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Apology accepted. Now that I know you want to be the exclusive author, I'll wait until the day when [if?] you make it open to the public before adding more pages.
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Welcome back! Long time no see! -- [[User: Teejay|Teejay]]
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BTW, great story so far... kind of similar in tone to the story "Rescue"...
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== Young woman vs. girl ==
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While I can't speak for Platypus, other pages he has 'fixed' still use the term 'girl', like [[Dick the teen and pump more juice into her]] and [[Fuck the teen's virgin pussy]]. There's even stuff like [[Ask Alexis for a blowjob]] which feels like it's just kissing the edge of RobKohr's commandment. Seems like the rule (in practice) is that so long as specific ages or age ranges are not mentioned, everything's good. I think Rob was probably just trying to avoid something like the Red Rose Stories obscenity case (see en.wikipedia.org/wiki/United_States_obscenity_law#Obscene_texts). Not sure if that was the particular case he was looking at (since it was a decade old when Rob added the rule) or if he just got paranoid (because 2015 was a weird time to start censoring content. I mean, did something relevant happen that year?).
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== Liking the style. ==
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It feels strange to be considering the legal consequences of a fictional woman's age (Ma'am, I'll need to see your fictional ID before you can enter this fictional bar. You ''left it at home''? Likely story). 
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Hey. Just dropping in to say that I've looked through War Pigs and Danse Macabre and love what you did with the status bar. Very clever.  --[[User:TheElderOnes|TheElderOnes]] 12:32, 26 July 2011 (UTC)
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--[[User:Pickles|Pickles]] ([[User talk:Pickles|Talk]]) 19:11, 6 August 2020 (UTC)
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Yeah, I recognize Walter and Carol in Danse Macabre, Jack Black and Zooey Deschanel. --[[User:TheElderOnes|TheElderOnes]] 07:56, 29 July 2011 (UTC)
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: Thanks for the information. I don't know what caused the censorship either - maybe it was just a better late than never response. I agree that as long as it's established that the character isn't underage, there shouldn't be any problems.
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: I'm of the opinion that there shouldn't be any censorship because this is all fiction. It's like having an adult actress play an underage character - it's all a performance. Similar thing with cartoons or comics depicting this material; the artists get away with it because it's not real. But while I agree that it's strange to be taking this into consideration and disagree with the censorship, I don't mind being better safe than sorry.
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=Deaths=
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: What I find funny about the scenario I referenced is while the preteen was changed to become a 19-year-old, nothing else changed. This includes the character still not having developed breasts and wearing a padded bra. It's even twice mentioned now on [[Blue diamond-shaped pills]] and [[Strip the pigtailed teen]] that she might be lying about being 19. Her first appearance in [[Flee out the nearest window]] says only "maybe" she's a woman. And this can't be changed because the point of the [[Pink lozenges]] scenario is she starts developing breasts. But I think the scenario path I was talking to Platypus about makes more sense with a 19-year-old because her level of profanity feels out of place with a preteen. [[User:AgentVincent|AgentVincent]] 20:47, 6 August 2020 (UTC)
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Thank you for your contributions to my story. Even though you got me killed and zombified, it was still funny. --[[User:TyCampbell|TyCampbell]]
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''Something'' must have happened, because RobKohr hit the panic button very hard, and quite abruptly.  I don't know what that something might have been, but his concerns are the site's concerns.  Does it seems foolish?  Not to the judicial system, it doesn't.  If the courts are going to be serious about these things, then we'd better be serious too.
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I think so. I'm pretty sure that's a song, but I've never heard it.
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That being said, is it necessary to change 'girl' to 'young woman'?  Strictly speaking, no, but 'young woman' does make it clearer for people using the 'random page' button that the character in question is of age, even if she's described as being physically under-developed.  Has 'girl' been changed to 'young woman' in a consistent fashion?  No.  The up-aging of characters has been done in a piecemeal, sporadic fashion.  Smutty Sex Romp and Rampage are huge, sprawling stories.  I wouldn't be surprised if there are still threads left with underage characters. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 21:35, 6 August 2020 (UTC)
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Haha, that's genious. Also, I dug up Tarman. You'd think he'd at least thank me before devouring my brain. :(
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: I fully support the decision to remove underage content, which is why I'm not restoring any "preteen" references since that explicitly establishes her as underage. And I understand why "young woman" makes it clearer that the character isn't underage. Still, I feel as long as we avoid explicit references to characters being underage and explicitly establish these characters as legal age, more ambiguous phrases aren't a factor. "Young woman" has and can be used in reference to underage females and "girl" is often used in reference to females over 18. We're still in the legal right - anyone who doubts the character's age can scroll back to where the age is established and the judicial system has no case against us. You are correct that there are still threads left with underage characters and not even with those stories - [[Hot and Horny]] hasn't removed all reference of Miranda being 6. That's the biggest issue. When it comes to "girl" vs. "young woman", I just find that "girl" sounds better with the tone because like I mentioned, "young woman" seems too formal. [[User:AgentVincent|AgentVincent]] 22:27, 6 August 2020 (UTC)
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I was trying to come up with an ending for all those demonic spirits -- I didn't like having them all in the same place like that -- but your ending beats what I had in mind. I started to write where a celestial army wiped them out but didn't like the way it was heading. I like your ending better. (In reference to [[Stay still and let Price have her way with you]] page) -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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=Don't Be Discouraged!=
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I get writer's block at times too. Just don't think about it, maybe make a few contributions in a different story or just read everyone else's work for a day or two and don't try to write. Your creative juices will come back soon enough. I know sometimes the two us get our creative juices conflicted but I think the end product after we work it out has turned out fantastic so far. I really like your writing! -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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== I Hope you feel slightly special! ==
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Because you're story War Pigs, it's the first story every to be reviewed in the review section! Please don't kill me about the few bad things I've said on your story. If you want, maybe you could make a review too? It's fine if you say no, but it would be nice if there was someone to help me start up the new section. Anyway, read the review [[Review: War Pigs|here]]. Hope you enjoy! -- [[User:Heyoeveryone|Heyoeveryone]] 4 October 2011
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I'm so sorry about that XD. It was my first review and I still wasn't sure how I should set them up, but now that I've written a few more, I know what to do now. Good luck on finishing War Pigs! Though, I think you should work on William's story, as he is the main character and the whole reason the events happened. -- [[User:Heyoeveryone|Heyoeveryone]] 5 October 2011
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Maybe somehow get William to ''accidentally'' injure or kill one of Michael's friends when they first confront each other, which would cause Michael to go into a never ending rage against William. Then they would face off in an epic battle of sorts, where William is trying to calm him down and continuously saying sorry. I don't know, but maybe you could use that idea perhaps? --[[User:Heyoeveryone|Heyoeveryone]] 8 October 2011
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I am very interested! If you do post it up, make sure you don't write every single plot twist, I don't want to know everything and kill the fun for me. And thank you in advance. --[[User:Heyoeveryone|Heyoeveryone]] 8 October 2011
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Well I got William and Michaels bit mostly right, and the figure that arrives when Rebecca and Vincent are fighting, could it be Karen?  As for the endings being named after songs, that's a very good concept, perhaps you should make an achievement idea of sorts when you get into those endings. Oh and were those songs made after 2000 or before? Since I can't seem to remember many songs before then. --[[User:Heyoeveryone|Heyoeveryone]] 14 October 2011
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Hmm.. That's a toughie. Karen should have the lowest chance of survival. As I think she is the weakest of all the characters. William and Michael should both have a 50/50 chance of dying. Since they both face off against each other in the end and the reader has the decision of either letting Michael or William die, or perhaps both? Make sure that Michael just go insane with rage, a good way to show this is to have him shoot a random civilian while going after William and he would not give a damn, not even to look back. If you can, make a second battle in say a closed in building or in an underground floor. Then you can have William choose to 'shut down the power'. I don't know the exact abilities William to do, so I'll let you take it from there.
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As for Vincent and Rebecca, perhaps get Vincent to bring reinforcements against her, but Rebecca 'can' kill them all with some sort of epic weapon like a minigun. Then just when she finishes off the last guy, Vincent goes for a stab in the back with his Rapier. This can lead to Rebecca dying, but she can also dodge the shot and kick it off his hand. They then go into hand to hand combat. I don't know about how it should end.
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Each character should each have a 'happy', 'average' and 'bad' ending.
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Hey, do you mind if you have a read through of my story I've been working on for a while. It's called [[Remember]], it's about a guy who's forgotten who he is, and has found himself locked inside a room. I'd just like some honest feedback and anything that I should fix up or perhaps add. --[[User:Heyoeveryone|Heyoeveryone]] 17 October 2011
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== [[War Pigs]]...Toppling ==
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I thought War Pigs had been on the featured for some time so I removed it. No hard feelings? In any case, the story was great although I kept finding redlinks, it was quite annoying, although I have a story like that. Well, actually that was to allow people to add on.I'm ironing out spelling mistakes in all the stories , alphabetically, but since yours is a W it'lll take a long time to get there. [[The Kitty in the Window]] will be a nightmare to edit in itself. *Shudder* Besides, your story won't be in FF after the Warning and all. Hope to see how the story turns out. If two more stories and three months pass it can go up again!:)
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(I'm kind of new, so haven't actually completed anything yet. Close to finishing [[Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows]]. Added a weird twist.)
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--[[User:Snowball|Snowball]] 16:10, 22 October 2011 (UTC)
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Current revision as of 22:27, 6 August 2020

Welcome back! Long time no see! -- Teejay

Young woman vs. girl

While I can't speak for Platypus, other pages he has 'fixed' still use the term 'girl', like Dick the teen and pump more juice into her and Fuck the teen's virgin pussy. There's even stuff like Ask Alexis for a blowjob which feels like it's just kissing the edge of RobKohr's commandment. Seems like the rule (in practice) is that so long as specific ages or age ranges are not mentioned, everything's good. I think Rob was probably just trying to avoid something like the Red Rose Stories obscenity case (see en.wikipedia.org/wiki/United_States_obscenity_law#Obscene_texts). Not sure if that was the particular case he was looking at (since it was a decade old when Rob added the rule) or if he just got paranoid (because 2015 was a weird time to start censoring content. I mean, did something relevant happen that year?).

It feels strange to be considering the legal consequences of a fictional woman's age (Ma'am, I'll need to see your fictional ID before you can enter this fictional bar. You left it at home? Likely story).

--Pickles (Talk) 19:11, 6 August 2020 (UTC)

Thanks for the information. I don't know what caused the censorship either - maybe it was just a better late than never response. I agree that as long as it's established that the character isn't underage, there shouldn't be any problems.
I'm of the opinion that there shouldn't be any censorship because this is all fiction. It's like having an adult actress play an underage character - it's all a performance. Similar thing with cartoons or comics depicting this material; the artists get away with it because it's not real. But while I agree that it's strange to be taking this into consideration and disagree with the censorship, I don't mind being better safe than sorry.
What I find funny about the scenario I referenced is while the preteen was changed to become a 19-year-old, nothing else changed. This includes the character still not having developed breasts and wearing a padded bra. It's even twice mentioned now on Blue diamond-shaped pills and Strip the pigtailed teen that she might be lying about being 19. Her first appearance in Flee out the nearest window says only "maybe" she's a woman. And this can't be changed because the point of the Pink lozenges scenario is she starts developing breasts. But I think the scenario path I was talking to Platypus about makes more sense with a 19-year-old because her level of profanity feels out of place with a preteen. AgentVincent 20:47, 6 August 2020 (UTC)

Something must have happened, because RobKohr hit the panic button very hard, and quite abruptly. I don't know what that something might have been, but his concerns are the site's concerns. Does it seems foolish? Not to the judicial system, it doesn't. If the courts are going to be serious about these things, then we'd better be serious too.

That being said, is it necessary to change 'girl' to 'young woman'? Strictly speaking, no, but 'young woman' does make it clearer for people using the 'random page' button that the character in question is of age, even if she's described as being physically under-developed. Has 'girl' been changed to 'young woman' in a consistent fashion? No. The up-aging of characters has been done in a piecemeal, sporadic fashion. Smutty Sex Romp and Rampage are huge, sprawling stories. I wouldn't be surprised if there are still threads left with underage characters. --Platypus 21:35, 6 August 2020 (UTC)

I fully support the decision to remove underage content, which is why I'm not restoring any "preteen" references since that explicitly establishes her as underage. And I understand why "young woman" makes it clearer that the character isn't underage. Still, I feel as long as we avoid explicit references to characters being underage and explicitly establish these characters as legal age, more ambiguous phrases aren't a factor. "Young woman" has and can be used in reference to underage females and "girl" is often used in reference to females over 18. We're still in the legal right - anyone who doubts the character's age can scroll back to where the age is established and the judicial system has no case against us. You are correct that there are still threads left with underage characters and not even with those stories - Hot and Horny hasn't removed all reference of Miranda being 6. That's the biggest issue. When it comes to "girl" vs. "young woman", I just find that "girl" sounds better with the tone because like I mentioned, "young woman" seems too formal. AgentVincent 22:27, 6 August 2020 (UTC)
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