The Review/Adult Stories/The Devils Daughter
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DirtyMeStoryTime's review of The Devils Daughter:
Nothing reviewed yet. Sorry, this is over 600 pages. It will take a while. I will make notes on here as I go.
Some random grammar mistakes, some more obvious than others. Editor may need to touch up the pages and correct the mistakes, then it would not detract as much as it currently does.
Author tries to use extensive descriptions.
Some red links early on.
Sort of an object oriented feel towards it so far, but given the nature of the main character, and the focus on lust and physical things, rather than on who a person is, that sort of fits the story. Language is very male oriented.
Does the author know that not all women "squirt"?
