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-	Poor grammar. Make sure you put speacs after your punctuation marks. You do sometimes, but not always. Also, make sure you capitalize your names, and the beginning of sentences.“fine Elliot”Byron blew harder at his pipeBlowing into it would just send a shower of sparks and ash all over the carpet. You suck air in, then blow out the smoke, not through the pipe.These are just technical things, though, not a big deal. Mostly, your writing is pretty good. Work a bit on characterization. I don't know anything about these men, and as such, I find it hard to care about them at all. Make Byron a little more sinister, and Elliot a little easier to relate to. I like that he's in his pajamas, it makes him seem defenseless. Very good there.You definitely show a lot of promise as an author. Keep writing and reading and editing. Good luck!Oh, just noticed one more thing. Why is the key to this door in his pajama pocket, especially if it's quite heavy and awkward? That's odd. Was he expecting this guest?	+	Can i still play all the past world of warcraft cetonnt now that cataclysm is out?Im still new to the game, and maybe im misunderstanding how the storyline works on a fundamental level. i want to start at the very beggining of the game. Then play through all the original cetonnt, then burning crusade, then wrath of the lich king through cataclysm. But the game just seems to start with cataclysm. Can i still play all the old stuff?

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Can i still play all the past world of warcraft cetonnt now that cataclysm is out?Im still new to the game, and maybe im misunderstanding how the storyline works on a fundamental level. i want to start at the very beggining of the game. Then play through all the original cetonnt, then burning crusade, then wrath of the lich king through cataclysm. But the game just seems to start with cataclysm. Can i still play all the old stuff?