Alex/Hallie Seduction

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Hallie/Alex Seduction
Hallie/Alex Seduction
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Hallie knocks at Alex’s door, slowly Greg stands up and walks toward the door, doing a sort of impromptu spin as he approaches, and then opening it,
 
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Hallie stands there awkwardly
 
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A:  Ah, come in, you’ll find that all the preparations are in place for our game, madame
 
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H:  I’m glad, I look forward to a good game.  
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Hallie knocks at Alex’s door, slowly Greg stands up and walks toward the door, doing a sort of impromptu spin as he approaches, and then opens it.
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A:  Perhaps you’ll have more than that to look forward to
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Hallie stands there awkwardly.
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H: what do you mean?
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<center>ALEX
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A:  I mean simply you and I might consider a more intimate sort of play after the event.   (puts his arm around Hallie)
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Ah, come in, you’ll find that all the preparations are in place for our game, madame.
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H:  Greg, stop it…  (Hallie abruptly jams her elbow into his stomach, Greg releases her, coughing).
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HALLIE
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A:  Well, (cough) to business, would you like some tea?
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I’m glad, I look forward to a good game.
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H: No, thank you.
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ALEX
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They sit down at a carefully prepared chess board
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Perhaps you’ll have more than that to look forward to...
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A:   The first move is your, my dear.
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HALLIE
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What do you mean?
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ALEX
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I mean simply you and I might consider a more intimate sort of play after the event.</center>
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Alex puts his arm around Hallie.
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<center>HALLIE
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Greg, stop it…   </center>
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Hallie jams her elbow into Greg's stomach, Greg releases her, coughing.
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<center>ALEX
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Well, (cough) to business, would you like some tea?
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HALLIE
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No, thank you.</center>
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They sit down at a carefully prepared chess board.
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<center>ALEX
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The first move is yours, my dear.</center>
Hallie moves a pawn.
Hallie moves a pawn.
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A: Ah, fairly typical, I can see what your thinking already, Livy.
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<center>ALEX
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Ah, fairly typical, I can see what you're thinking already, Livy.
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HALLIE
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Oh, and what’s that?
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ALEX
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Well, I couldn’t ''tell'' you.  Then you'd change your strategy.
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HALLIE
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At the moment I don’t have a strategy.
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ALEX
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Oh, I’ll bet you do. In fact, I’d be willing to make a little wager on the outcome of this evening’s game.
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HALLIE
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Fine, but if I win, you have to stop hitting on me.  Believe me, it would be worth more than any amount of money.
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ALEX
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Ah, so the policy of romantic aggression once again yields a monetary reward.  Alright, I’ll forgo my payment as well in trade for something from you.
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HALLIE
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What’s that, Gregory?
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ALEX
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One kiss from your ruby red lips.
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H:  Oh, and what’s that?
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Alex stands up and walks over to Hallie’s side of the table, and starts to take her hand, Hallie pushes him back, he stumbles.
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A: well, I can’t tell you for fear you might alter your strategy.
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<center>HALLIE
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H:  well, at the moment I don’t have a strategy.
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Sit down, you haven’t won yet.  But I accept.
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A: oh, I’ll bet you do, in fact, I’d be willing to make a little wager on the outcome of this evening’s game.
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ALEX
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H:  Fine, but if I win, you have to stop hitting on me, I’ll forgo any cash consolation.
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Ah, so I look forward to the pleasure you will offer.
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A: ah, so the policy of romantic aggression once again yields a monetary reward.  Alright, I’ll forgo my payment in trade for something from you?
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HALLIE
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H: and what’s that, gregory?
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Don’t go counting your chickens, you’ll find a few of them have Ascarad Worms.
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A:  One kiss from your ruby red lips.
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Alex stands up and walks over to hallie’s side of the table, and starts to take her hand, Hallie pushes him back, he stumbles.
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INT. DAY. House.
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H:  Sit Down, you haven’t won yet, I accept your wager, by the way.
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(A little while later.)
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A:  Ah, so I look forward to the pleasure you will offer.
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<center>ALEX
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H:  Don’t go counting your chickens, you’ll find a few of them have Ascarad Worms
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Another victory for the skilled champion.
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HALLIE
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A little while later,
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You played very well.
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A:  Another victory for the skilled champion
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ALEX
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H: You played very well.
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Yes, and the time has come to collect my reward.</center>
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A:  Yes, and now the time has come for you to yield up to me my reward.
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Alex walks over, this time Hallie doesn’t force him away.
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Alex walks over, this time hallie doesn’t force him away…
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There’s a pause, and they kiss, briefly, exploratory… and then again for longer, and then again, (Greg eventually snaps a picture) but then Hallie pushes Greg off of her.
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There’s a pause, and they kiss, briefly, exploratory… and then again for longer, and then again, but Hallie pushes greg off fer
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<center>HALLIE
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H: stop it, Greg… stop!
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Stop it, Greg… stop! I’m leaving,
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H: I’m leaving,
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A:  Well, take care, mademoiselle, Liv.
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Well, take care, mademoiselle. Liv.</center>
Hallie walks out and slams the door behind her.
Hallie walks out and slams the door behind her.

Revision as of 03:12, 7 June 2007

This is the first seduction of the film, in which we realize that Kati and Alex are definitely going through with the bet. In this scene, Alex "seduces" Hallie by making a bet with her that if he wins (some game), she'll kiss him. He cheats, and wins, thereby getting his photo.

They are playing chess. Hallie gets up for a moment and Alex switches the position of some of the pieces while she's not looking. When she kisses him, they both start getting somewhat more into it than anticipated. He caps the photo while they have their eyes closed. This is almost unimportant, as the most important aspect of it is that Hallie gets quite disturbed--not only by Alex's behavior, but by her own willingness to betray Dylan.

HALLIE
Stop it. Stop it, that's enough.

Here's another draft for the scene, tell me what you think, keep what you like and re-write the rest.

Hallie/Alex Seduction

Hallie knocks at Alex’s door, slowly Greg stands up and walks toward the door, doing a sort of impromptu spin as he approaches, and then opens it.

Hallie stands there awkwardly.

ALEX

Ah, come in, you’ll find that all the preparations are in place for our game, madame.

HALLIE

I’m glad, I look forward to a good game.

ALEX

Perhaps you’ll have more than that to look forward to...

HALLIE

What do you mean?

ALEX

I mean simply you and I might consider a more intimate sort of play after the event.

Alex puts his arm around Hallie.

HALLIE Greg, stop it…

Hallie jams her elbow into Greg's stomach, Greg releases her, coughing.

ALEX

Well, (cough) to business, would you like some tea?

HALLIE

No, thank you.

They sit down at a carefully prepared chess board.

ALEX The first move is yours, my dear.

Hallie moves a pawn.

ALEX

Ah, fairly typical, I can see what you're thinking already, Livy.

HALLIE

Oh, and what’s that?

ALEX

Well, I couldn’t tell you. Then you'd change your strategy.

HALLIE

At the moment I don’t have a strategy.

ALEX

Oh, I’ll bet you do. In fact, I’d be willing to make a little wager on the outcome of this evening’s game.

HALLIE

Fine, but if I win, you have to stop hitting on me. Believe me, it would be worth more than any amount of money.

ALEX

Ah, so the policy of romantic aggression once again yields a monetary reward. Alright, I’ll forgo my payment as well in trade for something from you.

HALLIE

What’s that, Gregory?

ALEX

One kiss from your ruby red lips.

Alex stands up and walks over to Hallie’s side of the table, and starts to take her hand, Hallie pushes him back, he stumbles.

HALLIE

Sit down, you haven’t won yet. But I accept.

ALEX

Ah, so I look forward to the pleasure you will offer.

HALLIE

Don’t go counting your chickens, you’ll find a few of them have Ascarad Worms.

CUT TO-

INT. DAY. House.

(A little while later.)

ALEX

Another victory for the skilled champion.

HALLIE

You played very well.

ALEX

Yes, and the time has come to collect my reward.

Alex walks over, this time Hallie doesn’t force him away.

There’s a pause, and they kiss, briefly, exploratory… and then again for longer, and then again, (Greg eventually snaps a picture) but then Hallie pushes Greg off of her.

HALLIE

Stop it, Greg… stop! I’m leaving,

ALEX

Well, take care, mademoiselle. Liv.

Hallie walks out and slams the door behind her.


Previously: Alex and Kati's Bet Next: Invitation

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