Talk:Furry World
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I was wondering if anyone still read this story, I could use some feedback as well. I'm pretty sure that my writing well...sucks, but I'd like to hear peoples opinion. I'm the one who's been working on the Male Feline. If anyone wants me to, I WILL write for the story path they want. I do do requests Wolvesatyourdoor 6/29/10 2:09 A.M. PST
Hey this is mobby123 so far iv read most of the paths including the male feline the writing itself is good but the whole gay thing isnt my style no offence but anyways i was wondering if you could finish a branch of the male fox thank you
I'll try my hand at working on the female fox line, however, I won't be able to work on it until I either get my old laptop up and running or get a new one. No definite dates yet, but will hopefully be able to work on it by the end of summer. HellFyreBastion- Wednesday, April 25, 2012 P.S. I'll do my best to update this when I make progress on the laptop deal
Thanks for the response I would do it myself but I'm crap at writing :P from mobby123
Well it seems that I'm not the only one who still goes on here. I can't believe it's been two years since I made that first message. I definitely need to start doing some kind of work on here Wolvesatyourdoors
I might throw my paw at working at a few of the branches when i have some spare time, which is not much but i will give what i can to help make this story more enjoyable. Shomet
Uhm...just realized I could easily edit on this...duh... HellFyreBastion- August 2nd, 2012 P.S. I think I've gotten most of the laptop funds together, so that should make it easier to write more P.P.S. All pages I'm working on will say: "Template: HFB working on", so please don't edit those.
Gonna start working on the female rabbit line to kill some time since its pretty much been abandoned since someone created it. If you can do better dialogue, be my guest. -645645
I've been reading stories on the site for a couple months now and I figured I can contribute. I'm expanding the male horse section right now. I'm open to any suggestions on my work. -Finisher 12.4.2012
Hey can i edit the male dragon section as im thinking that may need more info on it. Thx and you can change it if you dont like it.
13/01/13: It's Gr33NSTL here, just saw this post on Reddit. No way that I'm not absolutely all over this. I'll first read everything else, and then I'm gonna just go crazy. I've been looking for a writing outlet, and BOOM! One just threw itself in my face. It's about to get real, friends. -Gr33NSTL EDIT: My plan now is to just read all the storylines, and I'm going to write every page I come to that hasn't been done or started by someone else. I'll leave a few options, and once I've gone down every path, I'll start again from the top. Get some variety, and keep things moving in all directions.
Cool beans, Gr33NSTL. I'm working on male equine a couple of times a week, but it would be fun to try to expand on things someone else writes. Maybe we could have a back and forth on a couple of story lines. I'll leave your work, but I edit for grammar when I notice. Hope you do the same. -Finisher 1.19.2013
Been reading this through and I feel like it has some great potential. I'm currently interested in working on the feline storys, especially getting a female option for the male. I'm not an author or anything, but I can write decently. I'll also look at grammar, but avoid changing what's there. If anyone else could add to it, that'd be great too. -Blue1003 3/23/13
Just found this site and decided to try working on it. I think I will be working primarily on the female rabbit story mostly as well as going anywhere else that people seem to have abandoned and or would like me to work on. If there is a story arc you would like me to work with feel free to tell me, as long as it isn't male on male I would be happy to do any story line you would suggest. Flashbackwolf 5/23/2013
Not sure if anyone will see this, but I hope no one will mind horribly if I add bit here and there. Maybe add a few lines and so on. Nothing ground breaking. -CommonPlauge (10/17/2013)
Problems and Solutions.
TysonLaFollette here. This story could be awesome, but has some problems.
Problem 1 Too many unused options. Dead ends are serious let-downs. Nothing bothers me as much as following a story arc I like, just to have it die in red links.
Solution 1 Limit the length of each arc. I suggest giving each species/sex two options per page, and making each 'trail' only go through three links before it ends. This would, for example, give the male fox 8 different sexy endings. I think it's a satisfactory amount, and still doable.
Problem 2 Rambling. Some arcs have useless pages with unimportant choices. When chasing a potential lover, the reader doesn't want a 'give up the chase' option. Pages that don't move the reader closer to a bedroom scene aren't useful.
Solution 2 Cut out and leave out useless pages. If it doesn't involve the choice of primary location, love interest, and sex position, then it probably doesn't add much.
Problem 3 Un-sexy endings. I haven't found any yet. But let's not get started with them. People read this because they want to read a story about a handsome wolf and a lithe cheetah having bodacious sex on the beach. Not because they want to die on page two when their character fails to jump between balconies.
Solution 3 If it doesn't end in sex, don't write it in. Sex is the goal.
(2014/9/2)
