User talk:GirlOnGirlFan!
From Create Your Own Story
Just saw your note. As for my writing, yes, same thing, I do okay because of how much I read. Here is my recommendation: Think about how your favorite authors write. Think about how they make the scene flow, prevent repetition, etc. I guess many of us, when we read, we do not really pay attention to how a good author actually makes the story good. We just sort of take it for granted. Please remember, I have been on this site since 2014, and have been writing my own blog since 2013. So, I have had lots of practice. I have looked at things I have posted before and cringed. But, one thing I have found that helps me with descriptions, and why I do okay, is I close my eyes. I imagine myself in the scene. "He pulls her against him roughly, forcing a grunt to escape from between her lips." So, I will close my eyes, and sit in the chair at my desk, since it rolls. I will position my hips the way I imagine the person in the story needs them. I will roll myself in my chair, trying to figure out what it feels like. If my hips buck in the story, I will buck my hips in real life, trying to figure out how I would move, how it would feel. Sometimes, if I am alone and into it, I will use a dildo to simulate how the guy would feel. If he "pounds" me, I will push the dildo in, hard. If he kisses my neck, I will close my eyes and lightly caress my neck, trying to replace the sensation of my fingers with the sensation of his lips in my mind, trying to figure out how it would feel.
Regardless, I have also read alot of books about how to become a writer. The biggest recommendations: Just write. Some of it will suck, some will be okay. Keep it up. Some you will wish would burn in firey death, and some you will look at and go "Hey, this is okay," or "hey, I like this". That is the way it goes. So, you want to write, then write. Write shitty lines, write horrid poems, write cliche plots and regurgitated trash. Write masterpieces and wonderful sentences. Regardless of what happens, just write. You will get better. Read what you wrote. See what works. Change it, destroy it, modify it, reuse it, and write more. This is the key. --Dirty Me 18:33, 1 April 2016 (UTC)
I posted a new page, tell me what you think and if there is any errors tell me and I will fix them or you guys can. This is the first copy of it so there is bound to be mistakes. --User:GirlOnGirlFan! 15:53, 1 April 2016 (UTC)
My apologies for seeming to ignore you. My post advising you to go ahead and post a sample page went astray. As for the page you've posted, I'd say so far, so good. --Platypus 18:50, 1 April 2016 (UTC)
Regarding Suggest that you and Julianne try a different kind of exercise... You seem to be having difficulty separating sentences. Sentences end with periods. Don't use commas to mash multiple sentences together. And please, watch your tenses. Smutty Sex Romp is written in present tense, not past tense. You might also want to review punctuation with dialogue. --Platypus 21:10, 1 April 2016 (UTC)
