User:Fletcher Peninsula

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Hey just a few things this time.
Hey just a few things this time.
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1. So where do you see the the mercenary arc playing out? Is he gonna become a regular mercenary, rising through the ranks? Will he really fight for Hysta, because they seem like the villains, or will he confront that Acrom dude and lead like a mercenary revolt, becoming the hero of Ugarit?
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1. Ok, I see what you are doing with the merc arc. I like the gambling the slaves twist, quite interesting. So will Acrom have female slaves of his own that he will give Faust once he beats him hehe? I am having trouble imagining what he is doing with three slaves in the troll arc, but 4? Damn he will be busy! ;)
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2. Why send Lyna into the princess's chambers alone? I mean I know that you know what you're doing, I was just wondering if you could fill me in?  
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2. The thing is, I never saw the princess being even bi-curious. I mean, I could see her changing that after a few nights in Faust's bedroom. But yeah, its just unexpected because of how proper the princess appears. Btw, how about Corinna for the princess' name? I like it.
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3. Is there a form of birth control or anything, because if Helena and Lyna have been sex slaves how have they not given Faust any children. For the record I am against sterilization, because thats just wrong. But Idk
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3. I like the idea of a primitive drug for birth control. I think that it may be interesting if one or more of his slaves were to conceive and give him a bastard. Not being noble but still having royal blood, the bastard could grow up and join the army Obviously I am getting ahead of myself, but it would be interesting to do if this thing grows for several hundred pages or if there was a sequel haha.
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4. And Alamedia. How do you see that playing out? I for one cannot wait to start writing about all the fun our hero will be having there hehe ;)
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4. Ditto on Alamedia, it will have to be introduced later. We can build up the anticipation by including little details about it, almost like an El Dorado type deal where it seems too good to be true.
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5. And of course let me know if there is anything wrong about the way I am doing this. I am new and respect this story too much to fuck anything up for you.
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5. As far as original ideas, I was thinking about introducing an elvish element to the story. Maybe they could be a noble race that comes from beyond the sea or something fighting the brutish Hystians? They would of course have plenty of gorgeous women and could have a divine quality about them. Let me know what you think.
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6. Two other things. I agree with you on the ice cream thing haha. Didn't give it much thought because it was the only way to describe that method of sucking cock, you know? haha. I have begun changing it though.
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7. I noticed the name of the merc commander is the same as Faust's name. I was thinking that we could eliminate Faust's name, because royals do not have last names, as this is a symbol of the common man. They instead have obscure dynastic names. So instead of being Elizabeth Windsor, the Queen of the UK would be known as Elizabeth OF Windsor, or OF the House of Windsor. So we could give Faust a German sounding dynasty because I see a German quality in the Seven Mountains Kingdom, and of course Faust itself is a German name if I am not mistaken. So I was thinking the House of Brandenburg for the dynastic name. Tell me what you think.
--[[User:Ollie Williams|Ollie Williams]]
--[[User:Ollie Williams|Ollie Williams]]

Revision as of 21:35, 27 January 2010

I am probably the last person who should write a story. I have dyslexia, I have a hard time projecting my thoughts into written material and English is not my first language. But hey! I need some way to cope with all those weird stories forming in my head every day.


I currently have two projects that I am working on. Both are in the adult category.


The Devils Daughter Is about a satanic cult member named Sharon Abrahamson who is tasked with finding tree sacrificial maidens in order to summon a demon and take over the world! Loots of mind breaking and dirty sex!


War and Sex Is an low fantasy adult story. The main character is a prince named Faust Kaladaris. Its mainly about dominance and submission in an more non consensual tone.


Bad spellers off the word, unti!

lol Nah, I just had a lot of pressure working on it. The RPG style template was really difficult to work with, especially when it spanned several unnecessary options that would just work as a single option. That really drug me down and I just want to get to the story already! I have a great story to tell, darn it! xD

Ah, well. Hope you would read it when I get to the exciting part of the story. ;)

--OminousFlare 11:40, 29 September 2009 (PDT)


Hey just a few things this time.

1. Ok, I see what you are doing with the merc arc. I like the gambling the slaves twist, quite interesting. So will Acrom have female slaves of his own that he will give Faust once he beats him hehe? I am having trouble imagining what he is doing with three slaves in the troll arc, but 4? Damn he will be busy! ;)

2. The thing is, I never saw the princess being even bi-curious. I mean, I could see her changing that after a few nights in Faust's bedroom. But yeah, its just unexpected because of how proper the princess appears. Btw, how about Corinna for the princess' name? I like it.

3. I like the idea of a primitive drug for birth control. I think that it may be interesting if one or more of his slaves were to conceive and give him a bastard. Not being noble but still having royal blood, the bastard could grow up and join the army Obviously I am getting ahead of myself, but it would be interesting to do if this thing grows for several hundred pages or if there was a sequel haha.

4. Ditto on Alamedia, it will have to be introduced later. We can build up the anticipation by including little details about it, almost like an El Dorado type deal where it seems too good to be true.

5. As far as original ideas, I was thinking about introducing an elvish element to the story. Maybe they could be a noble race that comes from beyond the sea or something fighting the brutish Hystians? They would of course have plenty of gorgeous women and could have a divine quality about them. Let me know what you think.

6. Two other things. I agree with you on the ice cream thing haha. Didn't give it much thought because it was the only way to describe that method of sucking cock, you know? haha. I have begun changing it though.

7. I noticed the name of the merc commander is the same as Faust's name. I was thinking that we could eliminate Faust's name, because royals do not have last names, as this is a symbol of the common man. They instead have obscure dynastic names. So instead of being Elizabeth Windsor, the Queen of the UK would be known as Elizabeth OF Windsor, or OF the House of Windsor. So we could give Faust a German sounding dynasty because I see a German quality in the Seven Mountains Kingdom, and of course Faust itself is a German name if I am not mistaken. So I was thinking the House of Brandenburg for the dynastic name. Tell me what you think. --Ollie Williams

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