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| + | Something I feel about Freedom is that there is no real choice, for you. Is that meant to be part of the story? Like you only could change your life after exiting the machine? Also, there is a logic problem in there. Were any of them rotting? Joey survived without anything as well. I said that the fantasy world might be a version of heaven. They were deluded, but was that a curse? Plus, if Joey was in his own world, what happened to everyone? What's with the gun? Wasn't it meant to be a fantasy? If so, why did he have to work. Those are some problems/comments/criticisms I have. Enjoy! | ||
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Please make sure to include the title of the story as a category on each page you post. If you don't know how to add categories, please review the Tutorial, especially Basic page format.--Platypus 02:48, 26 January 2012 (UTC)
Comments not long enough to be in their own review
Something I feel about Freedom is that there is no real choice, for you. Is that meant to be part of the story? Like you only could change your life after exiting the machine? Also, there is a logic problem in there. Were any of them rotting? Joey survived without anything as well. I said that the fantasy world might be a version of heaven. They were deluded, but was that a curse? Plus, if Joey was in his own world, what happened to everyone? What's with the gun? Wasn't it meant to be a fantasy? If so, why did he have to work. Those are some problems/comments/criticisms I have. Enjoy!
Review for Freedom
Hey! Sorry for the long reply. I was inactive for quite a while due to studies at School. Anyway, I'm at the moment reading up your story and will be reviewing it soon. Be sure to check up soon for the review! -- Heyoeveryone 4 April 2012
Done! Take a look here! -- Heyoeveryone 4 April 2012
Ah. I see why now. It seems as though someone has written over your work. Or more precisely, Don't go to work. This usually happens with these kinds of names. I suggest you change the name, use the technique with all the forward slashes (You know, like 'Example/Don't go to work), or just chuck some sort of code in front (like for example with Remember, it uses a 'R:' in front of every link). You can also do this 'Example|Don't go to work'. That also works.
So, It is indeed a broken link that has ruined my review. Though, don't take it to heart. I can easily modify the review and scale it accordingly, if that is what you like. So tell me when you fix the problem, and I'll fix my review. Oh and also name who you are at the end of your replies. Makes it easier for me to track you down. --Heyoeveryone 5 May 2012
