are you robots...? Cause like on all the websites I'm on has the guide as a freaking robot and so I'm always suspicious XD sorry...but anyway I have no idea how to make my own story, cause I have a great idea that doesn't involve sex.
 
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I am trying to get more from you... To hopefully get you to boil over into a story. :)  whatever you want to tell me...please be sure i am "listening". ;).
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Haha, well, I just started, but I have to be a girl, so I can't really be a fair judge. I'll gladly look, though
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I love the way you write.  You include little things.. little things are always the important things right. and yes.. both of those things were great!  I am going on vacation for a week. I will be back though. Hopefully I will some updated work for you
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]]
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Hey, would you be interested in collaborating on my newest story, Fallout Shorts? If you've never played a Fallout game, you may not get it, but it pretty much sex in different situations, so I could fill you in. The best part is I made it specifically for one shots, like your bursts. You simply choose a base character, which you could make one, and write one story about them, then you never have to worry about that storyline again. I need someone mainly to help with the girl sex scenes. I can do the buildup and story, thats what I like, but I need a girls perspective on having sex in various, sometimes unusual ways. If not, no problem
 
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I have wrote alot ... Cant wait to post it. How have you been?  
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]]
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Please, go crazy. And like I said, I know a lot of girls into this stuff who've kinda explained their ways, so I can kinda write girl persepctive. And by all means, include whatever fetish you choose
 
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I would ask you a favor. I love what you wrote by the way... Totally totally enjoyed it. *wink* again and again...
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Thats cool. Although, like I said, this is more of unjoined stories with no joining parts, just bursts so i don't have to try an figure out memory. And clothing thing is great and on my mind. As for the animal thing, I think only girls because of there scent from their member.
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I need you to write a lesbian sex scene between Tera and Beth. I am adding a scene...after the dancing scene she goes home drunk with Beth..could you write the sex...can be bleary and nebulous...but it would be amazing if you would...?
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Perhaps 200 years of sexual tension? I think maybe a time skip might be an okay idea too, gives you the chance to get over husband, build whatever settlement, amke connections and such, better starting point.
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]]
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I like the Pipboy. It's a little big, but it looks great. And I think I'm going to restart Fallout 4, with a different strategy. I just wasn't happy with how this one worked. And sorry it's taken so long. Been busy.
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Will do. I will also read the links you sent. How would you like me to get that to you? Email or post it here? I will just living out a fantasy :)
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== In The Worst Ways ==
 
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Hope you like the option I added :v. [[User:Intheworstways| In The Worst Ways]]
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]]
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P.S. hope I didn't completely overstep in just adding it directly to the page, cause when I did that I thought that's what I was supposed to do, but now I'm not so sure.
 
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Sorry if it doesn't work out. I saw it on a blog of different sexual dares/challenges and it was the first thing that came to mind when you asked. Maybe I can get more ideas from there if I can ever find the page again :v.
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Tera, 50 mother of two, I envision her being bi curious her whole life just stuck in a rut. Blond hair, dyed. To cover the grey.. Beth a mid 20's redhead in college. Loves older woman. And likes the older woman sort of a mother like girlfriend..Knows Tera ( knows her daughter and is someone's daughter that Tera will know. Tera is of the generation that doesnt shave..pubic hair i mean. Beth is smaller chested then Tera. Normal breast Tera's would slightly not perky.
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Beth is the predator in this case...i want to have some regert in the morning but enough to force her hand in a choice. So far she has moved slowly but she has moved forward... Thats the direction i want to head. Plus... I havent posted the next post which will go in front of this...so you have a little time
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I love it! Thank you for writing it :v Keep up the good work! [[User:Intheworstways| In The Worst Ways]] 4:33 am est 5/5/16
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I am trying not to make something typical.
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What I've read of your rants story is pretty great :v. I tend to agree that those situations are annoying, though I've kinda just gotten used to them, you know? [[User:Intheworstways| In The Worst Ways]] 4:13 am est 5/8/16
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]]
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I read the summaries :v. [[User:Intheworstways|In The Worst Ways]] 06:06, 19 May 2016 (UTC)
 
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Personally I always liked the idea of being stuck (intentionally or unintentionally, willingly or unwillingly) halfway through a wall pretty enjoyable. The person on the other side can only see me from the waist down and I can't see them at all. They can use me however they want (from the waist down) and walk away and I'm still stuck there for the next anonymous user. Then if I get out later, literally anyone I pass by on the street could have been one of them. [[User:Intheworstways|In The Worst Ways]] 07:39, 19 May 2016 (UTC)
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I find myself wanting to add on to other stories... But alot of them have elements i dont like and really cant further the story the way i would like with the cast as it is. I could just go and rewrite the story...but i would rather contact the author and make the change.....sigh....or just make one of my own i guess.  
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That's pretty amazing. I envy you for being able to do something like that. I would love to do something like that if I could :v. I got into talking about the through the wall thing because I saw you were talking about being locked in stocks. [[User:Intheworstways|In The Worst Ways]] 08:15, 19 May 2016 (UTC)
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]]
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I may take you up on that offer of information on those countries. But I do also want to leave it open for others to write in and I've already got a lot on my mind for it. I would really like to see other people's ideas for shenanigans in a world that suddenly has no police and no laws. Come to think of it, no police means nobody to arrest you for public nudity or sex, right :v? [[User:Intheworstways|In The Worst Ways]] 20:28, 19 May 2016 (UTC)
 
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I actually hadn't been thinking about it, but I may implement through-the-wall or some other public use options in [[Leaving]] from different perspectives, and possibly in [[Global Anarchy]] in some way now that you mention it. I wasn't sure how to implement it but I've got some ideas now, thank you :v. [[User:Intheworstways|In The Worst Ways]] 04:28, 20 May 2016 (UTC)
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back home and posting again. :) figured it all out.  
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Oh my god thank you, I'm definitely going to look into that and see what I can do, try to learn those things. I didn't know a lot of those things were even possible on here. [[User:Intheworstways|In The Worst Ways]] 04:19, 24 May 2016 (UTC)
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]]
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Well, easy or not, I'm the kind of person that, as long as it's for something stupid and irrelevant I will keep poking at it until it's perfect. Or at the very least, much, much longer than I have any reason to keep trying. [[User:Intheworstways|In The Worst Ways]] 05:10, 24 May 2016 (UTC)
 
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I completely forgot about hover text. It's been so long since I've had a mouse to hover with lol. I feel like I'm missing out now, especially considering things like xkcd and Paradox Space use hover text a lot. I'm not sure I'd use notes that often though because I don't want people getting into the habit of looking at the edit pages of every page. Would spoil a few things on a few of the pages I've already set up lol. [[User:Intheworstways|In The Worst Ways]] 05:47, 24 May 2016 (UTC)
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Any details you can provide about that...I am more than happy to read...re read ..
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Have my own activities..then re read again. I would like to know...especially the tying part...
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I hope this isn't terrible of me to say but I was silently hoping the person writing that family guy story was gonna get the boot when I saw the "Go on a Rape race" page didn't have a category. Every page of that is just, dear god why? <font color=white>I thought I could get away from Family Guy by not watching TV.</font color> [[User:Intheworstways|In The Worst Ways]] 04:45, 25 May 2016 (UTC)
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]]
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Thank you for the bunny and the flower, by the way! I went to bed and then I wasn't sure what to say about them. But those are pretty neat. [[User:Intheworstways|In The Worst Ways]] 04:50, 25 May 2016 (UTC)
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I feel so lazy...i havent been writing..bad me..lol
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== Thank You!! ==
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]]
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Thnx for the comment.I'm really thankful,i haven't relly got the hang of it yet XD.My computer hasn't been working with me,(Thanks to my little sister -_-) but I'll manage, hopefully!Thanks again ^~^!
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I have a question. Do you understand my writing? Like if you had to critque it. What would be a couple of good things i could work on?
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[[User:BlOoD_tHiRsTy]]
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== Jordon21 Talk ==
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 23:55, 14 July 2017 (UTC)
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Thanks for adding that category. [[User:Jordon21 |Jordon21]]
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I added two or three more pages last night. I really need have a edit day. If I could crave out a day to JUST EDIT that would be great. *sigh*
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==SkylaTruffles' Talk==
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 14:35, 15 July 2017 (UTC)
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For "negative criticism", you delivered that message quite politely. :P But yeah, thanks for the info. I guess I'm not used to how Talk Pages operate - I hold more of a presence on chatrooms and back-and-forth messaging threads, you see. --[[User:SkylaTruffles|Skyla]] 19:18, 23 May 2016 (UTC)
 
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Ah, trust me. Those are joke endings, made for petty amusement, if anything. I'll be sure to squeeze in more subtle ways to take a villainous route as I continue to update the story. --[[User:SkylaTruffles|Skyla]]  07:01, 25 May 2016 (UTC)
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Wanted to touch base. How are you doing?
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No worries. If you've seen the planning page for the story that I totally failed at squeezing in subtly, only one out of twelve endings for each character will be really dark, meaning that there'll only be a certain number of choices that allow you to be a prick. But to each their own, I guess. :P --[[User:SkylaTruffles|Skyla]] 11:07, 25 May 2016 (UTC)
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 20:10, 16 July 2017 (UTC)
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Thank you..its awesome. It was perfect and I..thank you for your time.  Family def comes first
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 14:31, 18 July 2017 (UTC)
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I have a question for you? it's kind of private. how can I ask you?
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 00:23, 19 July 2017 (UTC)
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I have been really tired lately, I plan to work on this weekend. I am not giving up. Life has just gotten busy, I still love the writing and I still crave the interaction. Thank you for your time and effort. I look really good, and I will get my head screwed on right promise.
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 15:23, 20 July 2017 (UTC)
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I was finally able to read it. I am changing it all to first person. since I think, that how I wrote the rest of the story? I wasn't sure so I have copies of both just in case. I will be working on the rest of it and that's what I want to buzz you about. I think it would be easier. to use discord for our edits? and I wanted to buzz you my Discord info. As you can leave something there for days and I can see it there when every I log on. I was just thinking about it. Plus we maintain our safety and secure. :)  HIGHLY HIGHLY sexy stuff!!! thank you.
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 07:25, 21 July 2017 (UTC)
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So far it's golden. I find myself really enjoying the foreplay as I usually do in real life. As a kid in middle school I taught myself through many a bad movie to listen to a woman's body and learn how to please her without "intercourse". I LOVE FOREPLAY. and if that doesn't sound true or read true, there is no point finish the chapter. Anyway I think what you wrote actually feels real rather than what you said to the notes where the they get together and he whips his cock out stuffs it in.. and she lOVES IT! and have five orgasm.  THEN,  everyone thinks it's a great scene but nothing happened. 
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Furthermore, one of the parts I find very disrespectful is that they're always written where the women is satisfied beyond the shadow of a doubt, multiple orgasm and after one time having sex, she goes from Virgin she goes to ultra slut. It's just stupid!!!  In this story, I wanted to communicate softness and the importance of trust and the sexiness of vulnerability and how that plays into arousal.
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as for this conversation. I would say without a DOUBT... I look forward to our interactions and AND I don't know why I hold as much as I do.  but... that's a deeper discussion. 
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 12:52, 21 July 2017 (UTC)
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What do you need from me?  I am feeling like I have slacked off.. TOTALLY hot scene by the way... :P 
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What do you use to keep track of the story? I am starting to see the limitations of your basic document editor.  I losing my place pretty easily. :(
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 21:42, 23 July 2017 (UTC)
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Did you add something? I couldnt make up what was updated?
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 21:17, 24 July 2017 (UTC)
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Out of the three moms can be bad stories i started. Two of them end up in the same kink. Which is good but i dont want to just write the same thing. Yes i am interested in that kink and those types if relationships but... You have to be anle to expand lol. I am trying to write it from all sides. But i feel like I enjoy writing it why not...but also since I am learning....i am having a bad day and writing porn and reading your hot writing makes me happy.
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 23:15, 24 July 2017 (UTC)
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I finally found a shit load of notes you have been leaving.  I have starting up stories and just letting it go on.  I would have loved to competed in that competition!!! I would have written some awesome stuff. Cream worthy if I do say.  Use to take the train to work everyday.. so I had a lot of time to think about this particular thing.
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What is my style? I am would have to say I am trained beginner and that my style is "evolving"  I am not giving up and I will read all that you have left for me. PROMISE. I am going on vacation again so I hope to have some good pages come of this vacation.  I just don't want to be a one trick pony you know.
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 06:34, 26 July 2017 (UTC)
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Thank you for that. I am going to use it but I had to create my own account and I would have to invite you to work with me. SOOOO if you want to find out who I am really am.. cause I don't have fake email addresses.... Let me know. :) I would be more than happy to invite you onboard. :)   
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 07:19, 26 July 2017 (UTC)
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I have gotten the thingy up. I will write some more and invite when i get back form vacation. But a couple of beers and a couple hours to write do wonders?
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 23:24, 27 July 2017 (UTC)
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I invited you. I am reading your blog. and I want to work with you on "Maso me" whenever you think I can fit. :) anyway, I will have more soon.
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 22:16, 29 July 2017 (UTC)
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Okay.. I am going to have to make pages for us. (actually makes me happy) so we can keep better track of our various creative projects. I will have to figure how to do that and then we can add to those.
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 00:20, 30 July 2017 (UTC)
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did you get the invite?
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 16:32, 31 July 2017 (UTC)
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Let me work on that. no idea why. I am going back through and editing. I was reading through maso me. I loved the part where they were using her in class. HOT!
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 04:40, 1 August 2017 (UTC)
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I did figure out how to get you full access. Try it and let me know.
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 04:58, 1 August 2017 (UTC)
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Okay. I wanted to right something about a like humiliation type scene that is being filmed, something new for the person involved but not as horrifying as she thought. (i.e. the experience as being used as a sex guide in the "training" part.)    I am not sure if that would fit into that story. or even if you wanted it to be in it at all. just was really excited by the training part was all. doing things in front of people you don't know or do know. wanted to add that in. I would add that in to one of the chapters of my story as well. It was hot
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 15:45, 2 August 2017 (UTC)
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So, I started my own story.. YAY.  I will work on Lisa's story tonight (or this weekend at least) I added the beginning of the sex scenes with Tera and Beth and introduced a new character or at least named her. (Tera's friend Marla.) Anything else you would like me to do or help you with?
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 18:44, 4 August 2017 (UTC)
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I like it.  you are a really good writer and story teller. I like the way you make the story come together.  I am trying to work on my story telling abilities or at least communicating them in written form. I have had writers block as of late. I have plenty of "ideas" but seemingly no time and not a lot motivation.  I have been reading a bit lately, and really thinking about what kind of stories I want to tell.  It's good and I am really I guess picking out a lot of the crap that I don't want in my stories that traditionally make it into porn. Love your writing, and I love reading.  It's some of the most erotic writing I have read.
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 14:32, 10 August 2017 (UTC)
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I have block. and I feel like I need to keep writing though. I want to stay productive. :(  i am going to a convention next week maybe that will help me clear my head up.  YAY.
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 15:30, 11 August 2017 (UTC)
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I've been on the convention for a couple days. I have been trying to write a come up with something to write but not really pushing myself.  Have you been?
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 12:17, 20 August 2017 (UTC)
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I am back. SAME HERE!!!  I have been needing a release. So I have been thinking of someone to write it out. nope... then I thought Stranger orgy. Which, seemed like a good idea. Until I realized I was a loser and could no way shape or form find one.  My wife walked around the house this morning with just underwear. I want to so many things,even in front of the kids. didn't care. but...nothing.  So, back to writing.    Let's write something dirty ??? Stranger orgy story, two character plan to meet there not knowing what is going happen.
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 13:53, 22 August 2017 (UTC)
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Alright, time for a rant. I am horny as all get out. Frustrated as hell. Nothing I do seems to help, it only slides me further this big swamp i am stuck in. I know kind of what I want. I have the ideas but I don't see a path to get there. But I know i don't have it all together and I have vauge ideas of what success looks like and I know a lot of time will be in the middle. Am I making sense? I enjoyed my time away at the convention but it seemed like i wasted a whole bunch of time... But it would have been only to stare at a blinking cursor on a screen. I read other erotica... It all sucks but at least they wrote it. I love yours. Specially the one with the girl who goes into the adult book store (have i mentioned that before) i am just stressed and feeling like i am wasting time. I dont want to get up in the morning... But i get up to check for your messages. Everything is crowding me in. I just am aimless. I read some stories about mind control. I find that cool...but all the stories seem to fall apart. Like they lose steam and rely on tropes. Bad ones. What would you do if you had mind control? I know I know for a fact I would use it to get people to admit stuff they are thinking but never say. Aaaaaarrrgghhh am I making sense?
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 14:32, 22 August 2017 (UTC)
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YOu and I are in the same boat. Like, THE EXACT same boat.
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 06:20, 23 August 2017 (UTC)
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So I am crawling out of skin. I have written a couple of pages here and there but not edited. I need to find a editor. I am going to go and make more sense of my outlines. I have let them go.
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 00:52, 27 August 2017 (UTC)
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AAAARRRGGGGGHH. Okay. I have a new schedule to deal with now so I am dealing with that not so good.  I would love to help you out on whatever you need help with.  I have added anything in a couple days. but I am still thinking. :)  How are you.
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 06:08, 31 August 2017 (UTC)
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I hope you get better. I know how that can be. with kid's bringing home the sickness. do I have a story for you. LOL
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 14:55, 11 September 2017 (UTC)
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Okay so, I have writing story on a forum (kind of like a back and forth.) and last night I wrote this part that literally broke the story. I was told, the other writer was in fact upset by the part so much that they couldn't bear to write any more. (and you are going to have to believe me on this.) I was really happy that I wrote something that caused an emotional impact. but now... since I am "not me" and this is something I would never share in public as me or anyone else. Which is fine but the point of the matter is, is that I have it in me. I lacking the basics to funnel it through. I am getting lessons on how to write better. (like organizational tips and grammar so on) but I sense that I am inspiring hope. :(  I guess the point is that I have like something there. It's going to take a lot of work to dig to it.  (make sense?)
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 22:25, 11 September 2017 (UTC)
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Get better, I miss you.
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 06:21, 14 September 2017 (UTC)
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== Alison ==
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If I delete the link in all family-friendly stories, will the story also be deleted?
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== Grazie ==
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Thanks lol. This is my first story so I'm still getting the hang of all the coding and friends.

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Contents

Darth Malcolm

We don't know each other. But I appreciate you, and I thought you should know.

--Darth Malcolm 02:09, 3 December 2021 (UTC)


Teejay

Epitaph for a gunslinger:

Here lies Lester Moore

Four shots from a .44

No Les, no more.

-- Teejay

I've seen the all the problems begin with MEN on a T-shirt. I've been tempted to get it for my GF.

The Lester Moore epitaph is very famous. I'm surprised you've never seen it before.

That poem sounds like it was written by a guilt free Catholic school girl. :)

-- Teejay

A judge was doing arraignments, and the prisoners were in the holding cell of the courthouse, being called forward one by one. Four men were left in the cell when the judge looked at his next case:

State of California vs. Steven Lewon Crook

"Crook!" said the judge. "Step forward!"

All four men stepped out of the holding cell.

-- Teejay

You did a good job with it. As far as I can tell from years of practice, good oral sex when a man goes down on a woman involves being gentle, tonguing her clit, rubbing it while you slip your tongue inside her, and basically following her body's cues until she gushes on your face (and then doing it again and again.)

-- Teejay

I judge Teddy to be about 13. He'll lose interest eventually, probably sooner rather than later.

Headline spotted recently: MILF BRACES FOR FAP OFFENSIVE

My reaction: "Whiskey... Tango... Foxtrot?"

-- Teejay

Maybe they are. When I'm alone in the apartment I'll walk around in my underwear, so maybe they just don't think about it.

-- Teejay

After what happened, no terrorist will come near any of her other concerts. You know security will be ridiculously tight. Definitely go if you want to. -- Teejay

A psychiatrist and a proctologist share an office building. They put up a sign on the front: THE DEPARTMENT OF ODDS AND ENDS. -- Teejay

Your English isn't getting worse. What you're describing doesn't have a formal name.

More... h'mmm. Climb and boink, where she climbs a tree and the guys have to climb up to her and boink her. -- Teejay

In a single day, Samson slew a thousand Philistines with the jawbone of an ass. Every day, thousands of sales are killed with the same weapon. -- Teejay

Even for me, a very fast reader, that took a good chunk of time to read. You're an excellent writer and it's very well written. -- Teejay

I'm quite honored. :) -- Teejay

That's very understandable. I do the same thing with the stories I write for Literotica. It's a way of expressing myself and doing things I can't do IRL. -- Teejay

When the Angles (with the Saxons) invaded England, they settled in what became known as the Land Debatable, namely the north of England and the south of Scotland. The acute Angles went north and the obtuse ones south. -- Teejay

Very awesome band. -- Teejay

We all have hidden desires. That's one of yours. It doesn't surprise me. Hope you're doing well. -- Teejay

I'm glad you got to show off and didn't get in trouble. And you are quite attractive, especially to people who, unlike me, don't prefer women who are as wide as they are tall.

I kind of froze up on the scooter thing. Sorry. I should have handled it better.

Glad to hear that you and your husband still lust each other, in addition to loving each other. Enjoy! -- Teejay

When you used the phrase "get off my chest," it brought to mind an old Dilbert.

Dogbert: "This is the thief who took the decoy lunch...which we laced with synthetic female hormones!"

Wally: "You can't prove anything!"

Dogbert: "Is there something you'd like to get off your chest?" -- Teejay

That works. :) -- Teejay

Believe me, I understand the frustration. The (late) mother of my children and I had a spectacular love life until our first child was born. After that, it was impossible, nearly, to find time. When we did, she clearly released a lot of pent up energy. I hope you find some (safe) way of releasing yours. -- Teejay

A Republican politician is giving a speech at a large public auditorium and making all sorts of promises everyone knows are a bunch of hot air. A heckler stands up and bellows, "All that will happen when pigs fly!"

The Republican beckons the heckler onto the stage. Thrusting the microphone under the heckler's nose, he says, "Let me guess. You're a liberal."

The heckler replies with, "My grandfather was a Democrat, my father was a Democrat, and I am and always will be a Democrat."

The Republican, unfazed, responds smoothly with, "Suppose your grandfather had been a jackass and your father had been a jackass. What would that make you?"

Without missing a beat, the heckler booms, "A Republican!"

-- Teejay

Comment from an Internet comment thread:

When the deer have guns too, then and only then will hunting be considered an actual sport. -- Teejay

Those were awesome. And a little too close to my reality to make me laugh. I actually had the conversation in #14 with both my (now passed) wives. And knowing that words don't work in that situation, I ended up going down on them and after they were cummed out, sticking my head up and saying, "Did that answer your question?" -- Teejay

A classic from the Golden Age. Back when those kind of movies had actual plot. Watched both it and the original Taboo in the same week... about 22 years ago. I recommend it. -- Teejay

Technically, you'd have to ask Platypus, he's the one who created the "base" characters for SSR, but I'm on the assumption that it's no coincidence the slut neighbor is named "Debbie".

P.S. I turn 44 in October. From the information publicly available already, that I'm old enough to to have two kids one of whom is a teenager, you probably could have guessed pretty close to the correct answer. And if I watched those movies 22 years ago, well you have to be at least 18 to watch them so that would in and of itself imply at least 40. -- Teejay

They were younger children when I wrote that intro, back about 6 years ago when I first found this site :) -- Teejay

It's well written. I don't want to think about it too much because that kind of thing, even though it's only fantasy, still turns my stomach a bit. -- Teejay

Man in doctor's office: "My name is Daniel Nathan Reed. I don't initial anything." :) -- Teejay

From the late George Carlin:

Hospitals often name a new facility after the person who makes the major donation. I grew up with a neighborhood guy who is now extremely wealthy, and I'm hoping someday he'll make a big donation. I just want to drive past the hospital and see the No-Balls Malone Cancer Pavilion. -- Teejay

Can you guess what book I'm reading just from the chapter titles? :)

The Tomahawk * Good Samaritan * Earthport * The Astrogators' Guild * "...Your Money And My Know-How..." * "Spaceman" Jones * Eldreth * Three Ways To Get Ahead * Chartsman Jones * Garson's Planet * "Through The Cargo Hatch" * Halcyon * Transition * Anywhere * "This Isn't A Picnic" * "-- Over A Hundred Years --" * Charity * Civilization * A Friend In Need * "-- A Ship Is Not Just Steel --" * The Captain Of The Asgard * The Tomahawk

(Yep, the first and last chapters have the same title.) -- Teejay

Finished Starman Jones and now I'm reading an even older book, one published over 100 years ago. -- Teejay

A census worker was going house to house collecting information, and knocks on the door of an apartment. The only resident is a 25-year-old woman. After explaining why he's there, he starts to record the information. They get to the line for Occupation, and she says, "Hooker."

"I can't put that."

"Then put prostitute."

"That's not a legal occupation. I can't put that!"

"Okay, put down chicken farmer."

"Chicken farmer?"

"Yeah. Last year I raised 1,000 cocks."

-- Teejay

I know nothing about the Fallout world. But I was able to piece together enough to make the story sensible. And as always, your talent for writing shines through. -- Teejay

Also, I noticed there are still some redlinks on The Exhibitionist. Did you plan to fill those? -- Teejay

In England, there is a charitable group called the Women's Association that operates nationwide. The local branches are named for the localities (London Women's Association, Nottingham Women's Association, Sheffield Women's Association, &c.)

When the group opened a branch in the village of Ugley, the local branch -- with good reason -- did not want to be the Ugley Women's Association. So they changed their name to the Women's Association (Ugley Division.) -- Teejay

When asked to use the word "horticulture" in a sentence, Dorothy Parker instantly replied, "You can lead a horticulture but you can't make her think." -- Teejay

What movie did I just watch?

"I'm here to deliver a message from Mr. Lacombe." "Just you?" "I don't see anyone else around. Mr. Lacombe said to tell you... camel jockeys... that if you fuck with him, he's gonna cut off your balls and stick 'em up your ass. [samples food on table] You guys eat this shit?" "You are a dead man." "I'm not afraid to die... are you?" "No... Allah protects us." "Well, then... [smashes other guy's face into table] this shouldn't hurt!" -- Teejay

The movie is the 1991 film "The Hitman", starring Michael Parks, Al Waxman, Alberta Watson and Ken Pogue. -- Teejay

A biology teacher in an all girls high school decides to see if the pupils have studied the day's lesson.

"Kate, what part of the human body, when stimulated properly, expands to six times it's normal size?"

Kate blushes and stammers, "That's.... inappropriate to ask."

"Jill, what part of the human body, when stimulated properly, expands to six times its normal size?"

"The pupil of the eye, in dim light."

"Correct. Kate, three things. One, you didn't study. Two, you have a dirty mind. Three, you're going to be very disappointed."

-- Teejay

Sorry you're feeling ill. Hope you and your son recover quickly. -- Teejay

Those were good.

A brilliant young student at Trinity / Computed the cube of infinity / But the number of digits / Gave him the fidgets / He chucked math and took up divinity.

Connors said "Bet that I'll beat ya"/ To the odd-shaped mechanical creature / But it won in straight sets / And then quipped at the net / "Bjorn Cyborg's the name. Glad to meet ya."

A robot with lofty inflection / Read Stein in the poetry section / But read it "Arose / Is arose is arose" / And thought it concerned resurrection.

An epicure dining at Crewe / Found a rather large mouse in his stew / Cried the waiter, "Don't shout / And wave it about / Or the rest will be wanting one too."

-- Teejay

There once was a cook from New York / Who claimed you should always stew pork / He says he once tried / To eat some of it fried / And found he would rather chew cork.

-- Teejay

That was a good one. :) -- Teejay

A wonderful passage from the book I'm reading (and I'm wondering if you know the book...)

"When we looked to the south from this depot we saw no clouds; there was nothing but hard clear sky. The sky gave no indication of the blizzard winds that were to assail us when we reached the plateau, and after we had gone as far south as we could and retraced our footsteps to the depot, we looked back and saw the same clear sky, with a few wisps of fleecy cloud in it. We had no doubt that below those clouds the pitiless gale was still raging across the great frozen plain..."

-- Teejay

Very sorry about your cousin.

I'm glad you've found some books you like. Reading is one of life's great pleasures.

-- Teejay

You will not be punished, as you did not intentionally do anything wrong and you were honest. These things do sometimes happen. You are not in trouble.

(Hugs you tightly and gently runs my hand through your hair comfortingly)

-- Teejay

Maybe try going out with the blouse *almost* all the way unbuttoned?

I wish you lived closer. I would love for your family and mine to be real-life friends.

-- Teejay

Still not in trouble. You need comfort, not anger, right now.

(gently cradles you against my chest like a parent cradles a baby, to relax you and make you feel less stressed)

-- Teejay

I know all about real ones. Did I ever mention that my (late) father used to be a construction worker? And I'm glad you got out and managed to get some of your pent-up desire released.

-- Teejay

Freezing in place (normally in shock) is a fairly normal reaction when something like that happens... also, if it's crowded, there may not be a lot of room to move.

If "he" had instead been "she" doing the touching, how would you have reacted?

-- Teejay

If you lived close by, I'm sure I could talk my girlfriend into gently giving your rear the occasional grope. :)

-- Teejay

I'm 100% certain it's the look the cop gives everyone. It's designed to make anyone thinking about executing a crime reconsider their life choices. All cops have it and they all walk around using it. He wasn't singling you out.

Source: I used to work with cops, and my sister-in-law is married to a cop.

Your outfits are fine.

-- Teejay

I'm glad you went out and had some fun. And if the neighbors get freaked out because of what you're doing inside your own house, that's their issue.

-- Teejay

Found a great passage in a book I'm reading, and want to share.

To man has been given the grief, often, of seeing his gods overthrown and his altars crumbling; but to the wolf and the wild dog that have come in to crouch at man’s feet, this grief has never come. Unlike man, whose gods are of the unseen and the overguessed, vapors and mists of fancy eluding the garmenture of reality, wandering wraiths of desired goodness and power, intangible outcroppings of self into the realm of spirit - unlike man, the wolf and the wild dog that have come in to the fire find their gods in the living flesh, solid to the touch, occupying the earthspace and requiring time for the accomplishment of their ends and their existence. No effort of faith is necessary to believe in such a god; no effort of will can possibly induce disbelief in such a god. There is no getting away from it. There it stands, on its two hind legs, club in hand, immensely potential, passionate and wrathful and loving, god and mystery and power of all wrapped up and around by flesh that bleeds when it is torn and that is good to eat like any flesh.

-- Teejay

Ooof. Very sorry about your shower door. That sounds awful.

It's your kitchen, you can dress however you like. I often go into mine not fully dressed, either, to do things.

Glad you got a chance to spend some time with friends. A bikini in a swimming pool, that's not a big deal.

Toying yourself while the workers are there might be pushing it. Now if you were to happen to be asleep when they arrived, it's not your fault you sleep naked and you kicked off the covers because summer is approaching and it's getting hot.

-- Teejay

Care to hazard a guess what book I'm reading?

The loss of Iceland was a disaster whose dimensions were only now becoming apparent. The Soviet bombers had a clear lane to reach into the trade route. Their submarines were racing through the Denmark Strait even as the NATO navies were trying to position their submarines to re-form the barrier they had lost -- the barrier upon which the convoys depended. The Air Force and Navy would soon try to rearrange fighter coverage to harass the Backfires, but those measures were all stopgaps. Until Iceland was fully neutralized, or better yet re-taken, the Third Battle of the North Atlantic hung in an uneven balance.

-- Teejay

If you do come to the US, I hope you end up out here. I live in an area that's safe enough that I can let my 13-year-old son go biking on his own for 2-3 hours. My apartment complex has many families with kids, so you would have other parents around and your son would have potential friends right there.

And yes, that quote was from Red Storm Rising.

-- Teejay

Sorry the guy turned out to be such a jerk. Well, there will be other opportunities.

-- Teejay

What am I about to start re-reading? Chapters in order: The Idea -- Preparation -- The Start -- Chumbi -- Tibet -- The Approach to Everest -- The Way Discovered -- The North Col -- Preparing Again -- The Second Start --The Attack -- The Oxygen Attempt -- An Avalanche -- High-Altitude Life -- The Chief Result -- The Use of Oxygen -- Other Conclusions -- The Third Expedition -- Darjeeling to Rongbuk -- Up the Glacier -- Disaster Retrieved -- The Rescue -- The Assault -- The Climax -- Mallory and Irvine -- Odell -- The Great Enigma -- Honor -- The Doomed Mountain

-- Teejay

Difference Between Heaven and Hell

In Heaven, cops are Swiss, chefs Italian, lovers French, and things are done with British courtesy and German efficiency.

In Hell, there's just a few small changes... cops are German, chefs British, lovers Swiss, and things are done with French courtesy and Italian efficiency.

-- Teejay

I'm glad you're all right. I've missed you, but I figure you've got a life to live and can't be on a website all the time.

And no, I don't use discord.

-- Teejay

If you'd like to let me know the "other places" you're working on your stuff, I would not object. *grin*

-- Teejay

Fredhot16

What I was pissed off about? Eh, just the same old smutty crap on this website. I still find it contemptible but...I really can't muster any energy to gripe in the discussions. I just...there's just so much. So much crap and all my edits...I can't change a damn thing because I don't want to change it, I want to burn it to the ground and start again. That's my problem, the premises of these things.

So. How have you been?

P.S Did you write "Nudisma Terena"?---Fredhot16 18:31 (Louisiana Time), 19 May 2017

Mind if I make a few suggestions for this whole "boinking" thing? (Also, why "boink"? Why'd you choose that as a word?)

1. Truth and Boink?

2. Freeze Boink?

3. Simon Says: Boink Edition?

4. Boink Poker?

Just spitballing.

P.S Is this story a real story for you or just part of your rants? And, yes, I get the joke.--Fredhot16 17:48 (Louisiana Time), 9 June 2017

How do you think a "sexual horror" story would go?--Fredhot16 12:41 (Louisiana Time), 12 June 2017

That was one of my first thoughts: rape. But I was wondering if there are more ways to show "sexual horror" then that, more dimensions. Something more...subtle.

Why these thoughts? Well, I'm just taking genres and mixing them together, seeing what comes out.

P.S Can you help me with some category help? I'm trying to do multiple categories for my "Dungeons and Dragons" review like this:

The Review- Adult Stories| Dungeons and Dragons| Female Elf Paladin Review. --Fredhot16 12:31 (Louisiana Time), 13 June 2017

You know what? Go ahead, rewrite the scene with the spirit you described, just have her SHOW it! Have her SHOW a fucking emotion! Have some actual dialogue! I'm not asking for a total change, I'm asking for this page to actually look like a fucking book! "Present the page better" is all I'm asking. And "make it less skeevy", if that's possible.

And, for the love of god, DESCRIBE THINGS! PLEASE, I BEG OF YOU, DESCRIBE EVERYTHING! I DON'T CARE WHAT IT IS, JUST DESCRIBE IT SO PEOPLE CAN HAVE A CLEAR IDEA OF WHAT THEY'RE SUPPOSED TO BE READING! Hell, I give you permission to describe the protagonist's breasts, just give the reader SOMETHING!

Oh, and you can just ignore the whole "half-elf" thing. I don't expect you to know about them and for this instance, you don't need to. --Fredhot16 9:42 (Louisiana Time), 15 June 2017

The groping and pawing happened at the clothing shop, erm, tent.

Also, yes, I know the rest of the story makes no sense. You know my pain. --Fredhot16 17:52 (Louisiana Time), 19 June 2017

...You have automatically lost all respect from me with those lyrics.--Fredhot16 11:13 (Louisiana Time), 19 July 2017

Erm, sorry. I've been sorta busy and I kinda forgot about it. I'll try to give you my proper opinion soon but I can't do it right now because I slept pretty late last night, about 3 A.M. Going to say one thing: your page was a major fucking improvement over the last one. There was actual dialogue for fuck's sake!

You know, there's something weird about the stories on that CYOS. I don't think a lot of it was made by people who were thinking "Forgotten Realms" when they made it. It feels like generic D&D stuff with some vanilla D&D info thrown in. The mentions of Pelor, for one thing. While Pelor, the god of the Sun, is a D&D god, he's not a Forgotten Realms god. The closest there may be to Pelor is Lathander, the Morninglord, the God of spring, dawn, etc.

Edit: Huh. There's actually a table in Forgotten Realms Campaign Setting handbook that tells you which D&D deities to convert to Forgotten Realms deities. Pelor, for example, can be switched with Lathander, Ilmater, the Broken God, or Torm, the Loyal Fury.

-Fredhot16 21:27 (Louisiana Time), 13 August 2017

If you aren't busy, perhaps you could do the red links for this page: D&D: FHR: The cloaked merchant : "Let's see how far you are willing to go...."

Try it like you did for the bard page.--Fredhot16 14:12 (Louisiana Time), 14 August 2017

Going to stay away from this site for some time. Planning on sitting down and reading the handbooks for Forgotten Realms. There's a lot of interesting lore and story ideas in this stuff. And it's all on the internet, free to download! Oh, and to answer your question:

A. For D&D: Well, she can't really do it because she only has a part of the whole map right now. She needs all of them. And there's the guards behind him. Also, that creep doesn't own the shop. I think the shop owner went home for the night or something.

To be honest, I was thinking of something like that. You know, the protag somehow getting it away from the creep without putting out any more "goods". The best bet would be to get him alone and then...you know.

B. "Don't have sex!" Are you sure you weren't inspired by the manga "My Balls" where a man has to not ejaculate for a whole month to save the world? Yes, this is real. I am NOT kidding. Also, go ahead. That will be a breath of fresh air.

C. Go wild.--Fredhot16 00:18 (Louisiana Time), 15 August 2017

No. I'm not really back.

I'll be blunt: I came here a couple of years ago in 2012 because I was enamored with Choose Your Own Adventures and I thought I could practice my writing here.

However, I stopped going back here a year ago because of one question: what is the point of practicing writing here if nobody will read it or give their opinions?

Not only are there few regulars here but considering the absolute plethora of smut here, what chance is there for anybody to read anything I've crafted or even give their opinion? Practice is worthless if nobody will point to the problems in your writing.

I might contribute to random Choose Your Own Adventures if I'm bored or tempted to go back to old habits of editing on here but I don't think I'll be writing anything of my own here.

If anybody wants to talk to me, though, I'll be here for that and respond.

Heck, if you want me to look at your work for suggestions or any editing ideas, I'm always up for that.

Edit: Also, there's a Choose Your Own Adventure called "Katarina's Adventures" whose original writer seems to have disappeared so maybe you could take a look and see if you can do anything with it?

So. This is awkward and not just because it's been (checks last communication) holy shit, half a decade? Anyway, yeah, it's been a long time since we've talked.

Am I actually back this time? For the foreseeable future, yes. I do have a collaboration I want to contribute to here and that old Dungeons and Dragons CYOA to fill in with my own idea for an adventure, not just bitterly edit it. Yeah, I really was contemptuous, wasn't I?

I actually came back today to talk about a way I don't know if you're familiar with Yahtzee, a certain vulgar but hilarious reviewer on The Escapist, but he actually has longer, more drawn-out reviews called "Extra Punctuation". In one of his articles, Yahtzee talks about how he'd prefer "Heavy Rain", he would have preferred for the plot twist of the killer's identity to change depending on the decisions you made, much like Silent Hill 2 and Silent Hill: Silent Memories, whose endings changed on subtle actions that implied a different mindset like running around with frequently low health making it more likely to get the suicide ending and such.]] He's very fond of getting the gameplay to interact with and work with the story, changing and painting in the context.

I think I may have complained before about seeing this sort of thing because a CYOA is about the choices you, the main character, makes, not the choices you make the other characters make like "The man gropes you" or "The man just stares at you". Here, I think it's different because it's not so much based on making other character's choices so much as the choice you make influencing the tone and direction the story takes before it's "fully-baked", so to speak.

Like, if you choose "glare at the person at the door", the person will glare back or shoot some snide remark and the story will inform you that it's an old rival that usually tries to undermine you. If you choose "say hello in a friendly tone", they'd say hello back and shoot the shit with you, informing you that they're a casual acquittance. Another choice for signifying if they're a friend and another if they're a lover.

Or, as he put it, "the idea was, you had to make 6 choices, and each choice branched the story. The player was given as little detail as possible at the start, and each choice of action they made added detail that altered the context of the events. For example, you started off in a hospital reception area, and the first choice was whether to sit down and wait or walk down the hall to explore further. Choosing to sit implied that the player character understood the hospital to be functional, and would lead to the stories involving visiting sick friends, seeing a doctor or identifying a corpse. Choosing to explore implied that the player character was more confused about their situation, which led to stories in which the hospital was abandoned or closed, and you were there for various illicit reasons."

It's an interesting idea for how to experiment with CYOAs while still making the reader's choices the center of the piece and I'm pretty sure I saw something like that here, one choice going for a romantic tone, one for a dangerous "you were just kidnapped" tone.

...By the way, your shower is fixed, right? I remember you talking about how unsexy and rude the fixers were, not like the fixers in porn.

--Fredhot16 01:21 (Central Time), 03 December 2021

I'll admit...some of these things also turn my stomach. I once stumbled onto a page in "The Devil's Daughter" and found a scene where "garden slaves" have to lick a woman's ass clean and it described how there was wet shit still in her ass and...

I tapped out. I could not even try. I can stomach tons and tons of poorly-written smut but going into gross-out territory like this isn't worth the effort.

Sorry to hear that you don't come by anymore but go ahead, you do you. Would it be too much to ask which Discord your writings are put on?

I actually do find that way of writing Yahtzee described interesting enough to try one day. But, yanno, if ain't today...

That said, if I wanted to get your opinions on something I wrote here, would you still be willing to take a look?

--Fredhot16 01:21 (Central Time), 08 December 2021

Enier

TQ for the tips.

Also, you do not need to have a template. That was put there so you know how to make one if you want. It is not required, and is not useful if your story isn't going to use it. If it is, well, you can replace the template, but they are hard to figure out. Let me know if you need help on it.Reply:

Remind me what a template is?

Can you do combination linking?

Help with the status bar! I need an explanation clearer than the tutorial!

I want something like the table in the tutorial, but blue. can u send me the code?

TQ. How do I make A Wiki?

Platypus

Thank you for your efforts thus far. I appreciate your help, and you have my sympathy for your loss of brain cells. At some point, when I'm feeling brave, I'll tackle what remains. Hot and Horny was most written by writers that I pushed away from Smutty Sex Romp and Rampage, and much of it is pretty cringe worthy.

"I'm about to pop an egg." There should be a collection of truly, awfully bad lines somewhere. That turkey deserves special recognition for sheer awfulness. --Platypus 12:42, 14 June 2017 (UTC)

Thanks for the heads up. And good job messing with the spammer's spammy spam! --Platypus 11:54, 9 August 2017 (UTC)

Wolfskin75

did this work? --Wolfskin75


I am thinking of a several character story... And like your too graphic. I wanted to incorporate pictures. Non that have copyright but to give the reader a idea of what i am visualizing. I am trying to find a way to pitch my ideas without it being public... But i dont use anom email so...yeah. I think however, i should work on figuring out the mechanics before i start writing. And i invite you to add to were you see fit. I like your stories. (i read some.) -- Wolfskin75


Well, my idea goes like this. I want to write a two prong story: about a neighborhood of deviants that a Mom and her daughter move into. They are fresh from a divorce from a wealthy guy so he buys them a House in this neighborhood. I want to Mom to become some Wife's pet (romance themed but lots of kink Dom/sub exploring fetishes... mostly my own) the choices will be who you sub too. Whether it be a loving woman or a cruel pain master. and at the same time her daughter (totally cute emo girl) will become a Dom to one of the daughters of the town. Of course they will be men in it.. but only as a side story.. (men have no place in my fantasy world) Of course.... this is basically how the neighborhood works... they were moved there on purpose. I love reading stories where two girls find a comfortable love full of their kinks . yes... no? any tips or whatever would be nice.

Wolfskin75


Okay, I have corrected some things. I apologize for some misunderstandings. I guess I am looking for more of a mentor? someone to bounce ideas off of. None of the ideas I have are set in stone and I am still trying to even figure out how to get started. I am just more looking for some sort of communication and would like someone to collaborate with eventually. I am new here and I am just testing the waters. To see what is up.

Wolfskin75


Thank you. I am currently working on adding things to "Mom can be bad". I am going to try and class up the story a bit and learn the formatting. I have a lot to think about. You're right, some of the stories are down right stupid. you're also right and that I am more about the innocence rather than the age.. Let me digest what you wrote, it was all good .. and I very glad for your time. thank you again.

Wolfskin75

You said a couple things that I can relate. The reason I want to write this story is that, I just to chat with a bunch of real life little's. It was SOOOO great and they where all so full of life and happiness. Of course things got drama filled at times but It was something I could "feel". I wanted to be a protector. Not someone who would punish and then After care.. but ALL After care. and since I am married so I fantasize ... ALOT. but Like I said, it's not normal, (like most things I am involved in) for instance... I read rampage. and EVERY Ending I got to was a happily ever after ending. I think that say a lot of about my mind where I want to go with this story of mind. The strong protecting the weak. Someone protecting those who would be prey and letting them live in happiness. Of course there is sex and kinkiness but it's the best of all environments. safety and trust. this is more where I want my stories to go. Like I said. I am going to press on with adding to "Mom can be bad" not only warming up my writing skills and figuring out the format (like if you make one choice it effects the rest of the story sort of thing) and See what I can do. I am dealing with Lisa, 40 married and Tera 50 divorced. ( is there some sort of forum for these type of formatting questions?)


Wolfskin75


I am trying to add a page a day and see what happens. I have already ended my first thread. :)

Wolfskin75


nice, can I use that?

Wolfskin75


Very nice. I am loving making these little snippets. Even though i fantasize about it, I am not sure if i got the feeling right. Since i am not female all i have to go on is other writings and since i don't have a book length to write and develop these feelings. I don't know what its like for a straight "married" woman to get picked up at a bar by another and go with it. I will use your snippets. But i invite you to add the story. :) I am also having fun making most of the men villians.

Wolfskin75


Again. Thank you. I have a lot of editing to do amd make it all says in line. Thank you thank you. To know you are reading what i am writing...yay. I need to become a stronger writer. I am actually having some issues. 1. How do you slog through the middle stuff? I am having troubles feeling overwhelmed with stuff that has to hhappen to make the story ...er semi good rather than just the dirty parts. Do i make sense?

Wolfskin75

For instance, I was thinking about making it back to the house. I have several story points where things need to happen before the Preg story gets to the house. I add some sex parts, things in fact I would love to do. What I am having trouble with is trying to get the notion that She might not be totally okay with this and that when she gets to house she is like "what the fuck am I doing." or maybe have that moment in the car.

I really need to spend some time really trying to catch up on things.

Not every woman has DD or 38g breast, not every woman shaves ( and thank god for that.) all the woman in my stories don't have huge boobs. I fantasize about smaller breast and I am not afraid to write about pubic hair.

Wolfskin75


I am trying to get more from you... To hopefully get you to boil over into a story. :) whatever you want to tell me...please be sure i am "listening". ;).

Also i have been busy lately so i haven't had much time to respond.

Wolfskin75


I love the way you write. You include little things.. little things are always the important things right. and yes.. both of those things were great! I am going on vacation for a week. I will be back though. Hopefully I will some updated work for you

Wolfskin75


I have wrote alot ... Cant wait to post it. How have you been?

Wolfskin75


I would ask you a favor. I love what you wrote by the way... Totally totally enjoyed it. *wink* again and again...

I need you to write a lesbian sex scene between Tera and Beth. I am adding a scene...after the dancing scene she goes home drunk with Beth..could you write the sex...can be bleary and nebulous...but it would be amazing if you would...?

Wolfskin75

Will do. I will also read the links you sent. How would you like me to get that to you? Email or post it here? I will just living out a fantasy :)


Wolfskin75


Tera, 50 mother of two, I envision her being bi curious her whole life just stuck in a rut. Blond hair, dyed. To cover the grey.. Beth a mid 20's redhead in college. Loves older woman. And likes the older woman sort of a mother like girlfriend..Knows Tera ( knows her daughter and is someone's daughter that Tera will know. Tera is of the generation that doesnt shave..pubic hair i mean. Beth is smaller chested then Tera. Normal breast Tera's would slightly not perky. Beth is the predator in this case...i want to have some regert in the morning but enough to force her hand in a choice. So far she has moved slowly but she has moved forward... Thats the direction i want to head. Plus... I havent posted the next post which will go in front of this...so you have a little time


I am trying not to make something typical.

Wolfskin75


I find myself wanting to add on to other stories... But alot of them have elements i dont like and really cant further the story the way i would like with the cast as it is. I could just go and rewrite the story...but i would rather contact the author and make the change.....sigh....or just make one of my own i guess.

Wolfskin75


back home and posting again. :) figured it all out.

Wolfskin75


Any details you can provide about that...I am more than happy to read...re read .. Have my own activities..then re read again. I would like to know...especially the tying part...

Wolfskin75

I feel so lazy...i havent been writing..bad me..lol

Wolfskin75

I have a question. Do you understand my writing? Like if you had to critque it. What would be a couple of good things i could work on?

Wolfskin75 23:55, 14 July 2017 (UTC)

I added two or three more pages last night. I really need have a edit day. If I could crave out a day to JUST EDIT that would be great. *sigh*

Wolfskin75 14:35, 15 July 2017 (UTC)


Wanted to touch base. How are you doing?

Wolfskin75 20:10, 16 July 2017 (UTC)


Thank you..its awesome. It was perfect and I..thank you for your time. Family def comes first

Wolfskin75 14:31, 18 July 2017 (UTC)


I have a question for you? it's kind of private. how can I ask you?

Wolfskin75 00:23, 19 July 2017 (UTC)


I have been really tired lately, I plan to work on this weekend. I am not giving up. Life has just gotten busy, I still love the writing and I still crave the interaction. Thank you for your time and effort. I look really good, and I will get my head screwed on right promise.

Wolfskin75 15:23, 20 July 2017 (UTC)

I was finally able to read it. I am changing it all to first person. since I think, that how I wrote the rest of the story? I wasn't sure so I have copies of both just in case. I will be working on the rest of it and that's what I want to buzz you about. I think it would be easier. to use discord for our edits? and I wanted to buzz you my Discord info. As you can leave something there for days and I can see it there when every I log on. I was just thinking about it. Plus we maintain our safety and secure. :) HIGHLY HIGHLY sexy stuff!!! thank you.

Wolfskin75 07:25, 21 July 2017 (UTC)


So far it's golden. I find myself really enjoying the foreplay as I usually do in real life. As a kid in middle school I taught myself through many a bad movie to listen to a woman's body and learn how to please her without "intercourse". I LOVE FOREPLAY. and if that doesn't sound true or read true, there is no point finish the chapter. Anyway I think what you wrote actually feels real rather than what you said to the notes where the they get together and he whips his cock out stuffs it in.. and she lOVES IT! and have five orgasm. THEN, everyone thinks it's a great scene but nothing happened. Furthermore, one of the parts I find very disrespectful is that they're always written where the women is satisfied beyond the shadow of a doubt, multiple orgasm and after one time having sex, she goes from Virgin she goes to ultra slut. It's just stupid!!! In this story, I wanted to communicate softness and the importance of trust and the sexiness of vulnerability and how that plays into arousal.

as for this conversation. I would say without a DOUBT... I look forward to our interactions and AND I don't know why I hold as much as I do. but... that's a deeper discussion.

Wolfskin75 12:52, 21 July 2017 (UTC)

What do you need from me? I am feeling like I have slacked off.. TOTALLY hot scene by the way... :P

What do you use to keep track of the story? I am starting to see the limitations of your basic document editor. I losing my place pretty easily. :(

Wolfskin75 21:42, 23 July 2017 (UTC)


Did you add something? I couldnt make up what was updated?

Wolfskin75 21:17, 24 July 2017 (UTC)

Out of the three moms can be bad stories i started. Two of them end up in the same kink. Which is good but i dont want to just write the same thing. Yes i am interested in that kink and those types if relationships but... You have to be anle to expand lol. I am trying to write it from all sides. But i feel like I enjoy writing it why not...but also since I am learning....i am having a bad day and writing porn and reading your hot writing makes me happy.

Wolfskin75 23:15, 24 July 2017 (UTC)


I finally found a shit load of notes you have been leaving. I have starting up stories and just letting it go on. I would have loved to competed in that competition!!! I would have written some awesome stuff. Cream worthy if I do say. Use to take the train to work everyday.. so I had a lot of time to think about this particular thing.

What is my style? I am would have to say I am trained beginner and that my style is "evolving" I am not giving up and I will read all that you have left for me. PROMISE. I am going on vacation again so I hope to have some good pages come of this vacation. I just don't want to be a one trick pony you know.

Wolfskin75 06:34, 26 July 2017 (UTC)

Thank you for that. I am going to use it but I had to create my own account and I would have to invite you to work with me. SOOOO if you want to find out who I am really am.. cause I don't have fake email addresses.... Let me know. :) I would be more than happy to invite you onboard. :)

Wolfskin75 07:19, 26 July 2017 (UTC)

I have gotten the thingy up. I will write some more and invite when i get back form vacation. But a couple of beers and a couple hours to write do wonders?

Wolfskin75 23:24, 27 July 2017 (UTC)

I invited you. I am reading your blog. and I want to work with you on "Maso me" whenever you think I can fit. :) anyway, I will have more soon.

Wolfskin75 22:16, 29 July 2017 (UTC)


Okay.. I am going to have to make pages for us. (actually makes me happy) so we can keep better track of our various creative projects. I will have to figure how to do that and then we can add to those.

Wolfskin75 00:20, 30 July 2017 (UTC)

did you get the invite?

Wolfskin75 16:32, 31 July 2017 (UTC)

Let me work on that. no idea why. I am going back through and editing. I was reading through maso me. I loved the part where they were using her in class. HOT!

Wolfskin75 04:40, 1 August 2017 (UTC)

I did figure out how to get you full access. Try it and let me know.

Wolfskin75 04:58, 1 August 2017 (UTC)

Okay. I wanted to right something about a like humiliation type scene that is being filmed, something new for the person involved but not as horrifying as she thought. (i.e. the experience as being used as a sex guide in the "training" part.) I am not sure if that would fit into that story. or even if you wanted it to be in it at all. just was really excited by the training part was all. doing things in front of people you don't know or do know. wanted to add that in. I would add that in to one of the chapters of my story as well. It was hot

Wolfskin75 15:45, 2 August 2017 (UTC)


So, I started my own story.. YAY. I will work on Lisa's story tonight (or this weekend at least) I added the beginning of the sex scenes with Tera and Beth and introduced a new character or at least named her. (Tera's friend Marla.) Anything else you would like me to do or help you with?

Wolfskin75 18:44, 4 August 2017 (UTC)


I like it. you are a really good writer and story teller. I like the way you make the story come together. I am trying to work on my story telling abilities or at least communicating them in written form. I have had writers block as of late. I have plenty of "ideas" but seemingly no time and not a lot motivation. I have been reading a bit lately, and really thinking about what kind of stories I want to tell. It's good and I am really I guess picking out a lot of the crap that I don't want in my stories that traditionally make it into porn. Love your writing, and I love reading. It's some of the most erotic writing I have read.

Wolfskin75 14:32, 10 August 2017 (UTC)


I have block. and I feel like I need to keep writing though. I want to stay productive. :( i am going to a convention next week maybe that will help me clear my head up. YAY.

Wolfskin75 15:30, 11 August 2017 (UTC)

I've been on the convention for a couple days. I have been trying to write a come up with something to write but not really pushing myself. Have you been?

Wolfskin75 12:17, 20 August 2017 (UTC)


I am back. SAME HERE!!! I have been needing a release. So I have been thinking of someone to write it out. nope... then I thought Stranger orgy. Which, seemed like a good idea. Until I realized I was a loser and could no way shape or form find one. My wife walked around the house this morning with just underwear. I want to so many things,even in front of the kids. didn't care. but...nothing. So, back to writing. Let's write something dirty ??? Stranger orgy story, two character plan to meet there not knowing what is going happen.

Wolfskin75 13:53, 22 August 2017 (UTC)

Alright, time for a rant. I am horny as all get out. Frustrated as hell. Nothing I do seems to help, it only slides me further this big swamp i am stuck in. I know kind of what I want. I have the ideas but I don't see a path to get there. But I know i don't have it all together and I have vauge ideas of what success looks like and I know a lot of time will be in the middle. Am I making sense? I enjoyed my time away at the convention but it seemed like i wasted a whole bunch of time... But it would have been only to stare at a blinking cursor on a screen. I read other erotica... It all sucks but at least they wrote it. I love yours. Specially the one with the girl who goes into the adult book store (have i mentioned that before) i am just stressed and feeling like i am wasting time. I dont want to get up in the morning... But i get up to check for your messages. Everything is crowding me in. I just am aimless. I read some stories about mind control. I find that cool...but all the stories seem to fall apart. Like they lose steam and rely on tropes. Bad ones. What would you do if you had mind control? I know I know for a fact I would use it to get people to admit stuff they are thinking but never say. Aaaaaarrrgghhh am I making sense?

Wolfskin75 14:32, 22 August 2017 (UTC)


YOu and I are in the same boat. Like, THE EXACT same boat.

Wolfskin75 06:20, 23 August 2017 (UTC)


So I am crawling out of skin. I have written a couple of pages here and there but not edited. I need to find a editor. I am going to go and make more sense of my outlines. I have let them go.

Wolfskin75 00:52, 27 August 2017 (UTC)


AAAARRRGGGGGHH. Okay. I have a new schedule to deal with now so I am dealing with that not so good. I would love to help you out on whatever you need help with. I have added anything in a couple days. but I am still thinking. :) How are you.

Wolfskin75 06:08, 31 August 2017 (UTC)


I hope you get better. I know how that can be. with kid's bringing home the sickness. do I have a story for you. LOL

Wolfskin75 14:55, 11 September 2017 (UTC)


Okay so, I have writing story on a forum (kind of like a back and forth.) and last night I wrote this part that literally broke the story. I was told, the other writer was in fact upset by the part so much that they couldn't bear to write any more. (and you are going to have to believe me on this.) I was really happy that I wrote something that caused an emotional impact. but now... since I am "not me" and this is something I would never share in public as me or anyone else. Which is fine but the point of the matter is, is that I have it in me. I lacking the basics to funnel it through. I am getting lessons on how to write better. (like organizational tips and grammar so on) but I sense that I am inspiring hope. :( I guess the point is that I have like something there. It's going to take a lot of work to dig to it. (make sense?)

Wolfskin75 22:25, 11 September 2017 (UTC)


Get better, I miss you.

Wolfskin75 06:21, 14 September 2017 (UTC)

Alison

If I delete the link in all family-friendly stories, will the story also be deleted?

What happened to all those stories on All Family-Friendly Stories? Why is there only 2?

Grazie

Thanks lol. This is my first story so I'm still getting the hang of all the coding and friends.

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